Thesis edits

[Angela Leasca]

Hi guys,

I went through all of the edits our discussants made and created a new google doc for our final version. It's in the thesis drafts folder and its called FINAL THESIS 4/23 with discussant edits. 

I made as many changes as I could right away, but there are still lots of track changes that still need to be addressed. The majority of these shouldn't take very long, so I think it would be best if everyone could spend an hour or so going through the document this weekend and making some edits, so that we can use our meeting time on Tuesday to work on things that need more collaboration. 

Also, here is a compilation of bigger comments from our discussants and also from Laura's notes:

• Discussion could be pumped up a bit. Towards the end you may want to develop some ideas of how you would do this differently based on what you have learned
  
• Double check that all abbreviations are spelled out on first appearance
  
• The 9.4% prevalence is an aggregate of all experiments. This should be clarified.
  
• Be careful with the word "significant" - only use it for statistically significant results
  
• Bass are largely in fresh or fresh-tidal water so I would delete the initial mention of the estuary and discuss the Chesapeake Bay Watershed
  
• MD DNR 2007 is not in reference (I think this is fish facts, we need to check that it is consistent throughout)
  
• A table with numbers of fish per treatment would really help (p 22-24)
  
• Need to provide information on the diluent water - hardness, pH, conductivity
  
• Give organization and write personal communication for Mullin
  
• Survival table for each experiment would make results clearer
• Why long term exposures if majority of estrogen is gone within 5 days?
• No mention of correlation between bass breeding, poultry litter application, and late spring-early summer thunderstorm runoff
• Earlier - give a detailed description of sexual differentiation in LMB. In discussion/conclusion may want to expand or speculate on possibility that exposure during the critical sexual developmental period may be the most sensitive period for LMB
• Recall sexual differentiation in discussion
• Include a null hypothesis 
• Double check appendix order/letters
• Fish vs. fishes
• Include standard curve for Vtg
• Look into androgens?

[Lance T. Yonkos]

Nice work Angela –this is a big help.  I agree, if you guys can address the majority of these changes over the weekend that will significantly simplify next Tuesday.  If you run into any major snags addressing some of the edits, send me an email and I’ll try and clarify or make suggestions.

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