--
PJR :-)
The above poem and critique (both reproduced in full here) deserve a
wider exposure, IMO, because (1) both parties seem to enjoy reading
and writing about "sucking," and (2) these are the best examples I
remember ever seeing of the two ways that word can be used
metaphorically.
I like it.
or bigger:
Batty's hat is a good hat.
It's a red wool hat.
It isn't green or blue or yellow.
It's just a hat that's red.
It warms his ears, just Batty's ears.
or smaller:
Batty's hat warms his ears,
not yours, not mine.
or tiny:
batty
not you
not me
or transmogrified:
Batty's steeple is a good steeple.
It's a red wood steeple.
It isn't green or blue or yellow.
It's just a steeple that's red.
It warms his belfry, just Batty's belfry.
Batty (Dance Mix)
Batty's hat is a good hat.
It's a red wool hat.
It isn't blue or yellow or green
or brown or scarlet or black or ochre
or peach or ruby or olive or violet
or fawn or lilac or gold or chocolate
or mauve or cream or crimson or silver
or rose or azure or lemon or russet
or grey or purple or white or pink or orange
but just a hat that's red.
It warms his ears, just Batty's ears.
Poem by Peter J Ross
edits by ray heinrich & George Dance
additional lyrics by Tim Rice & George Dance
"Intelligent and good." ?!? Now that's some notable "in-depth
critique"... amazing, Cythera.
--
"Truck Stop Woman" by Will Dockery (the video)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kvtQEf7bnfs
Batty's hat is a good hat.
It's a red wool hat.
It isn't Almond or Antique Brass or Apricot or Aquamarine
or Asparagus or Atomic Tangerine or Banana Mania or Beaver
or Bittersweet or Black or Blizzard Blue or Blue
or Blue Bell or Blue Gray or Blue Green or Blue Violet
or Blush or Brick Red or Brown or Burnt Orange
or Burnt Sienna or Cadet Blue or Canary or Caribbean Green
or Carnation Pink or Cerise or Cerulean or Chestnut
or Copper or Cornflower or Cotton Candy or Dandelion
or Denim or Desert Sand or Eggplant or Electric Lime
or Fern or Forest Green or Fuchsia or Fuzzy Wuzzy
or Gold or Goldenrod or Granny Smith Apple or Gray
or Green or Green Blue or Green Yellow or Hot Magenta
or Inchworm or Indigo or Jazzberry Jam or Jungle Green
or Laser Lemon or Lavender or Lemon Yellow or Macaroni and Cheese
or Magenta or Magic Mint or Mahogany or Maize
or Manatee or Mango Tango or Maroon or Mauvelous
or Melon or Midnight Blue or Mountain Meadow or Mulberry
or Navy Blue or Neon Carrot or Olive Green or Orange
or Orange Red or Orange Yellow or Orchid or Outer Space
or Outrageous Orange or Pacific Blue or Peach or Periwinkle
or Piggy Pink or Pine Green or Pink Flamingo or Pink Sherbert
or Plum or Purple Heart or Purple Mountain's Majesty or Purple
Pizzazz
or Radical Red or Raw Sienna or Raw Umber or Razzle Dazzle Rose
or Razzmatazz or Yellow Orange or Red Orange or Red Violet
or Robin's Egg Blue or Royal Purple or Salmon or Scarlet
or Screamin' Green or Sea Green or Sepia or Shadow
or Shamrock or Shocking Pink or Silver or Sky Blue
or Spring Green or Sunglow or Sunset Orange or Tan
or Teal Blue or Thistle or Tickle Me Pink or Timberwolf
or Tropical Rain Forest or Tumbleweed or Turquoise Blue or Unmellow
Yellow
or Violet (Purple) or Violet Blue or Violet Red or Vivid Tangerine
or Vivid Violet or White or Wild Blue Yonder or Wild Strawberry
or Wild Watermelon or Wisteria or Yellow or Yellow Green
Wow... intelligent & good!
hot damn ray...you must be in the fingernail polish business
or a makeup artist
or the paint industry
or an auto detailer
or baskin robbins
or a lipstick maker
or candlestick designer
or disney
or fuckin' skittles
or...
Whatever Ray is, he fits the bill on the lowered bar of "intelligent &
interesting", eh...
IAG on the acrofinder: ( http://www.acronymfinder.com/ )
1. Intelligent And Good
1.5 Irrelevant & Grotesque
2. International Association of Geomorphologists
3. Institute of Australian Geographers
4. It's All Good
5. I Am Gay
6. International Association of Gravity
7. Isometric Array Grammar
8. Involuntary Asset Growth
9. Internationale Arbeitsgemeinschaft der Berufsverbände
Christlischer Arbeitnehmerinnen in der Hauswirtschaft
I really like 6 and want to be subjected to 8.
ING:
Intelligent n' Good
International Network of Golf
I&G
Intelligent & Good
Irrelevant & Grotesque
The always IAG Ray
put the gun down
http://wordbiscuit.com
mom told you not to
"What he /sEd/." -Dennis M. Hammes, Litt. D.
--
"Red Lipped Stranger & other stories" by Will Dockery:
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
snip
Now, *that's* intelligent and good.
Now that we've lost Rice's words, though, we can cut him out of the
credits. And since we've also lost his beat, we don't need 4 colours
per line, so we can reformat. And we should capitalize Red, for
consistency, and to please critics like Stuart Leichter who like
treating colours as things.
So I'd propose this as the final edit.
Batty (Dance Mix)
Batty's hat is a good hat.
It's a Red wool hat.
but just a hat that's Red.
Supercalafragileistic & thought provoking.
Hell, if we get rid of "Batty", we can cut PJ out of the credits, too,
and put you in. (Of course we have to change 'his' to 'her' in the
last line. Let's see what ray thinks.
> > It warms her ears, just Betty's ears.
>
> > by ray heinrich, George Dance & Will Dockery
That sounds like an interesting & intelligent idea to me...
I must agree. When I first so it I thought 'sucks' would
be appropriate. I didn't comment per chance. there
might be some deep esoteric vein I wasn't aware of.
Evidently not.
Then Cythera kissed ass and I thought
'what a dumb boob'.
But then we all know that.
It does remind me of two poems.
One, I wrote (which may have been his inspiration).
I'll post it.
The second, by a poet whose politics I'm not
very fond of, nonetheless, it seems to be popular
with those of like mind.
The Red Wheelbarrow
William Carlos Williams
--------------------------------------------------------------------------------
so much depends
upon
a red wheel
barrow
glazed with rain
water
beside the white
chickens.
----------------------------
Now that I would surmise might be considered
'intelligent and good' by some.
Although personally, I find it somewhat weak
and mostly a mild color juxtaposition.
C'est La Vie!
Jeeze, she makes it so painfully obvious.
> It does remind me of two poems.
> One, I wrote (which may have been his inspiration).
> I'll post it.
That should be "interesting & intelligent"... heh.
> The second, by a poet whose politics I'm not
> very fond of, nonetheless, it seems to be popular
> with those of like mind.
>
> The Red Wheelbarrow
> William Carlos Williams
>
> --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
>
> so much depends
> upon
> a red wheel
> barrow
>
> glazed with rain
> water
>
> beside the white
> chickens.
> ----------------------------
>
> Now that I would surmise might be considered
> 'intelligent and good' by some.
> Although personally, I find it somewhat weak
> and mostly a mild color juxtaposition.
