Below is a very well written, thought out, and detailed "action plan"
that addresses the "causes" of the problems at Loblaw, but it does
not define the overall problems that need to be solved. It is hard to
understand where the rest of the paper is going to go or what you are
trying to persuade us to believe the problems with Loblaw to be
because it includes so much information. I also feel like you may have
repeated this information quite a bit in the rest of your paper
because it is really the nuts and bolts of the causes and actions?
I have no idea if we were on the right track,so take ALL of the above
with a grain of salt :)
Thanks, Shannon
On Nov 22, 6:48 pm, Priscilla Scotland <priscilla.scotl...@gmail.com>
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