LLP Section

[xelapond]

First off, I'm _REALLY_ sorry i'm late, I hope I don't cause too much trouble!

So, here is the LLP section.  I wrote it in OpenOffice Writer, and importing it into GDocs causes formatting issues, so I hope its not a problem if I attach it.  Its pretty long(~6 pages), though I still feel I am missing something:/  If you have any further suggestions please let me know and ill fix them as soon as possible.  I have attached a .odt and a .doc.

All the best,

Alex

[Görkem Çetin]

Hi Alex

I *loved* it. It's a very nice work, so exciting to read. :) Some quick ideas and suggestions:

1. The overall length of the chapter is quite appropriate, so don't get pressured to add more pages.
2. It's better to put a space before opening parantheses, it will ensure that this character does not glue two words at the end of the line.
3. It's better not to start the sentence with "Then" (only seen once, but could be nice if you check the whole doc).
4. The articles are anonymous within the book - I mean, all author names will be mentioned at the Preface/Introduction section, but it's virtually very hard to put author names next to each chapter. Therefore it's better to use 3rd person, and not mention the word "I" anywhere else. Likewise, I'm changing the wording of a sentence if I see the word "You". Please amend your doc necessarily to ensure overall coherence.
5. It's better not to mention about customer support of Aixiz, in fact if it's questionable, then we don't want to mention a company at all.
6. Search for two spaces after dots and delete one of them.
7. It's better not to use capitals anywhere in the doc (including the warning about lasers).
8. It's better to be consistent among v, volts and V. I'd use "V" only (i.e 5V, 3.3V etc).
9. Laser wiring illustration looks OK I think :-)
10. Illustration 9, 10 and 11 may not look good on paper. Is there a way to redesign it, or retake the photos?

Thank you again. If you happen to finish your chapter say in two days, I can immediately merge it.

Best
Görkem

2009/4/7 xelapond <xela...@gmail.com>

[xelapond]

Thanks!

Right now I can't work on it, but when I get home tonight I will fix those things up.

[rbedi100]

Hey Alex,
Yea, its really looking great. About mentioning Aixiz - I'm not really
sure about that either; I had told Alex it was a good idea to mention
- simply because they really do provide the majority of lasers used by
the community. Their customer support concerns bring up a good point
though...I don't think there's any problem with a one line reference
to them, though, in a neutral light.

Thanks!
Rishi

On Apr 7, 3:59 pm, xelapond <xelap...@gmail.com> wrote:
> Thanks!
>
> Right now I can't work on it, but when I get home tonight I will fix those
> things up.
>

> > 2009/4/7 xelapond <xelap...@gmail.com>

[xelapond]

Hello,

I felt that AixiZ really should be mentioned, because even if they have sketchy support the lasers seem high quality and are very cheap.  I have removed the bit about support though.

Thanks for all the suggestions!  I fixed all the things you mentioned, except in some cases I was not able to remove "you".  I couldn't get a better picture of Illustrations 9, 10 or 11, so I tried my hand in enhancing them with GIMP.  It didn't turn out _too_ bad, at least you can see the beam now.  I also got my spell-checker working, so their shouldn't be too many spelling errors.

Regards,

Alex

[xelapond]

Just a few little things, it should be good now.  The I = PV formula totally did not work with lasers("what, they only draw 2mA?"), so I figured out that each laser basically wants 500mA, VERY roughly.  I also said a little bit more about converting an ATX Power Supply, so people don't go tearing apart their PSU's and shocking themselves.

[rbedi100]

Great, Alex, thanks. So LLP is good to go!

On Apr 11, 11:28 am, xelapond <xelap...@gmail.com> wrote:
> Just a few little things, it should be good now.  The I = PV formula totally
> did not work with lasers("what, they only draw 2mA?"), so I figured out that
> each laser basically wants 500mA, VERY roughly.  I also said a little bit
> more about converting an ATX Power Supply, so people don't go tearing apart
> their PSU's and shocking themselves.
>

> On Wed, Apr 8, 2009 at 8:31 PM, xelapond <xelap...@gmail.com> wrote:
> > Hello,
>
> > I felt that AixiZ really should be mentioned, because even if they have
> > sketchy support the lasers seem high quality and are very cheap.  I have
> > removed the bit about support though.
>
> > Thanks for all the suggestions!  I fixed all the things you mentioned,
> > except in some cases I was not able to remove "you".  I couldn't get a
> > better picture of Illustrations 9, 10 or 11, so I tried my hand in enhancing
> > them with GIMP.  It didn't turn out _too_ bad, at least you can see the beam
> > now.  I also got my spell-checker working, so their shouldn't be too many
> > spelling errors.
>
> > Regards,
>
> > Alex
>

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