Jordan's Dilemma

[James Maness]

OK, friends. Let’s try this again. Many of you thought just adding my proposed Chapter 3 to this tale left much unsaid, that it needed more. I decided you were correct, and the addition grew. Please review my second attempt (attached) and comment on it. I really want to put this one to bed and return to writing my next book.

Thanks,
Jim
(SWMoHermit)

[Mike Omelanuk]

Canon-wise I think in pretty good shape. There are some inconsistencies that I'm not sure that I caught all of them. Examples Atlantis vs Atalantisat and similar. Tu'ull (correct) vs Tu'Ul. I can never do a good job on British spelling vs US ll vs l. Only a few real spelling errors or typos. 

Mike