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Marina González Godoy

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Jan 25, 2012, 8:01:04 AM1/25/12
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Marina

Learning languages books:

   Some Spanish people believe learning languages is extremely difficult. We are convinced there are several reasons to consider this statement. For instance,Spaniards haven't learned any language when they were children and they have lived a dictatorship which didn't allow foreign ideas, cultures... for many years (and we could add they aren't concerned enough!!). Maybe for these problems, many authors are writing self-help books right now. They seem to us they are absolutaly unuseful.

 

   To begin with that statement, we strongly point out this types of books don't really work as they should. They are full of repetitive sentences which almost everybody knows. Furthermore, It is clear to us the whole book is like a summary of every action we should do so as to learning a foreing language.

 

   Taking these points into consideration, having positive thoughts are not enough in order to be successful with the learning process. Nevertheless, we are aware if we aren't  a little bit motivated, we'll never improve. At the same time, most people know how to improve it: the only thing we must do is just do it.

 

   To a nutshell, we agree we must be conscious to learn a foreign language. However, It's not necessary reading self-help books. We just need to work hard.

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Jan 26, 2012, 2:41:25 PM1/26/12
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Hi there !, beware of contractions! I think your opinion essay must be
considered a formal writing.

ANGELO

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Jan 31, 2012, 12:25:55 PM1/31/12
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i totally agree! careful with contractions!

ANGELO

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Jan 31, 2012, 12:30:04 PM1/31/12
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El miércoles 25 de enero de 2012 14:01:04 UTC+1, Marina González Godoy escribió:

David

Cristina

Beatriz

Alicia

Marina

Learning languages books:

   Some Spanish people believe learning languages is extremely difficult. We are convinced there are several reasons to consider this statement. For instance,Spaniards haven't learned any language when they were children and they have lived a dictatorship which didn't allow WW foreign ideas, cultures... for many years (and we could add they aren't NO CONTRACTIONS concerned enough!!). Maybe for these problems, many authors are writing self-help books right now. They seem to us they are absolutaly unuseful. WHY? REASON?

 

   To begin with that statement, we strongly point out this types of books don't really work as they should. They are full of repetitive sentences which almost everybody knows. IF EVERYBODY KNOWS THEM, WHY NOBODY DOES THEM? ;)  Furthermore, It is clear to us the whole book is like a summary of every action we should do so as to learning a foreing language.

 

   Taking these points into consideration, having positive thoughts are not enough in order to be successful with the learning process. Nevertheless, we are aware if we aren't  a little bit motivated, we'll never improve. At the same time, most people know how to improve it: the only thing we must do is just do it.

 

   To a nutshell, we agree we must be conscious ABOUT LEARNING (to learn) a foreign language. However, It's not necessary reading self-help books. We just need to work hard.


NICE WORK! I MISSED SOME MORE ANALYSIS IN THE NEGATIVE PART AND OFFERING SOLUTIONS... BUT THAT S NOT A NECESSARY PART IN AN OPINION ESSAY... YOUR INTRODUCTION WAS VERY LONG IN COMPARISON TO THE REST. THE PARAGRAPH STATING THAT SOME PEOPLE LIKE THIS KIND OF BOOKS IS NOT EXPLORED AS IT SHOULD. AND THE CONCLUSION IS VERY VAGUE... CAREFUL. ALTHOUGH THERE ARE ALMOST NOT MISTAKES, I M NOT SURE THIS ESSAY WOULD GET 3 POINTS IN THE APPROPIATENESS PART OF THE EVALUATION...
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