>
> C'est La Vie!
--
Well... "intelligent and good", huh? How so?
On-topic and of interest, I just came across an interesting thread
over at http://www.poets.org
Which in my opinion PJR's "Betty" is a serious contender for placement
in. Don't agree? Then amuse me by telling me why?
http://www.poets.org/forum/viewtopic.php?p=54176&sid=c7c1894e51386193c16032ff3426d59d
Some fair-use excerpts:
"...If we take the question of "worst poet ever" at face value it's a
no-brainer. Bud's choice, William Topaz McGonagall, is the hands-down
winner. For a century before Rod McKuen McGonagall's name served as a
synonym for bad poetry..."
"...I'll eliminate the usual suspects (e.g. Maya Angelou, Charles
Bukowski, Kahlil Gibran, Rod McKuen) as non-poets. That still leaves a
wealth of choices, though: Billy Collins, Dana Gioia, Allen Ginsberg,
Edgar Guest, et cetera. My pick is an individual who has devoted his
life to reminding us all what poetry isn't, a "poet" permanently stuck
in "I'm-so-deep-I'm-damned-near-Japanese" adolescence, a man who has
raised vacuity, self-promotion and pretension to art forms: Lawrence
Ferlinghetti..."
"...My choice: Peter Orlovsky. http://boppin.com/orlovsky.html "
And the thread goes on for page after page: Intelligent and
interesting... indeed.
> might be some deep esoteric vein I wasn't aware of
I thought there was. There's usually a deep esoteric vein running
around somewhere. If you can't find it (or make it up), you're not a
very good reader.
You could change: "Intelligent and good" to
"With correct interpretation, this is deeply esoteric.
That would be: WC-I-TIDE
How about:
so much depends
upon
a red woolen
hat
not yellow
not blue
against Batty's
ears.
Ray
put the gun down
Still just sems like trite imagery to me, Ray.
Doesn't explain Cythera's orgasm over it.
Yet Cythera is allowed her orgasms any time
she feels the need.
More is better.
-max
(maybe he was attempting the Heinrich style, hmmm)
>
> Ray
>
> put the gun downhttp://wordbiscuit.com
Interesting read. I notice Colin goes on to pick a worse usenet poet,
as it usenet is special enough to merit its own categories. I wouldn't
put PJ there, though, despite Batty and possibly hundreds of poems as
poor, as he's written one or two good ones as well (and the worst poet
should have never written a good one). He's a tosser, who never seems
to spend more than 10 minutes on a poem; but even tossers get lucky
and put out a good one now and then. One point in his favour is that
he never produces two poems the same, and unvarying sameness looks
like an essential component for the worst poet: if you've read one of
his poems, you've read them all.
I'd have to think for a while about whom I'd pick for worst recognized
poet, but for worst internet poet it's a slam dunk: Tom Zart, "God's
most humble poet."
I’m God’s most humble poet
Whose poems have meter and rhyme.
Stories of love, faith, hate, honor and duty,
Obedience, war, heroes, history and crime.
I’ve performed my gift on T.V. and radio
Before millions I’ve never met.
Preached my praise of God and country
With 350 poems on the net.
[etc. etc.]
Tom Zart
I always translate "Intelligent" in a crit as "I understood it" and
"good" as "I liked it" (as coming from a believer in objective
aesthetics).
I don't think the burden is on the reader to find a meaning; if he
comes up with his own, that's usually fine -- though I've read some
interpretations of poems here that seem deliberately perverse -- but I
don't think it's his job to supply one. Asking him to do tht is asking
him to do the poet's work for him.
> How about:
>
> so much depends
> upon
>
> a red woolen
> hat
>
> not yellow
> not blue
>
> against Batty's
> ears.
>
> Ray
>
> put the gun downhttp://wordbiscuit.com
PS - I also think Colin's wrong about the worst 19th-century poet, who
he claims is McGonagall. I think that honour belongs to Canadian James
McIntyre. As evidence, check out McIntyre's "Shelley" that I posted
today.
http://groups.google.ca/group/alt.arts.poetry.comments/msg/e76f7cf4bbc65517?hl=en
BTW, I checked out Colin's reference, in his 'worst poet' message you
quoted upthread, "that one of the best online poets around has joined
this discussion. We are in the presence of greatness, people!" That
has to be a reference to ray heinrich (who posted onto the thread, but
didn't pick a worst poet).
So I'm starting to doubt that ray will be willing to get involved in
this project. But I'll keep plugging along, nevertheless.
For this latest edit, I dropped the Dance Mix subtitle, and I added
more colours: Rice's, then whatever I could remember on my own, then
the HTML colour names. If you could think of any colours we've missed,
that would be great, too.
Betty
Betty's hat is a good hat.
It's a Red wool hat.
It isn't Alabaster or Alice Blue
or Almond or Amber
or Amethyst or Antique Brass
or Apple Green or Apricot
or Aqua or Aquamarine
or Asparagus or Atomic Tangerine
or Auburn or Azure
or Baby Blue or Baby Pink
or Banana Mania or Beaver
or Beige or Bittersweet
or Black or Blizzard Blue
or Blue or Blue Bell
or Blue Gray or Blue Green
or Blue Violet or Blush
or Brick Red or Bronze
or Brown or Burgundy
or Burnt Orange or Burnt Sienna
or Cadet Blue or Canary
or Caribbean Green or Carnation Pink
or Cerise or Cerulean
or Champagne or Charcoal
or Chartreuse or Chestnut
or Chocolate or Cinnamon
or Claret or Cobalt
or Copper or Coral
or Corn or Cornflower
or Cotton Candy or Cream
or Cyan or Dandelion
or Denim or Desert Sand
or Ebony or Ecru
or Eggplant or Eggshell
or Electric Lime or Emerald
or Fawn or Fern
or Fire Engine Red or Forest Green
or Fuchsia or Fuzzy Wuzzy
or Gold or Goldenrod
or Granny Smith Apple or Gray
or Green or Green Blue
or Green Yellow or Honey Dew
or Hot Magenta or Hunter Green
or Inchworm or Indigo
or Ivory or Jade
or Jazzberry Jam or Jungle Green
or Kelly Green or Khaki
or Laser Lemon or Lavender
or Lawn Green or Lemon Yellow
or Lilac or Macaroni and Cheese
or Magenta or Magnola
or Magic Mint or Mahogany
or Maize or Manatee
or Mango Tango or Maroon
or Mauvelous or Melon
or Midnight Blue or Moss Green
or Mountain Meadow or Mulberry
or Mustard or Navy Blue
or Neon Carrot or Ochre
or Olive Drab or Olive Green
or Orange or Orange Red
or Orange Yellow or Orchid
or Outer Space or Outrageous Orange
or Pacific Blue or Peach
or Pear or Pearl
or Periwinkle or Persimmon
or Piggy Pink or Pine Green
or Pink Flamingo or Pink Sherbert
or Platinum or Plum
or Power Blue or Primrose
or Puce or Pumpkin
or Purple Heart or Purple Mountain's Majesty
or Purple Pizzazz or Radical Red
or Raspberry or Raw Sienna
or Raw Umber or Razzle Dazzle Rose
or Razzmatazz or Red Orange
or Red Violet or Robin's Egg Blue
or Rose or Royal Blue
or Royal Purple or Ruby
or Russet or Rust
or Saffron or Salmon
or Sapphire or Scarlet
or Screamin' Green or Sea Green
or Sepia or Shadow
or Shamrock or Shocking Pink
or Silver or Sky Blue
or Slate or Sorrel
or Spring Green or Steel Blue
or Sunglow or Sunset Orange
or Tan or Taupe
or Teal Blue or Terracotta
or Thistle or Tickle Me Pink
or Timberwolf or Titian
or Topaz or Tropical Rain Forest
or Tumbleweed or Turquoise Blue
or Ultramarine or Umber
or Unmellow Yellow or Vermilion
or Violet (Purple) or Violet Blue
or Violet Red or Vivid Tangerine
or Vivid Violet or White
or Wild Blue Yonder or Wild Strawberry
or Wild Watermelon or Wisteria
or Yellow or Yellow Green
or Yellow Orange or Zinnober
but just a hat that's Red.
