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JT
Mar 4, 2008, 8:55:05 PM3/4/08
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Clay Ward
Mar 5, 2008, 1:19:20 AM3/5/08
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Nice work!
My favorite parts are imagery. The feather being left on the key
board. The concept that bullets attack words in the virtual world.
Actually the concept of the visual story going in and out of
cyberspace is really great. And I also like how anime the whole story
reads. I can just see those big, vibrating eyes emoting like crazy.
The scope is perfect. Plenty of space for art to elaborate with
details. And space for notions like cosmology and plotline
foreshadowing as well.
Perhaps also the resolution gives Marcel and Brittany a way to begin
their activism for real. Perhaps they turn to their teacher and
demand to get moving - and then he smiles and says something like "You
two always surprise me. Yes, now we can begin..." And maybe the
feather at the end can do more than just fall. Perhaps it is handed
to the teacher who examines it questioningly? Or to Brittany as she
begins to think as an activist?
OK, so there's a lot to work with here. What's our next step? Do we
discuss or take turns making changes or do we all just work on it at
once?
-clay
My favorite parts are imagery. The feather being left on the key
board. The concept that bullets attack words in the virtual world.
Actually the concept of the visual story going in and out of
cyberspace is really great. And I also like how anime the whole story
reads. I can just see those big, vibrating eyes emoting like crazy.
The scope is perfect. Plenty of space for art to elaborate with
details. And space for notions like cosmology and plotline
foreshadowing as well.
Perhaps also the resolution gives Marcel and Brittany a way to begin
their activism for real. Perhaps they turn to their teacher and
demand to get moving - and then he smiles and says something like "You
two always surprise me. Yes, now we can begin..." And maybe the
feather at the end can do more than just fall. Perhaps it is handed
to the teacher who examines it questioningly? Or to Brittany as she
begins to think as an activist?
OK, so there's a lot to work with here. What's our next step? Do we
discuss or take turns making changes or do we all just work on it at
once?
-clay
John Till
Mar 5, 2008, 8:55:30 AM3/5/08
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I'm open to folks just editing the page. There's no version control (I don't think), but I have the soft copy of the original to fall back to.
So I guess I hit my goal of trying to leave enough room for an artist to put their own touch on the story.
The latter half needs some attention as I was just trying to get the ideas out for review.
- JT
Jim H2Os
Mar 5, 2008, 6:25:32 PM3/5/08
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Love it John! :)
very cool visions for them to work with for sure.
take care,
Jim
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Clay Ward
Apr 8, 2008, 1:34:00 AM4/8/08
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I added a list of goals, an introduction, and fleshed out the first
sections of dialogue. Hopefully I haven't strayed from JT's intent.
Anyone want to take a crack at the last couple of sections?
-clay
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sections of dialogue. Hopefully I haven't strayed from JT's intent.
Anyone want to take a crack at the last couple of sections?
-clay
Click on http://groups.google.com/group/tam-plot-staff/web/spec-story
nikola gorko
Apr 9, 2008, 8:02:00 PM4/9/08
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Oh my! The newest revision sounds great so far!
I have one thing to add though which I meant to add some weeks ago and
forgot:
IMO Lightbridge (Marcel's online alter-ego) should either be a Troll
hunter or shaman, or a Tauren-hunter, druid, or shaman. I feel like
her personality and role in this comic matches these WoW races and
classes better, they are def. more of the tough/strong female type,
the Tauren people being particularily close to matters of nature and
of the earth.
Plus, night elves can't have mohawks-- they have shampoo commercial-
type hairstyles only. :X
The other female character, Brittany, would be more likely to have a
night-elf as her online alter-ego methinks.
I have one thing to add though which I meant to add some weeks ago and
forgot:
IMO Lightbridge (Marcel's online alter-ego) should either be a Troll
hunter or shaman, or a Tauren-hunter, druid, or shaman. I feel like
her personality and role in this comic matches these WoW races and
classes better, they are def. more of the tough/strong female type,
the Tauren people being particularily close to matters of nature and
of the earth.
Plus, night elves can't have mohawks-- they have shampoo commercial-
type hairstyles only. :X
The other female character, Brittany, would be more likely to have a
night-elf as her online alter-ego methinks.
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