Revised Please use this one The Next Generation August 3 2023 Jill

[jill stockinger]

Revised. Please use this. July 28, 2023. 

I HAD used the ellipsis at the beginning, to try to  suggest that there were generations before the current  generations, all marching

one behind the other, "superseded" each time by the NEXT generation, 

that it was a CONTINUING process. Those "dots" left a SPACE to indicate them, but I do not feel it was very successful, so I dropped it.  Jill

The New Generation         by Jill Stockinger

 

Through the ages, the prior generation is always one  

step behind the next generation who always

wants to take over, wants to claim its

rightful place. The young ones shine

so brightly, wrapped in fiery anger,  

in the proud arrogance

of youth.

 

The earlier generation is fighting lost

battles, demanding respect and

insisting it has the answers,

but no generation has

turned this world

into a paradise.

 

The old ones get pushed aside. Ignored,

they find it easier to admit their past

mistakes and ask forgiveness, now

that their rage is more like

mist than red-hot fire.

 

 

 

[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

I like it Jill. It's near perfect. You might consider "mist, not red-hot fire" instead of using "than," but that's a very small change, and your choice of course. "Than" didn't suggest the contrast to me, but a comma followed by "not," although extremely subtle, did.

Nedra

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