It warms her ears, just Betty's ears.
poem by ray heinrich, George Dance, & Will Dockery
We're writing from the Shadowville angle, like Carson McCullers & Alan
Moore before us, where it is written on the Subway walls:
"Where black is the color, where none is the number."
There's what shirt makers call French Blue. There's Tobacco. There's
Coffee and Cafe Au Lait. There's Off-White. Cardinal Red. Graphite.
Camel. Roan. Palomino. Blood. Snot. Earwax. And about a dozen Minwax
names (Walnut, Cherry, Honey Pine, Oak, etc.). And Flax, Straw, & Hay.
Honey Pie:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0a5_m5Wfb6k
Oak, etc.). And Flax, Straw, & Hay.
Hay & Hazel...
snip
>
> > There's what shirt makers call French Blue. There's Tobacco. There's
> > Coffee and Cafe Au Lait. There's Off-White. Cardinal Red. Graphite.
> > Camel. Roan. Palomino. Blood. Snot. Earwax. And about a dozen Minwax
> > names (Walnut, Cherry, Honey Pine,
>
> Honey Pie:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0a5_m5Wfb6k
>
> Oak, etc.). And Flax, Straw, & Hay.
>
> Hay & Hazel...
>
> --
> "Red Lipped Stranger & other stories" by Will Dockery:http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
Thanks for all your help, men. I added those, and a few more that I've
come up with. The poem's now up to 165 lines (from 70 after I
reformatted ray's draft). I put in quince and xanthic, so that every
letter has a colour. I've also changed the endline, taking out ears
and substituting 'head': that takes it one more step away from PJ
Ross's original. (Which I'd like to do more of, BTW: probably changing
the colour and material of the hat as well, and I'm open to
suggestions on that score.
I don't really want to change 'Red,' though, since (as a bonus)
changing 'ears' to 'head' also gives us a concluding rhyme; and a
poem's not a poem unless it rhymes, innit?
I've also taken everyone else's name off, since I think I've
contributed enough original effort to make this edit mine. But of
course (as with the two Let's Write a Poem efforts) anyone else who
contributed (inc. Stuart) is free to take the same material to and
make it their poem. For example, at the extreme, if Will wants to
retitle it Betty Palin and keep everything else the same, that's fine
with me (though if you go that route, Will, you should take 'Blue' and
'White' out of the colour list, and make her hat Red, White, and
Blue.)
Betty
Betty's hat is a good hat.
It's a Red wool hat.
It isn't Alabaster or Alice Blue
or Almond or Amaranth
or Amber or Amethyst
or Antique Brass or Apple Green
or Apricot or Aqua
or Aquamarine or Arsenic
or Asparagus or Atomic Tangerine
or Auburn or Azure
or Baby Blue or Baby Pink
or Banana Mania or Battleship Gray
or Bay or Beaver
or Beige or Biscuit
or Bisque or Bistre
or Bittersweet or Black
or Blizzard Blue or Blond
or Blood or Blue
or Blue Bell or Blue Gray
or Blue Green or Blue Violet
or Blush or Bole
or bondi blue or Brandeis Blue
or Brick Red or Bronze
or Brown or Buff
or Burgundy or Burnt Almond
or Burnt Orange or Burnt Sienna
or Burnt Umber or Butterscotch
or Cadet Blue or Cafe au Lait
or Camel or Canary
or Candy Apple Red or Caramel
or Cardinal or Caribbean Green
or Carmine or Carnation Pink
or Carnelion or Carrot
or Cerise or Cerulean
or Champagne or Charcoal
or Chartreuse or Chestnut
or Chocolate or Cinnamon
or Claret or Cobalt
or Cocoa or Coffee
or Columbia Blue or Columbine
or Copper or Coral
or Corbeau or Cordovan
or Corn or Cornflower
or Cotton Candy or Cream
or Crimson or Cyan
or Dandelion or Dartmouth Green
or Denim or Desert Sand
or Dove Gray or Dun
or Ebony or Ecru
or Eggplant or Eggshell
or Electric Blue or Electric Lime
or Emerald or Eton Green
or Fallow or Fandango
or Fawn or Fern
or Fire Engine Red or Flax
or Flesh or Forest Green
or French Blue or Fuchsia
or Fuzzy Wuzzy or Garnet
or Ginger or Gold
or Goldenrod or Granny Smith Apple
or Grape or Graphite
or Gray or Greige
or Green or Green Blue
or Green Yellow or Guacamole
or Hay or Hazel
or Heather or Henna
or Hoar Gray or Honey Dew
or Honey or Honey Pine
or Hot Magenta or Hot Pink
or Hunter Green or Hyacinth
or Ice Blue or Incarnadine
or Inchworm or Indigo
or Iron Gray or Isabelline
or Islamic Green or Ivory
or Jacinthe or Jasmine
or Jade or Jazzberry Jam
or Jonquil or Jungle Green
or Kelly Green or Khaki
or Laser Lemon or Lava
or Lavender or Lawn Green
or Lemon Yellow or Lilac
or Lime or Liver
or Macaroni and Cheese or Magenta
or Magnolia or Magic Mint
or Mahogany or Maize
or Malachite or Manatee
or Mango or Maple
or Marigold or Marmalade
or Maroon or Mauve
or Melon or Midnight Blue
or Mikado Yellow or Mint Green
or Misty Rose or Molasses
or Moss Green or Mountain Meadow
or Mountbatten Pink or Mousy
or Mud or Mulberry
or Mustard or Myrtle
or Nasturtium or Nattier Blue
or Natural or Navajo White
or Navy Blue or Neon Carrot
or Neutral or Nile Blue
or Nutmeg or Oak
of Oatmeal or Ochre
or Off-White or Olive Drab
or Olive Green or Olivine
or Orange or Orange Red
or Orange Yellow or Orchid
or Outer Space or Outrageous Orange
or Oxblood or Oyster White
or Pacific Blue or Palomino
or Pansy Purple or Peach
or Peacock Green or Pea Green
or Pear or Pearl
or Periwinkle or Persimmon
or Petunia or Piggy Pink
or Pine Green or Pink Flamingo
or Pink Sherbert or Pistachio
or Platinum or Plum
or Poppy or Powder Blue
or Powder Gray or Primrose
or Prussian Blue or Puce
or Pumpkin or Purple Heart
or Purple Mountain's Majesty or Purple Pizzazz
or Putty or Quince
or Radical Red or Raven
or Raspberry or Raw Sienna
or Raw Umber or Razzle Dazzle Rose
or Razzmatazz or Red Orange
or Red Violet or Rifle Green
or Roan or Robin's Egg Blue
or Rose or Royal Blue
or Royal Purple or Ruby
or Russet or Rust
or Sable or Saddle
or Saffron or Sage Green
or Salmon or Sandalwood
or Sapphire or Saxe Blue
or Scarlet or Screamin' Green
or Sea Green or Sepia
or Shadow or Shamrock
or Shocking Pink or Silver
or Sky Blue or Slate
or Sorrel or Spring Green
or Steel Blue or Straw
or Sunglow or Sunset Orange
or Taffy or Tan
or Tangerine or Taupe
or Teal Blue or Terracotta
or Thistle or Tickle Me Pink
or Timberwolf or Titian
or Tobacco or Topaz
or Tow or Tropical Rain Forest
or Tumbleweed or Turquoise
or Ultramarine or Umber
or Unmellow Yellow or Vermilion
or Violet (Purple) or Violet Blue
or Violet Red or Vivid Tangerine
or Vivid Violet or Walnut
or Wedgewood Blue or White
or Wild Blue Yonder or Wild Strawberry
or Wild Watermelon or Wisteria
or Xanthic or Yellow
or Yellow Green or Yellow Ochre
or Yellow Orange or Zinnober
but just a hat that's Red.
