陈词滥调(1)
顺序结构词
Firstly,secondly之类的词请不要再写了。To start with, following that之类的也是一样,好不到哪去。为
什么?从词汇角度来说,这些都不是罕见词汇,所以不会加分;从语法角度来说,这些只是简单语法, 技术含量很低,所以也不稀罕;从文章的连贯流利程度来
说,这一类只是机械性的连接词 (mechanic linking device),与其说连接段落文章,不如说是机械性的切割的文章段落,亦不可
取。从单纯的凑字数的角度来说就更凑不了多少词汇了。
综上所述,请在写作文的时候不要再用这类词汇。
改良:
将顺序次藏在句子中间,如:
陈:Firstly, lack of self-awareness is the major reason.
Follwing that, environmental pollution is also why people do not
agree.
新:Lack of self-awareness could be the first reason leading to such
problem.
On top of the reason list could be the lack of self-awareness
Lack of self-awareness could be on top of the reason list.
Lack of self-awareness, first of all, could be one reason leading
to the problem
Concern is also mounting regarding environmental pollution.
主要的方法就是活用插入语,主语宾语替换和多样的连接词(如On top of the ..... list could be)
这样子就不会出现机械性的分割结构。
陈词滥调(2)
举例词汇
For example, for instance 之类的表达也是同上,可以不要再用了。基本上来讲,这些词虽然可以告诉阅卷人下面的文字是例
子, 但他们只是相当于符号而已,充其量跟写 e.g. 差不了许多。又凑不了字数,又讨不了彩头,那还不如换成如下:
新: One good example can be that.....
....... can also be a fine example.
......................, which can be a unfortuante example.
这样子一来可以凑字数,二来又是从句,三来又避免了机械性的将文章切割开来。
陈词滥调 (3)
因果关系词
because, so, therefore, as a result, 这类的词汇亦如鸡肋,所有人都会用且所有人都在用,不凑字数又没啥语法,
所以也就不稀罕了。可以尝试用下面的新的形式:
新:Due to the fact that....
Owning to the fact that
Resulting from the fact that
这样子一来字数可以更好凑,二来又出现从句,三来出现的也相对较少,文章结构看起来也会更加流畅
雅思写作中的陈词滥调还有很多,都藏在了大家得思维死角里面,仔细想一下的话,大家就都会发现很多此类可以提炼的内容。小汤会陆续更新。
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