Fallen Angel - an Evangelion fanfic

[Pen^3]

Psaiyan Prince Vegeta <ppve...@hotmail.communism> squawked:
> This story deals with the trials Rei Ayanami must face as she recovers
> from the physical and mental implications of a brutal rape at the
> hands of the angel Sachiel as well as reconciling her infatuation with
> Gendo Ikari and attempting the salvation of her own heart.
>
> This story is most definitely a lemon, also containing dark and mature
> subject matter such as suicide, depression and self-harm and should
> not be read by anyone under the age of 18.
>
> http://www.mediaminer.org/fanfic/view_st.php?id=32149
>
> I have written up to chapter 4 so far and I would appreciate any
> feedback (criticism, flames, ideas for improvements/new plot elements,
> whatever) that you guys have to offer.

Do you realise there is already a fanfic called "Eva: Fallen Angel"
by Mekat?

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"Psaiyan Prince Vegeta" <ppve...@hotmail.communism> wrote in message
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> This story deals with the trials Rei Ayanami must face as she recovers
> from the physical and mental implications of a brutal rape at the
> hands of the angel Sachiel as well as reconciling her infatuation with
> Gendo Ikari and attempting the salvation of her own heart.

Cool story. Man those sex scenes were hot!!

Are you gonna have Gendo fucking Rei in the end or not? U should have him
getting her pregnant too.

[Pen^3]

Psaiyan Prince Vegeta <ppve...@hotmail.communism> squawked:

> On Sat, 15 Mar 2003 19:51:06 +0930, Pen^3 <Pe...@pen3.cjb.net.AQ>
> wrote:
> >Do you realise there is already a fanfic called "Eva: Fallen Angel"
> >by Mekat?
>

> No, I didn't.
>
> I am considering changing the title anyway, as I have been informed of
> another fic, with a similar premise to mine with the title "To Make an
> Angel Fall". It's just a question of finding something relevant and/or
> good.
>
> Anyhow, did you like it?

It was interesting. Most of the writing style is very good, but there
are a few sentences that are a bit out of place. The topic is not for
everyone.

I was wondering why you wrote this? What is your goal for the story?
It isn't a lemon in the way I normally think of them, which is like
sex for sex's sake. You seem to be focusing on Rei's feelings
following the graphic rape, but in other ways glossing over it. I
feels a bit unfocused.