stoos communique to attract outsiders

[marco.zijlstra]

Hi,

Yesterday Deborah and I have been brainstorming on a stoos communique to attract outsiders. 

This morning it was still in my head so needed to get it out ;-) Go ahead, review, edit and add your 2 cents and see if we can come up with a message that  resonates with a more diverse group of people ;-)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AfA_5aNBH2VHUGHrtQinCzuhi5TZlZSxPqC618H2-Pw/edit

All the best,

Marco

[Astrid Claessen]

Hi Marco (& Deborah),

I like the sound of it.

First feedback: most of the items reference to "organizations" but the first sentence references to "our society".

Personally I think organization is also more appropriate in that sentence.

I'll have a more detailed look later on.

Best regards,

Astrid 

[Peter Stevens]

Hi Marco

I am not sure about this. It reminds me of the largely failed Declaration of Interdependence, which started out with 'We are a community of project leaders that are highly successful at delivering results" To me, the implication was ".... and you are not."

This also seems a bit we-focused, not you focused or problem focused.

I will think about an alternative formulation on the airplane.

I am thinking something like: We met in Stoos, and concluded the world is in a bit of a mess. A much larger group met in Amsterdam, and came to the same conclusion. We want to find different ways, better ways of organizing and leading organizations. Do you feel the same? Join us, and help us find that better way."

I wanted to comment directly, but I only have read access. Are the permissions set correctly?


Best,

Peter

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[John Styffe]

Hey Peter 

Pretty good

John

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[Yves Hanoulle]

2012/7/8 Peter Stevens <pete...@gmail.com>

Hi Marco

I am not sure about this. It reminds me of the largely failed Declaration of Interdependence, which started out with 'We are a community of project leaders that are highly successful at delivering results" To me, the implication was ".... and you are not."

yeah, that never really caught on, probably for that reason.

 

This also seems a bit we-focused, not you focused or problem focused.

I will think about an alternative formulation on the airplane.

I am thinking something like: We met in Stoos, and concluded the world is in a bit of a mess. A much larger group met in Amsterdam, and came to the same conclusion. We want to find different ways, better ways of organizing and leading organizations. Do you feel the same? Join us, and help us find that better way."

and you still need to start thinking?

hihi, I find this already brilliant

Looking forward to what you come up in the plane