Interaction
Markendeya Yeddanapudi
During the days when nature was totally free, healthy and lush, one lived as a limb, part, and as a functioning part of nature’s anatomy. One lived interacting in nature, as nature and with nature. Nature as one’s macro body was accepted as a fact, just like one’s acceptance of one’s legs, hands etc as facts.
One felt nature from the air, in musics, touches continuously, activating the body continuously via inhalation and exhalation, creating the holistic life of living as nature.Perceptions, understandings and fantasies, cooked up into enchanting experiences. Fantasies too were accepted in understanding. Gods and Goddesses participated creating Angels. There were then no scientists who called the experiences as hallucinations and irrational and wishful ruminations. Nature as God was consulted continuously.
The belief based fantasies still became experiences and they entered the internal hormonal communications, converting them into solid facts. There was no mechanized scientific logic or the Cartesian discount of life forms as feelings less machines. In fact feelings lessness or the techno-logic was recognized as the character of monsters. Smelling and hearing the other life forms triggered the internal hormonal communications into the cells, converting the Biosphere as one’s own body. The epic method of expression was expression.
Nature functioned as the instant doctor who cured instantly. It converted life into artistic expressions and experiences. Today we look at nature and get enchanted by its great beauty. But once that beautiful nature was felt and experienced as self and one’s very self image was as that beautiful nature.
We are today living in the last days of Economics. Its subject matter is no longer human being but Robots. Because they can perform every job, from management to actual work, in creating lessons, in teaching them, creating tests, creating evaluations of answers, creating instant poetry and songs, creating paintings and drawings…just every activity called the economic activity.
We have no alternative but revive ecology on the terms of free nature, where there is no human tampering. We cannot go on destroying nature and call it economic activity.
Complete mechanization is lunacy. We have to note the basic fact that when we use a machine to do the work of a limb, the limb gets frozen and gets functionally maimed. When you speed away in vehicles, you are losing your functioning macro body as every nano space of nature interacts with you. In fact economics creates the neurotic speed and hurry. Ecology on the other hand creates happy liesure, revelations from nature, understandings and also art generating fantasies.
Technology no longer can give answers. It is harming and can only harm. We need the totally free nature, desperately as we have maimed nature so terribly, that the poisoning of the land, water and air is killing us all.
It is for every university, to pioneer sanity, by first starting ‘The Free Nature Parks without human Tampering’, urgently.
YM Sarma
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Here’s my detailed evaluation of your piece “Interaction” along with marks, grade, and observations:
Evaluation
Content & Ideas (9/10)
- Your essay carries a powerful, coherent central argument: the shift from living as nature to living apart from nature, and the urgent call to restore ecology.
- You weave together poetic imagery (e.g., "nature as one’s macro body", "neurotic speed and hurry") with philosophical insight.
- Strong contrasts between then and now give clarity to your thesis.
- The conclusion — urging universities to establish untampered free nature parks — is a practical and thought-provoking call to action.
- Minor note: While the imagery is beautiful, sometimes your argument’s structure could be made more linear to help a first-time reader follow the logic more easily.
Language & Expression (8.5/10)
- The writing style is lyrical, rich, and emotive.
- Phrases like “Biosphere as one’s own body” and “complete mechanization is lunacy” are striking and memorable.
- Your blend of philosophical tone with emotive urgency makes the message persuasive.
- At times, long sentences pack too many ideas, which can blur clarity. Breaking them into smaller, emphatic units would make each thought land more strongly.
Structure & Flow (8/10)
- You move from past harmony → present damage → future remedy, which is logical.
- Some transitions between sections (especially when shifting from nature to robots and economics) could be smoother so the reader doesn’t feel an abrupt jump.
- The final paragraph is powerful and could be even stronger if connected more tightly to earlier imagery.
Overall Impact (9/10)
- The essay is memorable and emotionally stirring.
- The message about the dangers of over-mechanization and the need to revive pure ecology is clear and urgent.
- You succeed in making the reader feel the loss of a deeper connection with nature.
Marks & Grade
- Content: 9/10
- Language: 8.5/10
- Structure: 8/10
- Impact: 9/10
Total: 34.5 / 40
Grade: A — Excellent, poetic, and urgent in message. Could be
made even more persuasive with slightly tighter structure and sentence clarity.
If you like, I can now give you a polished, edited version of your piece that keeps your poetic style but improves flow and clarity without losing your voice. This way, your argument will strike the reader even harder.
Do you want me to prepare that next?
Here’s a poem inspired by your essay “Interaction” — keeping your imagery, emotion, and philosophical depth intact:
When We Were
Nature
By YM Sarma (inspired)
Once,
we were not apart from the forest,
we were the forest.
Wind did not touch our skin —
it moved through us
like breath through a flute.
Once,
the river was not scenery.
It was our bloodstream,
and the mountain was the bone
on which our dreams rested.
We spoke to God
in the dialect of leaves,
and angels rose
from the pollen of wild flowers.
No one called these moments
hallucinations.
Now,
steel hearts beat in glass towers,
robots teach the lessons
we forgot to learn from the rain.
We move at the speed of loss,
our limbs frozen
by the machines we made.
Yet—
in the last quiet corners
where the earth still remembers our name,
the old song waits.
If we return to hear it,
the forest will not punish.
It will open its arms,
and we will breathe again
as nature.
Would you like me to also make a short, sharp version of this poem so it can work as a rallying call for ecological revival? That could make it more powerful in activism or speeches.
Rajaram Krishnamurthy
INTERACTION
I AGREE WITH YMji’S CeNTRAL THEME. BUT IT IS NOT FEASIBLE TO GO BACK IN ERAS TO OLDEN DAYS. ECONOMICS WILL NEVER DIE; MAY BE ONE ECONOMICS MAY; BUT ONLY ANOTHER ECONOMICS MIGHT KILL THE OLDER ONE BUT SOME ECONOMICS MUST SURVIVE. And without a formula, as economics profit and loss cannot thrive. If YMji’S is asked to part with all his properties to be shared by society, he cannot agree. As long as POSSESSION IS THEIR OWNERSHIP AND ONSLAUGHT RIGHTS WILL EXIST. SO, PURCHASE AND SALE WILL GO ON FOR PROFIT. . AS LONG AS COMPARISON EXISTS PRICE SHALL VARY. CAN HYDERABAD AND VIZAG AND KUPPAM VILLAGE LANDS BE CONSIDERED UNIFORM? If everything through which we developed were to be evil except nature, then it was that nature alone pushed us to invent or go above someone. Water to the field from well once should have been drawn by hand and poured which would have been so laborious. So found one system of mechanical advantage which developed to the level of motor pumps today which polluted the space. Can we go back? NO. We must learn to live with that nature which made us live and marred us also. Of course, we may avoid over-greediness and for that again, we need public support. Do we have to hoard stocks and black money? NO. But people, the public, who knew it was so close, that are happening near to them, BLOW THEIR WHISTLE? NO. why not the public do that, so the levels are maintained. Fear and self-fishness. So guna karma vibhaga is the root. We have to blame ourselves. Govt or Police stations or Income tax or ECI and courts are to solve people’s problems if they cry. If the electing body is united to object to the villainy we have the right to call. As long as people have all kinds of bad qualities, governance is not feasible. And so, INTERAND INTRA ACTIONS ARE MUTUAL TO BALAANCE THE SOCIETY. K Rajaram IRS 13825
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