Meaning to be helpful, but - I'd say either change nose to conk in line
two or replace three and four with lines containing a bit more
development of theme/ action? It's currently that you've brought this
nose in in line two and then the word appears again in a sort of running
on the spot effect in the next line. Do you see what I mean?
I don't suppose it matters, and you're probably gone. I'm even a bit
worried that you're me and that I posted that limerick during a rum
blackout.
Best wishes,
L, Gravesend.