Fanfic: GoTP Plot Blurb!

[Steven Mar]

har...@hebron.connected.com (Eric Harding) writes:

> The Earth has been peaceful since the Autobots, led by Optimus
> Prime, forced the Decepticons to retreat back to their homeworld
> of Cybertron. However, that peace may be shattered forever as
> the Decepticons return to Earth!

I like your story! I have some more comments, though. Let's start
here.... This plot hook makes it sound like the Decepticons didn't
conquer Cybertron before the Movie, but got ditched there by the
Autobots. You are trying to fill in the pre-Movie era, right?

> But, the universe itself is threatened when Unicron, the planet
> eater, awakens a greater danger than even Megatron. Can Earth
> survive two Decepticon factions battling one another, and if so,
> can it survive the coming of Unicron?

Who's in charge of the other faction? Galvatron? I hope so... I always
felt that Galvatron and Megatron should not be the same person.

>Well, hope that helps you figure out what's going on...:)

Indeed. Thanks for following up on my suggestion. And now, some comments
on installment 4:

1) I like what you're doing with Fortress Maximus. Interesting character
development.

2) Why does Airwaves (any relation to the Micromaster Airwave?) need to
transform into his alt mode to relay his recon info to the Autobots?

3) I don't know about your explanation for Wheelie's rhymes... it doesn't
seem to have any canon backing, IMO. Do you plan on saying how he got
stuck on Quintessa?

4) I like the bickering between the Decepticon jets. Very humorous.

5) You might want to proofread your installments a little more in the
future. You had some typos in this one.

- Steve

[Eric Harding]

Steven Mar (sm...@husc7.harvard.edu) wrote:
: har...@hebron.connected.com (Eric Harding) writes:

: > The Earth has been peaceful since the Autobots, led by Optimus
: > Prime, forced the Decepticons to retreat back to their homeworld
: > of Cybertron. However, that peace may be shattered forever as
: > the Decepticons return to Earth!

: I like your story! I have some more comments, though. Let's start
: here.... This plot hook makes it sound like the Decepticons didn't
: conquer Cybertron before the Movie, but got ditched there by the
: Autobots. You are trying to fill in the pre-Movie era, right?

: > But, the universe itself is threatened when Unicron, the planet
: > eater, awakens a greater danger than even Megatron. Can Earth
: > survive two Decepticon factions battling one another, and if so,
: > can it survive the coming of Unicron?

: Who's in charge of the other faction? Galvatron? I hope so... I always
: felt that Galvatron and Megatron should not be the same person.

:)

: >Well, hope that helps you figure out what's going on...:)

: Indeed. Thanks for following up on my suggestion. And now, some comments
: on installment 4:

: 1) I like what you're doing with Fortress Maximus. Interesting character
: development.

Thanks! I hae always thought there would be neutral factions on
Cybertron, and they would need some strong to protect some of them.

: 2) Why does Airwaves (any relation to the Micromaster Airwave?) need to

: transform into his alt mode to relay his recon info to the Autobots?

ARRRGGHHH!!!!! There's a micromaster with the same name? Damn. AAnd I
thought I had an original name. As for transforming, why not? Soundwave
does it.

: 3) I don't know about your explanation for Wheelie's rhymes... it doesn't

: seem to have any canon backing, IMO. Do you plan on saying how he got
: stuck on Quintessa?

Canon? We don't need no stinking Canon! :)

Seriously, this is m own timeline. The movie doesn't take place in it.

: 4) I like the bickering between the Decepticon jets. Very humorous.

Thanks!

: 5) You might want to proofread your installments a little more in the

: future. You had some typos in this one.

I know. I forgot to run it through SEDIT's spell checker first.

: - Steve

Eric