It warms her head, just Betty's head.
George Dance
On Nov 27, 11:21pm, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote:
> On Nov 27, 7:29pm, Will Dockery <will.dock...@gmail.com> wrote:
>
> > On Nov 27, 2:33pm, prettystuzz <leich...@bellsouth.net> wrote:
>
> > > George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote:
>
> > > > Betty
>
> snip
>
>
>
> > > There's what shirt makers call French Blue. There's Tobacco. There's
> > > Coffee and Cafe Au Lait. There's Off-White. Cardinal Red. Graphite.
> > > Camel. Roan. Palomino. Blood. Snot. Earwax. And about a dozen Minwax
> > > names (Walnut, Cherry, Honey Pine,
>
> > Honey Pie:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0a5_m5Wfb6k
>
> > Oak, etc.). And Flax, Straw, & Hay.
>
> > Hay & Hazel...
>
> > --
> > "Red Lipped Stranger & other stories" by Will Dockery:http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
>
> Thanks for all your help, men. I added those, and a few more that I've
> come up with. The poem's now up to 165 lines (from 70 after I
> reformatted ray's draft). I put in quince and xanthic, so that every
> letter has a colour. I've also changed the endline, taking out ears
> and substituting 'head': that takes it one more step away from PJ
> Ross's original. (Which I'd like to do more of, BTW: probably changing
> the colour and material of the hat as well, and I'm open to
> suggestions on that score.
>
> I don't really want to change 'Red,' though, since (as a bonus)
> changing 'ears' to 'head' also gives us a concluding rhyme; and a
> poem's not a poem unless it rhymes, innit?
>
> I've also taken everyone else's name off, since I think I've
> contributed enough original effort to make this edit mine. But of
> course (as with the two Let's Write a Poem efforts) anyone else who
> contributed (inc. Stuart) is free to take the same material to and
> make it their poem. For example, at the extreme, if Will wants to
> retitle it Betty Palin and keep everything else the same, that's fine
> with me (though if you go that route, Will, you should take 'Blue' and
> 'White' out of the colour list, and make her hat Red, White, and
> Blue.)
Suggesting mere words, however crucial each and all would be, is nothing
like contributing lines (except when the word is something like
'cumulonimbus' - which DR had told me could be a whole poem on its own);
so I not only refuse any so-called credit but also vote to give you the
full credit.
>
> Betty
>
> Betty's hat is a good hat.
> It's a Red wool hat.
> It isn't Alabaster or Alice Blue
> or Almond or Amaranth
> or Amber or Amethyst
> or Antique Brass or Apple Green
> or Apricot or Aqua
> or Aquamarine or Arsenic
> or Asparagus or Atomic Tangerine
> or Auburn or Azure
> or Baby Blue or Baby Pink
> or Banana Mania or Battleship Gray
> or Bay or Beaver
> or Beige or Biscuit
> or Bisque or Bistre
> or Bittersweet or Black
> or Blizzard Blue or Blond
> or Blood or Blue
> or Blue Bell or Blue Gray
> or Blue Green or Blue Violet
> or Blush or Bole
> or bondi blue or Brandeis Blue
> or Brick Red or Bronze
> or Brown or Buff
> or Burgundy or Burnt Almond
> or Burnt Orange or Burnt Sienna
> or Burnt Umber or Butterscotch
> or Cadet Blue or Cafe au Lait
> or Camel or Canary
> or Candy Apple Red or Caramel
> or Cardinal or Caribbean Green
> or Carmine or Carnation Pink
> or Carnelion or Carrot
> or Cerise or Cerulean
> or Champagne or Charcoal
> or Chartreuse or Chestnut
> or Chocolate or Cinnamon
> or Claret or Cobalt
> or Cocoa or Coffee
> or Columbia Blue or Columbine
> or Copper or Coral
> or Corbeau or Cordovan
> or Corn or Cornflower
> or Cotton Candy or Cream
> or Crimson or Cyan
> or Dandelion or Dartmouth Green
> or Denim or Desert Sand
> or Dove Gray or Dun
> or Ebony or Ecru
> or Eggplant or Eggshell
> or Electric Blue or Electric Lime
> or Emerald or Eton Green
> or Fallow or Fandango
> or Fawn or Fern
> or Fire Engine Red or Flax
> or Flesh or Forest Green
> or French Blue or Fuchsia
> or Fuzzy Wuzzy or Garnet
> or Ginger or Gold
> or Goldenrod or Granny Smith Apple
> or Grape or Graphite
> or Gray or Greige
> or Green or Green Blue
> or Green Yellow or Guacamole
> or Hay or Hazel
> or Heather or Henna
> or Hoar Gray or Honey Dew
> or Honey or Honey Pine
> or Hot Magenta or Hot Pink
> or Hunter Green or Hyacinth
> or Ice Blue or Incarnadine
> or Inchworm or Indigo
> or Iron Gray or Isabelline
> or Islamic Green or Ivory
> or Jacinthe or Jasmine
> or Jade or Jazzberry Jam
> or Jonquil or Jungle Green
> or Kelly Green or Khaki
> or Laser Lemon or Lava
> or Lavender or Lawn Green
> or Lemon Yellow or Lilac
> or Lime or Liver
> or Macaroni and Cheese or Magenta
> or Magnolia or Magic Mint
> or Mahogany or Maize
> or Malachite or Manatee
> or Mango or Maple
> or Marigold or Marmalade
> or Maroon or Mauve
> or Melon or Midnight Blue
> or Mikado Yellow or Mint Green
> or Misty Rose or Molasses
> or Moss Green or Mountain Meadow
> or Mountbatten Pink or Mousy
> or Mud or Mulberry
> or Mustard or Myrtle
> or Nasturtium or Nattier Blue
> or Natural or Navajo White
> or Navy Blue or Neon Carrot
> or Neutral or Nile Blue
> or Nutmeg or Oak
> of Oatmeal or Ochre
> or Off-White or Olive Drab
> or Olive Green or Olivine
> or Orange or Orange Red
> or Orange Yellow or Orchid
> or Outer Space or Outrageous Orange
> or Oxblood or Oyster White
> or Pacific Blue or Palomino
> or Pansy Purple or Peach
> or Peacock Green or Pea Green
> or Pear or Pearl
> or Periwinkle or Persimmon
> or Petunia or Piggy Pink
> or Pine Green or Pink Flamingo
> or Pink Sherbert or Pistachio
> or Platinum or Plum
> or Poppy or Powder Blue
> or Powder Gray or Primrose
> or Prussian Blue or Puce
> or Pumpkin or Purple Heart
> or Purple Mountain's Majesty or Purple Pizzazz
> or Putty or Quince
> or Radical Red or Raven
> or Raspberry or Raw Sienna
> or Raw Umber or Razzle Dazzle Rose
> or Razzmatazz or Red Orange
> or Red Violet or Rifle Green
> or Roan or Robin's Egg Blue
> or Rose or Royal Blue
> or Royal Purple or Ruby
> or Russet or Rust
> or Sable or Saddle
> or Saffron or Sage Green
> or Salmon or Sandalwood
> or Sapphire or Saxe Blue
> or Scarlet or Screamin' Green
> or Sea Green or Sepia
> or Shadow or Shamrock
> or Shocking Pink or Silver
> or Sky Blue or Slate
> or Sorrel or Spring Green
> or Steel Blue or Straw
> or Sunglow or Sunset Orange
> or Taffy or Tan
> or Tangerine or Taupe
> or Teal Blue or Terracotta
> or Thistle or Tickle Me Pink
> or Timberwolf or Titian
> or Tobacco or Topaz
> or Tow or Tropical Rain Forest
> or Tumbleweed or Turquoise
> or Ultramarine or Umber
> or Unmellow Yellow or Vermilion
> or Violet (Purple) or Violet Blue
> or Violet Red or Vivid Tangerine
> or Vivid Violet or Walnut
> or Wedgewood Blue or White
> or Wild Blue Yonder or Wild Strawberry
> or Wild Watermelon or Wisteria
> or Xanthic or Yellow
> or Yellow Green or Yellow Ochre
> or Yellow Orange or Zinnober
> but just a hat that's Red.
