Not great but I just wrote this one, VERY quickly HERPES AND HARPS for June 8 2023 Jill

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Jun 4, 2023, 1:02:40 PM6/4/23

to Rennaissance writing Group, Kaolin Fire, Robert L. Smith

Dear Compadres,

I just wrote this one, VERY quickly, and without ANY revising.
You will probably be able to tell.
So this is one of my two for discussion on Thursday, June 8 2023.

Herpes and Harps by Jill Stockinger

Your poem barely registered as I scrolled down the page.
I thought it was titled Herpes.
I fleetingly caught the first three lines which my eyes revised
into lines my brain commended as apropos for the title:

Herpes

These herps that collect
in the eddies of lovemaking,
we find them days later

and I mused, as I continued scrolling, “Is that what
the little blisters caused by herpes are called? Little herps?
How fitting! Like little perps!
Perpetrators of crime, yes,

and on I went, still searching for that one poem
I wanted to read again, sure it was somewhere on that page.
Wrong again!
I went back to read the poem, Herpes, in its full glory.

Much to my surprise, the poem I found is this:

Harps

These harps that collect
in the eddies of lovemaking,
we find them days later
still strung with the silk
strings that bound us so together.

by D.R. Wagner.

And I was disappointed. Again.