This should be the fourth or fifth time you have repeated your thesis so while you should use a variety of wordchoice in the body paragraphs it is a acceptable idea to use some (but not all) of the original language you used inthe introduction. This echoing effect not only reinforces your argument but also ties it nicely to the second keyelement of the conclusion: a brief (two or three words is enough) review of the three main points from the body ofthe paper.
A digital bank represents a virtual process that includes online banking, mobile banking, and beyond. As an end-to-end platform, digital banking must encompass the front end that consumers see, the back end that bankers see through their servers and admin control panels, and the middleware that connects these nodes. Ultimately, a digital bank should facilitate all functional levels of banking on all service delivery platforms. In other words, it should have all the same functions as a head office, branch office, online service, bank cards, ATMs, and point-of-sale (POS) machines.
The first paragraph is a bit disorganised and needs some organization. One would assume that you would start by indicating the study aim as you have done, and not go much into elaborating the data source and the methodology since these are covered in the respective sections. In this paragraph give indicative findings on the prevalence of overweight/obesity among women and discuss those findings. There is also need to repeat results (in percentages) in this section, as a result use words such as increasing prevalence, in which socioeconomic groups etc. The discussion section generally needs to be strengthened. Findings should clearly be discussed in the light of the study objectives. As it is, it is very difficult to deduce that from the discussion. Much of the discussion is focused on prevalence rather than the interaction between wealth and place of residence. This section also needs to be revised for the correction of typos and grammatical errors.
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