> It warms her head, just Betty's head.
>
> George Dance
As c&c but not a contribution, consider as the beginning:
Betty its hat's a good hat
and though "bondi blue" looks very good - for a moment I confused that
original iMac color with the Bodoni font family and gave you more credit
than you deserved - you probably want a capital.
Obpoem:
Geo Dance his b�te noir poem's
as right and full a poem (&
sent up tall for lasting long)
as a goodly Stout its foam &
so finishes late
not flat or wrong
to wait
at last its lees to punctuate.
Inc. Stuart
"Well, you know what kinda eyes she got." -Jagger/Richards
On Nov 28, 12:57 am, prettystuzz <leich...@bellsouth.net> wrote:
> My news server hasn't got this (c/p from Google Groups) yet, so the
> header's refs might not be completely accurate.
>
> On Nov 27, 11:21pm, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote:
> Geo Dance his bête noir poem's
> as right and full a poem (&
> sent up tall for lasting long)
> as a goodly Stout its foam &
> so finishes late
> not flat or wrong
> to wait
> at last its lees to punctuate.
>
> Inc. Stuart
--
Quite a catalouge.
Christ's love
Colour. (Re-installed my favourite editor and it's spell
checker is stuck in a dictionary labeled: "Real-English".
I can only assume the U.S. dictionary I can't get to is
labeled: "Wanker-English" (ha ha very funny you perverse
lime-sucking hacker). But I've decided not to change it
for now because it's obviously a dancing lesson from god(s).
Anyway... assuming colour is the answer your brain comes up
with when viewing combinations of various energies of photons,
I googled for experiment-based estimates. Seems that primates
can discern about 1 to 10 million different colors. (Birds got
lots more.) Nice link:
http://hypertextbook.com/facts/2006/JenniferLeong.shtml
Also: Is black a color? Is white a color?
http://www.colormatters.com/vis_bk_white.html
So I decided to name the colours after their respective numbers,
make a script to list the numbers from 9,999,999 million to 0,
and paste these colours into the poem. Think of them as
minimal techno electronic dance colours:
Betty
Betty's hat is a good hat.
It's a Red(colour #1,537,391) wool hat.
or Christ's love or Satan's hate
or Puppy Poo or Frog Vomit
or colour #9,999,999
or colour #9,999,998
or colour #9,999,997
...
or colour #1,537,390
or colour #1,537,392
...
or colour #3
or colour #2
or colour #1
or colour #0
but just a hat that's red(colour #1,537,391).
It warms her head, just Betty's head.
The whole poem is at:
http://wordbiscuit.com/BattyHat.htm
Ray
P.S.
An obpoem's not a obpoem unless it rhymes:
Batty's hat's an invisible red
It sits quite nicely on his head.
Not green, not blue, and not for me.
A hat, that only he can see.
- - -
.
put the gun down
Yikes. I don't want to get involved in no 10-million-colour-word epic
-- at the rate I've been going (500 in 3 days), that would mean
completion in 60,000 days. So I'm cashing out right now, taking the
latest draft i've got and putting my name on it. I hope you do use it
as raw material and develop it further; and whatever you do, of course
consider it solely yours, not mine in any way.
Betty
Betty's hat is a good hat.
It's a Red felt hat.
