Helen's two poems for July 6th

[Helen Cooper]

Dear fellow writers,

I hope you are all enjoying the 4th celebrations; there are murmurings in my head that may bear fruit later.

I have two short poems this week.  Back-Alley Buildings (a somewhat humerous Haiku) and Welcome.

Not sure which version of the Haiku to choose; the only difference is the last line. What do you think?

Helen

[Marian Kile]

Helen,

I too like both of the haiku but I think the first is best - I think basic means unadorned. 

I think "Welcome" is perfect but maybe if the title was changed to "All Are Welcome" it might be more welcoming. (Pun intended) 

Marian Kile

916-217-1053 Cell

--
You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "WritingGroupRen" group.
To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to writinggroupr...@googlegroups.com.
To view this discussion on the web visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/writinggroupren/1343305636.1244599.1688486703826%40mail.yahoo.com.
For more options, visit https://groups.google.com/d/optout.

[Helen Cooper]

Thank you, Marian. I'll think about the title.

Helen

[Celia Mccauley]

Hello Helen

I like the first version. Brief, simple and to the point. Sad but true. 

The second poem is beautiful. 

I hope to see you Thursday.

Celia

On Tuesday, July 4, 2023 at 09:05:10 AM PDT, 'Helen Cooper' via WritingGroupRen <writing...@googlegroups.com> wrote:

--