GTF 34... Singapore Teams

[cfle...@masonlive.gmu.edu]

To GTF 34 Group, Hello from Ecology.  We appreciate the contribution each Team has made to the website-- the graphics are great and the text is off to a great start too.  Ecology has a couple of topics we would like to suggest for discussion in our next WebEx meeting.  First, few books are ever published without an editor's polishing or corrections.  So, would the Group prefer to collectively allow different Teams to tweak & refine the grammar/ sentence structure to the pages of other Teams-- or would Teams appreciate seeing the suggested edits of other Teams via email(copy & paste).  Without some collaborative editing process our website stands no chance of appearing consistent and professional.  We have not even established our desired font style & size.

Lastly, in the past, some of us--Ecology included--have been critical of Leadership's lack of leadership.  However, only half of the group has posted their availability for our next WebEx meeting even though Leadership posted the Doodle Poll for the meeting 7 days ago. Those of us who have shown our availability would appreciate the rest of the Group doing the same. 

Thank You, Chris Fleshren- Ecology 34

[SORENSEN Ingrid-krakhella]

As every team will be graded on their own team and not on an overall, it would be better to send suggestions if you want to do this. Please do not edit the business site unless we agree on your suggestions. Of course fonts and size can be edited. 

The business team. 

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[cfle...@masonlive.gmu.edu]

Ok Business, Ecology will not edit your sections of the website. And we will not edit any other Team's section unless requested.  I mentioned this because, while our grading may be on our individual sections, each of our Teams has different skills. Tapping into those skills is one way we could improve on the lack of consistency of the different sections of our website.  Also, you said "Of course fonts & size can be edited."  Well, we know they "can", but do you have a suggestion for what might look best for the entire website or different sections?  Do any other Teams have font or size suggestions?  There is no rush for this, but it is something we should be able to accomplish in an email or two.

Thank you, Chris Fleshren, Ecology 34

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[SLEIGH Salina]

For fonts and sizes we are just going to use the basic so its easy to read and the size is 16. But it seems they are all matching now pretty well which is great. However if there's specific things you wishes to highlight or emphasize in your section by changing font/size/color please do!
As for improving the consistency we welcome any feedback via email about suggestions to our section.

Thanks,
Business team

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Sent: November 3, 2012 11:11 PM
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Subject: RE: GTF 34... Singapore Teams

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[cfle...@masonlive.gmu.edu]

Yes Business, the font & size look the same on each web page now.  Thank you to whoever tweaked them.  Looks great to Ecology.  I did notice two sentences in the Introduction that I think could stand a little improvement.
Please don't take offense at this, I'm just throwing in my two cents worth. If you would rather I concentrate only on Ecology's sections in the future just let me know. 
The sentences in Italics below are 'as-written' in the Intro, and right after them are a couple of options.   
Moreover Singapore is also ranking at the third place of the highest per capita income in the world.  1)  Moreover, Singapore ranks number three in the world for highest per capita income.  Or, 2)  Moreover, Singapore has the third highest per capita income in the world. (Either way a comma is needed after "Moreover."  Also, a 'space' is needed between the end of this sentence and the beginning of the next sentence- which starts with: "Governing of the city...")

Next, I'm not sure what this sentence is saying: "We believe in that opportunity to contribute to the well-being of a maximum of people."  In what "opportunity"?  Perhaps you meant to say something like:  1)  We believe that our solution to light pollution will benefit the maximum number of people.  Or, 2) We believe that our solution to light pollution will contribute to the well being of the maximum number of people."

However, simply inserting either of these last two sentences creates a problem because 'light pollution' is not previously mentioned in the Introduction; which is something our feedback said we should have in the Intro.

Good Luck, Chris Fleshren, Ecology 34

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Sent: Sunday, November 04, 2012 3:30 PM

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