It isn't Air Force Blue or Alabaster
or Alice Blue or Alizarin
or Almond or Amaranth
or Amaranth Cerise or Amber
or American Rose or Amethyst
or Android Green or Antique Brass
or Apple Green or Apricot
or Aqua or Aquamarine
or Army Green or Arsenic
or Asparagus or Atomic Tangerine
or Auburn or Azure
or Baby Blue or Baby Pink
or Banana or Battleship Gray
or Bay or Beaver
or Beige or Biscuit
or Bisque or Bistre
or Bittersweet or Black
or Blanched Almond or Blizzard Blue
or Blond or Blood
or Blue or Blue Bell
or Blue Gray or Blue Green
or Blue Violet or Blush
or Bole or Bondi Blue
or Brandeis Blue or Brass
or Brick Red or Brilliant Rose
or Brink Pink or British Racing Green
or Bronze or Brown
or Buff or Bulgarian Rose
or Burgundy or Burnt Almond
or Burnt Orange or Burnt Sienna
or Burnt Umber or Butterscotch
or Byzantine or Byzantium
or Cadet Blue or Cadmium Green
or Cadmium Orange or Cadmium Red
or Cadmium Yellow or Cafe au Lait
or Cambridge Blue or Camel
or Camouflage Green or Canary
or Candy Apple Red or Caput Mortuum
or Caramel or Cardinal
or Caribbean Green or Carmine
or Carmine Pink or Carmine Red
or Carnation or Carnelian
or Carolina Blue or Carrot
or Celadon or Cerise
or Cerise Pink or Cerulean
or Cerulean Blue or Champagne
or Charcoal or Chartreuse
or Cherry Blossom or Chestnut
or Chocolate or Cinnamon
or Claret or Classic Rose
or Cobalt or Cocoa
or Coffee or Columbia Blue
or Columbine or Cool Gray
or Copper or Copper Rose
or Coral or Coral Pink
or Coral Red or Corbeau
or Cordovan or Corn
or Cornflower or Cosmic Latte
or Cotton Candy or Cream
or Crimson or Cyan
or Dandelion or Dartmouth Green
or Davy's Gray or Denim
or Desert or Desert Sand
or Dodger Blue or Dogwood Rose
or Dove Gray or Drab
or Duke Blue or Dun
or Eagle Green or Earth Yellow
or Ebony or Ecru
or Eggplant or Eggshell
or Egyptian Blue or Electric Blue
or Electric Green or Electric Indigo
or Electric Lime or Electric Purple
or Electric Violet or Emerald
or Erythrean or Eton Blue
or Fallow or Falu Red
or Fandango or Fashion Fuchsia
or Fawn or Feldgrau
or Fern or Field Drab
or Firebrick or Fire Engine Red
or Flax or Flesh
or Forest Green or French Beige
or French Blue or French Rose
or Fuchsia or Fuchsia Pink
or Fuzzy Wuzzy or Gainsboro
or Gamboge or Garnet
or Ghost White or Ginger
or Gold or Golden Brown
or Golden Poppy or Goldenrod
or Golden Yellow or Granny Smith Apple
or Grape or Graphite
or Gray or Greige
or Green or Green Blue
or Green Yellow or Guacamole
or Halaya Ube or Han Blue
or Han Purple or Harlequin
or Hay or Hazel
or Heather or Heliotrope
or Henna or Hoar Gray
or Hoar White or Hollywood Cerise
or Honey or Honey Dew
or Honey Pine or Hot Magenta
or Hot Pink or Hunter Green
or Hyacinth or Ice Blue
or Incarnadine or Inchworm
or India Green or Indian Yellow
or Indigo or International Orange
or Iron Gray or Isabelline
or Islamic Green or Ivory
or Jacinthe or Jade
or Jasmine or Jazzberry Jam
or Jonquil or June Bud
or Jungle Green or Kelly Green
or Khaki or Klein Blue
or Lake or Languid Lavender
or Laser Lemon or Lava
or Lavender or Lawn Green
or Lemon or Lemon Chiffon
or Lilac or Lime
or Lincoln Green or Linen
or Liver or Luteous
or Macaroni and Cheese or Madder
or Magenta or Magic Mint
or Magnolia or Mahogany
or Maize or Majorelle Blue
or Malachite or Manatee
or Mango or Manilla
or Maple or Marigold
or Marmalade or Maroon
or Mauve or Mauve Taupe
or Maya Blue or Mazarine
or Meline or Melon
or Midnight Blue or Mikado Yellow
or Mint Cream or Mint Green
or Misty Rose or Mocassin
or Mocha or Mode Beige
or Molasses or Moss Green
or Mountain Meadow or Mountbatten Pink
or Mousy or MSU Green
or Mud or Mulberry
or Murrey or Mushroom
or Mustard or Myrtle
or Nasturtium or Nattier Blue
or Natural or Navajo White
or Navy Blue or Neon Carrot
or Neutral or Nile Blue
or Nutmeg or Oak
or Oatmeal or Ochre
or Office Green or Off-White
or Old Gold or Old Lace
or Old Lavender or Old Rose
or Olive Drab or Olive Green
or Olivine or Opera Mauve
or Orange or Orange Red
or Orange Yellow or Orchid
or Outer Space or Outrageous Orange
or Oxblood or Oyster White
or Pacific Blue or Palatinate Blue
or Palatinate Purple or Palomino
or Pansy Purple or Papaya Whip
or Paprika or Parchment
or Pastel Green or Pastel Pink
or Payne's Gray or Peach
or Peach Orange or Peach Puff
or Peach Yellow or Peacock Blue
or Pea Green or Pear
or Pearl or Periwinkle
or Persian Indigo or Persian Rose
or Persimmon or Peru
or Petunia or Phthalo Blue
or Phthalo Green or Pine Green
or Pink or Pink Flamingo
or Pink Orange or Pink Sherbert
or Pistachio or Platinum
or Plum or Poppy
or Portland Orange or Powder Blue
or Powder Gray or Primrose
or Prussian Blue or Psychedelic Purple
or Puce or Pumpkin
or Purple or Purple Heart
or Purple Mountain's Majesty or Purple Pizzazz
or Purple Taupe or Putty
or Quince or Radical Red
or Raspberry or Raspberry Rose
or Raven or Raw Sienna
or Raw Umber or Razzle Dazzle Rose
or Razzmatazz or Red Orange
or Red Violet or Rich Carmine
or Rich Lavender or Rich Maroon
or Rifle Green or Roan
or Robin's Egg Blue or Rose
or Rose Ebony or Rose Gold
or Rose Madder or Rose Quartz
or Rose Taupe or Rose Vale
or Rosewood or Rosy Brown
or Royal Blue or Royal Fuchsia
or Royal Purple or Ruby
or Russet or Rust
or Sable or Sacramento State Green
or Saddle Brown or Saffron
or Safety Orange or Sage
or Salmon or Salmon Pink
or Sand or Sandalwood
or Sand Dune or Sandy Brown
or Sangria or Sap Green
or Sapphire or Satin Sheen Gold
or Saxe Blue or Scarlet
or School Bus Yellow or Screamin' Green
or Sea Green or Seal Brown
or Seashell or Selective Yellow
or Sepia or Shadow
or Shamrock or Shocking Pink
or Sienna or Silver
or Skobeloff or Sky Blue
or Sky Magenta or Slate Blue
or Slate Gray or Smalt
or Snow or Sorrel
or Spring Bud or Spring Green
or Steel Blue or Straw
or Sunglow or Sunset Orange
or Taffy or Tan
or Tangelo or Tangerine
or Tangerine Yellow or Taupe
or Taupe Gray or Tawny
or Tea Green or Tea Rose
or Teal or Terracotta
or Thistle or Thulian Pink
or Tickle Me Pink or Tiffany Blue
or Timberwolf or Titian
or Tobacco or Tomato
or Topaz or Torch Red
or Tow or Tropical Rain Forest
or Tumbleweed or Turkish Rose
or Turquoise or Twilight Lavender
or Tyrian Purple or Ube
or Ultramarine or Umber
or UN Blue or Unmellow Yellow
or Upsdell Red or Vegas Gold
or Venetian Red or Vermilion
or Violet or Violet Blue
or Violet Red or Viridian
or Vivid Burgundy or Vivid Tangerine
or Vivid Violet or Walnut
or Watermelon or Wedgewood Blue
or Wenge or Wheat
or White or Wild Blue Yonder
or Wild Strawberry or Wisteria
or Xanadu or Xanthic
or Yale Blue or Yellow
or Yellow Green or Yellow Ochre
or Yellow Orange or Zinnober,
but just a hat that's Red.
It warms her head, just Betty's head.
> P.S.
> An obpoem's not a obpoem unless it rhymes:
>
> Batty's hat's an invisible red
> It sits quite nicely on his head.
> Not green, not blue, and not for me.
> A hat, that only he can see.
>
Batty's hat is a symbol, it's plain,
But I strive for the meaning in vain:
Is it 'intelligent'
To think what was meant
Was poet Pete's own batty brain?
> - - -
>
> .
> put the gun downhttp://wordbiscuit.com
Bravo, red felt is good... maybe an homage to Ronee Blakely's big red
Stetson (not shown here):
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YSEP9oeUvJ8
But visible in luscious colour here with the Rolling Thunder Revue
almost exactly 34 years ago:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rUu_RFSxIpQ
I thought he was talking about C-.
