Re: Help me Obie One Your my only hope

[Mike Omelanuk]

Liza, I've made a 1st pass through chapter one and will continue on to 2 & 3 later today. You should be able to see the annotated file in your dropbox folder. (This is a test to see if I finally started to figure this out.) I did see some canon issues, but all of them can be fixed with minor changes. I did some minor proofing as well. There are inconsistencies in spelling, capitalization, etc. I'm sure I didn't catch them all. 

You should know that so far, the story will fit the Swarm Cycle just fine. I'll do more later this morning. Mike

On Sat, Mar 7, 2026 at 11:14 AM Liza Devereaux <liza.de...@gmail.com> wrote:

So I'm sending you the first 3 chapters of my swarm tale. Fred seams to think I have a canon issue and before I go deeper I thought I should check with you or TH or Zen. TH told me to contact Zen or you , Zen appears to be on sabbatical, so that leaves you as my only hope so far.  If I get to far out of canon fixing it will be harder. Anyway if you could look it over I'd appreciate it.

[Liza Devereaux]

Thanks Mike!

[fred daddio]

Liza,

I have proofed Chapter 3 after finding it on Dropbox.  I am struggling to navigate that program, so I don't know yet how to put my proofed copy into your dropbox.  I did get it uploaded to mine.  Here is the link:

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/o7dxhw63j00g81e6kkxv8/Ten-Plus-Fred.chapter-3-proofed.2026.03.12.docx?rlkey=etqkd4iyoc8is1at20yh18sg7&st=twofb06w&dl=0

I am enjoying your story.  Thanks for letting me work on it!

Fred

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