I REWORKED last Week's poem to try and make it More HUMOROUS for March 27 2025 discussion Jill

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Mar 24, 2025, 11:52:55 PM3/24/25

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I changed the whole last stanza of my poem, RIPENESS, in an effort to make the whole poem KEEP ONE TONE throughout.

And I worked to make the whole poem more humorous. I changed the TITLE; hopefully, it comes across as more humorous.

Oh, Dear Plum! Jill

To A Plum About To Be Eaten by Jill Stockinger

I lift a plump deep-purple plum
sunning itself on a branch to see
if it’s ready to be plucked and eaten.
I think the purple of the plum may be
a sign of its deep mourning.

William Carlos Williams used the phrase,
“Forgive me they were delicious so sweet.”
For all his happy words of praise,
even a poet likes to eat.

My mouth waters for the sweet-tart taste,
but I consider it may be hard for the plum to know
the bite of death is coming. Dear Soon-To-Be-Departed
Plum, take comfort: you live inside my poem!