-> George Dance said:
-> I always translate "Intelligent" in a crit as "I understood
-> it" and "good" as "I liked it" (as coming from a believer in
-> objective aesthetics).
Me too.
-> I don't think the burden is on the reader to find a meaning;
-> if he comes up with his own, that's usually fine -- though
-> I've read some interpretations of poems here that seem
-> deliberately perverse -- but I don't think it's his job to
-> supply one. Asking him to do that is asking him to do the
-> poet's work for him.
Job? Work? You make it sound so productive. :)
This pretty much sums it up for me:
"A poem is written first in its writer's language.
When you read it, you are translating it into your own language.
Which act requires more skill and creativity,
depends on the individual writer or reader."
Deliberately perverse interpretations can be fun, creative,
and sometimes even useful to one or both parties. (But usually,
in my subjective opinion, they're not entertaining enough.)
Ray
p.s You mentioned objective aesthetics. Generic or Rand?
p.p.s. This comes pretty close to my aesthetics:
"Evolutionary aesthetics ... the force of natural
selection moves a specific value from subjective to
objective. ... External forces (competing values, ideas,
groups; the extent of communication, random events, etc.)
determine how fast this change happens. Too little and
there is no change, too much and the change is reversed,
sometimes to the point of the value becoming so subjective
it is meaningless.
put the gun down
> On Nov 20, 4:12 pm, Peter J Ross <p...@example.invalid> wrote:
>>
>> Batty's red woollen hat is a good hat.
>> It's a hat that isn't yellow, it's just a hat
>> that's red. It warms his ears, Batty's ears,
>> not mine, not yours.
>>
> Intelligent and good.
I can't deny that it's intelligent, but I don't think it's good.
I can't deny that it's better than most of what's posted here and
wrongly labelled as poetry, but that still doesn't make it good.
It's certainly not better than Batty's hat, which is one of the
reddest (and therefore best) things I've ever seen.
--
PJR :-)
I'll check him out, thanks GD.
--
"Black Crow's Brother & other stories" by Will Dockery:
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
>> Batty's red woolen hat is a good hat.
>> It's a hat that isn't yellow, it's just a hat
>> that's red. It warms his ears, Batty's ears,
>> not mine, not yours.
>
> I like it.
>
> or bigger:
>
> Batty's hat is a good hat.
> It's a red wool hat.
> It isn't green or blue or yellow.
> It's just a hat that's red.
> It warms his ears, just Batty's ears.
>
> or smaller:
>
> Batty's hat warms his ears,
> not yours, not mine.
>
> or tiny:
>
> batty
> not you
> not me
>
> or transmogrified:
>
> Batty's steeple is a good steeple.
> It's a red wood steeple.
> It isn't green or blue or yellow.
> It's just a steeple that's red.
> It warms his belfry, just Batty's belfry.
I don't think you really like it at all. ;-)
"Intelligent & good..."
--
"Black Crow's Brother & other stories" by Will Dockery:
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
I really did like it. Mostly for the idea. For me it's an
existential metaphor/mystery repeated two different ways
(for rhythm as well as meaning). The hat is concrete/
specific/object, not abstract/generic/subject. Batty
as himself (concrete...), not part of "we"(abstract...). I was
"restating" it for fun and to try to get it where I liked it
better. The color thing was just one of those psycho-synergy
whatchamacallit's.
Ray
obpoem:
< life is its own metaphor >
life
is its own metaphor
this cow
on the other hand
just shit on my foot
- - -
put the gun down
"Intelligent and good."
Thanks for the laughs, Cythera.
Jet Black and Jet Blue?
Quite a cantaloupe
said the toad,
mulling about the mud.
I'll camp out under
the tit of a mulberry
and wait for Lindbergh.
"Here come the warm jets." -Brian Eno
http://music.hyperreal.org/artists/brian_eno/HCTWJlyrics.html
"The title Warm Jets came from the guitar sound on the track of that
name, which I described on the track sheet as 'warm jet guitar',
because it sounded like a tuned jet. Then I had the pack of playing
cards with the picture of the woman in there, and they sort of
connected. That was one of the things that was going on at the time:
this idea that music was still tied to some idea of revolution, and
that one of the revolutions was a sexual revolution. I wasn't making a
big political point, I just liked having fun with those things. Most
people didn't realise for a long time -- it was rather deeply
concealed!" -Brian Eno
Now /that/ is intelligent and good.
--
"Red Lipped Stranger & other stories" by Will Dockery:
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
__Brian's Warm Jet Hat__
Brian's hat is a good hat.
It's a Here Come the Warm Jets hat
and it's a Needles in the Camel's Eye hat
and it's a Paw Paw Negro Blowtorch hat
and it's a Baby's on Fire hat
and it's a Cindy Tells Me hat
and it's a Driving Me Backwards hat
and it's a On Some Faraway Beach hat
and it's a Blank Frank hat
and it's a Dead Finks Don't Talk hat
and it's a Some of Them Are Old hat
but mainly it's a Here Come the Warm Jets hat
It warms his head, but not just Brian's head.
Being an Awwstin Texian and all, Stars of the Lid is a fav too.
(Music for Nitrous Oxide, Gravitational Pull vs. the Desire for
an Aquatic Life, Ballasted Orchestra)
Ambient Intelligence Technologies
http://wordbiscuit.com
Perfect for the Product Lifecycle
I actually had Taking Tiger Mountain (By Strategy) first, but those
two records wer big hits in my room back in the day.
> __Brian's Warm Jet Hat__
>
> Brian's hat is a good hat.
> It's a Here Come the Warm Jets hat
> and it's a Needles in the Camel's Eye hat
> and it's a Paw Paw Negro Blowtorch hat
> and it's a Baby's on Fire hat
> and it's a Cindy Tells Me hat
> and it's a Driving Me Backwards hat
> and it's a On Some Faraway Beach hat
> and it's a Blank Frank hat
> and it's a Dead Finks Don't Talk hat
> and it's a Some of Them Are Old hat
> but mainly it's a Here Come the Warm Jets hat
> It warms his head, but not just Brian's head.
The fat lady of Limberg awaits her jellyfish kiss...
> Being an Awwstin Texian and all, Stars of the Lid is a fav too.
> (Music for Nitrous Oxide, Gravitational Pull vs. the Desire for
> an Aquatic Life, Ballasted Orchestra)
>
> Ambient Intelligence Technologieshttp://wordbiscuit.com
> Perfect for the Product Lifecycle
Yes, yes...
> On Dec 2, 7:47 pm, Peter J Ross <p...@example.invalid> wrote:
> ->
> -> I don't think you really like it at all. ;-)
> ->
> -> --
> -> PJR :-)
> ->
> -> <http://pjr.lasnobberia.net/verse/>
>
> I really did like it. Mostly for the idea. For me it's an
> existential metaphor/mystery repeated two different ways
> (for rhythm as well as meaning). The hat is concrete/
> specific/object, not abstract/generic/subject. Batty
> as himself (concrete...), not part of "we"(abstract...). I was
> "restating" it for fun and to try to get it where I liked it
> better. The color thing was just one of those psycho-synergy
> whatchamacallit's.
>
> Ray
No.
This has to stop.
The "poem" celebrates the purchase by the woman I love of a knitted
woollen hat for a stuffed toy in the shape of a plump black vampire
bat which she purchased for me about ten years ago.
I posted it, after spending ten minutes writing it, as a way of saying
thanks to the woman I love.
