RE: Pirates of the Caribbean - a Pirate stole my heart
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daniel
Jul 15, 2009, 7:13:32 AM7/15/09
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I just read the 'A Pirate stole my heart' story and would like to
comment.
In terms of entertainment the story was highly interesting and
compelling. It was also quite believable as a woman could naturally
get tempted with her many away to find a new love who is close at
hand. The racy language was well written and enticing.
Some of the grammar needs work, and I wouldn't use some of the word
choices or sentence structures (ie syntax) that you have used, but it
was overall quite a good story. I would, if the author can at all
afford it, consider having the story edited by professional editor to
improve the grammar and then post this story to the various fanfiction
websites.
I give the story 7 out of 10 and will read it again.
Daniel Thomas Andrew Daly
Author of the 'Chronicles of the Children of Destiny'
Noahide Books
www.noahidebooks.com
Canberra, Australia
comment.
In terms of entertainment the story was highly interesting and
compelling. It was also quite believable as a woman could naturally
get tempted with her many away to find a new love who is close at
hand. The racy language was well written and enticing.
Some of the grammar needs work, and I wouldn't use some of the word
choices or sentence structures (ie syntax) that you have used, but it
was overall quite a good story. I would, if the author can at all
afford it, consider having the story edited by professional editor to
improve the grammar and then post this story to the various fanfiction
websites.
I give the story 7 out of 10 and will read it again.
Daniel Thomas Andrew Daly
Author of the 'Chronicles of the Children of Destiny'
Noahide Books
www.noahidebooks.com
Canberra, Australia
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