what does anyone think?

[drew.sent.this]

I'm pretty new to poetry. and these dont have any particular structure as
far as i know. i'm just wondering hwat ppl thinkabout them. i wrote them
for my self but was just curious if they sound good to anyone else. if
they suck tell me, if you like them, tell me, or any advice or tips you
have would be appreciated thanks

peace

drew

no titles on any of them yet.

and the sweet sweet wine
and the flicker of the fire
our eylids heavy with the look of bed
only it is not to be the easy route
time time sweet lengthy time
passions felt in fingertips and the brush of your hair
oh that strawberry hair!
a warm embrace of slumber wrapped in arms
shadows dance on the courdory interior
while the faint flicker above lights
the rising fluff glows
the bitter cold sings
yet we, we apart from it lost yet aware
lost n the world we have created between us in the space of zero

well i decided to only put that one up for now, but if you are interested
let me know and i'll give some more individually. i really hope no one
decides to rip this off, i really doubt it but thought about it as i was
typing it later. k thanks

..ed$$$$$be..
.d$$$$$$$$$$$$$$c nine planets round the sun
.$$$$P"" $$$ ""*$$$$c only one does the sun embrace
z$$$*" $$$ *$$$e upon this watered one
z$$$" $$$ ^$$$L so much we take for granted
$$$F $$$ '$$$
4$$$ d$$$$. $$$F so let us sleep outside tonight
4$$$ .$$$$$$$e $$$F lay down in our mother's arms
$$$r d$$P$$$$$$$. .$$$" for here we can rest safely
*$$$..$$$" $$$ "$$$e $$$P
*$$$$$P" $$$ ^*$$$$$$ ~d.matthews-- one sweet world
*$$$$c. $$$ .z$$$$P ________________________ _______
^*$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$P" /drew.l...@wmich.edu / /_______\
"*$$$$$$$$$*"" /60+hours d.m.b / |_______|
""""" /150+hours phish / | O O |
/45+hours dead / | v |
/ 78westy-->"Lily" / |___W___|
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