I checked the spelling and line breaks, but otherwise it's a diary
entry.
> obpoem:
>
> < life is its own metaphor >
>
> life
> is its own metaphor
>
> this cow
> on the other hand
> just shit on my foot
life
is the name of the game
at home
i play scrabble with my turds
and
i want to play the game with you
It does? Really?
Is that why you've kindly offered to f.o.a.d.?
--
New poetry & music recordings by Will Dockery
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
> No.
>
> This has to stop.
>
> The "poem" celebrates the purchase by the woman I love of a knitted
> woollen hat for a stuffed toy in the shape of a plump black vampire
> bat which she purchased for me about ten years ago.
>
> I posted it, after spending ten minutes writing it, as a way of saying
> thanks to the woman I love.
Damn, Peewee, I was wrong about you after all.
You aren't gay and your trite rhetoric actually
did have some significance.
But it was ten minute fodder, so in that sense
I wasn't completely wrong.
BTW. Thanks, Ray, for extruding the truth from
peewee. Truth is something that often evades him
and he seems to enjoy keeping it from us.
Such dynamics!!!
<snip for brevity>
> Such dynamics!!!
Betty & Her Pale Blue Hat:
http://picasaweb.google.com/lh/photo/7x-Pbejp0sjvhopobh4wcQ?feat=directlink
The poem is about a girl named Betty... poor little Batty Betty with
her pale Blue Hat.
--
"Red Lipped Stranger & other stories" by Will Dockery:
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
I still don't know why you tossers cross post to a photography group.
--
Paul (we break easy)
-------------------------------------------------------
Stop and Look
http://www.geocities.com/dreamst8me/
Because of my artistry as a photographer, as well as a poet. Good to
see you back around, Paul... Stuart tells me you have a poet brother
named Peter? Hope all is well with y'all.
A good-looking lady with a funky hat. I'm looking forward to the poem/
song that develops.
My own "Betty" is up to 1,488 lines. I've also added an appendix that
gives the hexadecimal values for each color. (Sandy's hat looks like
#C1CACA.) I'm not posting that monster, but I'll be happy to send you
a copy if you'd like.
I haven't been able to come up with an alternative for "Betty,''
though I've been looking. I suggested to Maureen and my daughter that
I substitute one of their names, and they suggested throwing me out of
the apartment.
A good-looking lady with a funky hat. I'm looking forward to the poem/
song that develops.
My own "Betty" is up to 1,488 lines. I've also added an appendix that
gives the hexadecimal values for each color. (Sandy's hat looks like
#C1CACA.) I'm not posting that monster, but I'll be happy to send you
a copy if you'd like.
I haven't been able to come up with an alternative for "Betty,''
though I've been looking. I suggested to Maureen and my daughter that
I substitute one of their names, and they suggested throwing me out of
the apartment.
Wow, this is amazing.
Now the existential metaphor has four more levels since Batty is not
the
prime entity but a stuffed toy (symbol) standing for both a physical
bat
and, at the same time, for the connection between you and your love.
The
hat, of course, adds another interactional layer: the continued vow
of
your love plus the universal vessel in which the relationship is
contained.
Black? Vampire? Purchased? (not to mention the ten years)
Well, this is the mongrel Rectal.Fart's.Poems and my Bushido code of
honour forbids me from baring your personal affairs in a place so
foul.
-> I posted it, after spending ten minutes writing it, as a way of
saying
-> thanks to the woman I love.
Ah! In the future you should spend no more than ten minutes writing
your
poetry as this seems to be a "sweet spot" beyond which all goes
downhill.
-> life
-> is the name of the game
->
-> at home
-> i play scrabble with my turds
->
-> and
-> i want to play the game with you
Alphabetic turds? Well, I take it back. You are a genius worthy
of Rectal.Fart's.Poems.
--------------------------------
-> My own "Betty" is up to 1,488 lines. I've also added an appendix
that
-> gives the hexadecimal values for each color. (Sandy's hat looks
like
-> #C1CACA.) I'm not posting that monster, but I'll be happy to send
you
-> a copy if you'd like.
Sounds cool, I'd like a copy.
ray
well, firstly, whatever this is it isn't photography Will, so be a
good chap and don't post it here.
secondly it may be my son, Peter, though whether he still dabbles I
don't know.
thirdly, thanks for the kind wishes and I hope all is well with you
too.
>> I still don't know why you tossers cross post to a photography group.
> Because of my artistry as a photographer, as well as a poet.
So why don't you include food newsgroups (you eat, don't you),
computer newsgroups (you use one), car newsgroups (I assume you
drive one), crap newsgroups (everyone defecates), buying and
selling newsgroups (you do buy things, right?) and so on and so
on and so on?
Followup to alt.test, because you should test your newsgroups
first.
-Wolfgang
On 12/10/09 4:08 PM, in article
0fca2b20-5ff4-4698...@g12g2000yqa.googlegroups.com, "Will
Dockery" <will.d...@gmail.com> wrote:
> On Dec 10, 4:39�pm, Paul Heslop <paul.hes...@blueyonder.co.uk> wrote:
>> Will Dockery wrote:
>>
>>> On Dec 10, 12:57 am, tx_max_king <txmxk...@yahoo.com> wrote:
>>
>>> <snip for brevity>
>>
>>>> Such dynamics!!!
>>
>>> Betty & Her Pale Blue Hat:
>>
>>> http://picasaweb.google.com/lh/photo/7x-Pbejp0sjvhopobh4wcQ?feat=dire...
>
>>
>>> The poem is about a girl named Betty... poor little Batty Betty with
>>> her pale Blue Hat.
>>
>>> --
>>> "Red Lipped Stranger & other stories" by Will Dockery:
>>> http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
>>
>> I still don't know why you tossers cross post to a photography group.
>
> Because of my artistry as a photographer, as well as a poet. Good to
> see you back around, Paul... Stuart tells me you have a poet brother
> named Peter? Hope all is well with y'all.
>
Yes. And a sister named Mary.
Tell us, are you the same Dockery who ran with the mouse up the clockery?
Yes, yes... indeed.
> I'm looking forward to the poem/
> song that develops.
It seems to be a step forward... in my opinion.
> My own "Betty" is up to 1,488 lines. I've also added an appendix that
> gives the hexadecimal values for each color. (Sandy's hat looks like
> #C1CACA.) I'm not posting that monster, but I'll be happy to send you
> a copy if you'd like.
>
> I haven't been able to come up with an alternative for "Betty,''
> though I've been looking. I suggested to Maureen and my daughter that
> I substitute one of their names, and they suggested throwing me out of
> the apartment.
Heh... probably pretty damned nippy up your way to have to spend the
night outdoors... maybe you should just keep it "Betty"?
> Damn, Peewee, I was wrong about you after all.
> You aren't gay
I hate to be the one to bring you this news, but one doesn't have to
be heterosexual to find you and your opinions unattractive. Gays and
lesbians probably despise you as much as I do.
on contraire, pete. many of my friends are musicians, artists,
gays and lesbians. I love them all equally and they love me
as well. We may not always agree politically, but we don't
let that compromise our friendship.
You seem to confuse the message with the messenger.
-max
PJR seems to have some multiple confusion issues, tonight...
--
"Please meet me at the holocaust valley, and you can tell us all about
it someday..." -Sammy Walker
Pretty amazing work, George...
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