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Carl Roach
Oct 10, 2011, 6:13:53 PM10/10/11
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1.Go to your Webtext & podcast script (if you've already done it).
Identify and bold your thesis statement in your Webtext and your
topic
sentences (your script should have a topic sentence). Your thesis
statement should be somewhere in your Webtext introduction. If it’s
not there, put it there.
2. Your Webtext thesis should represent one of the following:
Analyze
Persuade
Argue
Which is your thesis doing? Explain.
For all of the following, do the same for the podcast script if you
have it finished.
3. Read your thesis statement and topic sentences. Are the topic
sentences supporting the claim made in your thesis? Why or why not?
Give examples.
4. Go to the link below, and read starting at the section titled
"Paragraph Structure:" When you are finished, explain what you
already
knew and what you did not know.
http://www.indiana.edu/~wts/pamphlets/paragraphs.shtml
5. Read your work. Is each sentence related to the previous
sentence? Is there cohesion between the sentences? If not, work on
this.
6. Each of your paragraphs should have a topic sentence. That
topic
sentence is the main claim for that paragraph. Then, your claim must
be supported by evidence in the form of your synthesized research.
Are your paragraphs fully supporting each topic sentence? Do you
have
fallacies or illogical connections within your work? Explain.
Work on this.
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discussion when you are finished.
1.Go to your Webtext & podcast script (if you've already done it).
Identify and bold your thesis statement in your Webtext and your
topic
sentences (your script should have a topic sentence). Your thesis
statement should be somewhere in your Webtext introduction. If it’s
not there, put it there.
2. Your Webtext thesis should represent one of the following:
Analyze
Persuade
Argue
Which is your thesis doing? Explain.
For all of the following, do the same for the podcast script if you
have it finished.
3. Read your thesis statement and topic sentences. Are the topic
sentences supporting the claim made in your thesis? Why or why not?
Give examples.
4. Go to the link below, and read starting at the section titled
"Paragraph Structure:" When you are finished, explain what you
already
knew and what you did not know.
http://www.indiana.edu/~wts/pamphlets/paragraphs.shtml
5. Read your work. Is each sentence related to the previous
sentence? Is there cohesion between the sentences? If not, work on
this.
6. Each of your paragraphs should have a topic sentence. That
topic
sentence is the main claim for that paragraph. Then, your claim must
be supported by evidence in the form of your synthesized research.
Are your paragraphs fully supporting each topic sentence? Do you
have
fallacies or illogical connections within your work? Explain.
Work on this.
Click REPLY, and NOT Reply to Author, and then click SEND
Kayla McCoy
Oct 10, 2011, 6:33:39 PM10/10/11
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2. My thesis is persuasive because it tells people bad things about
the past in order for them to change the future.
3. My topic sentences help with the claim with the thesis by having
keywords in them that are similar to the thesis
4. I knew that there are parts of a paragraph such as introduction,
body, and conclusion. What I didn’t know was that the certain
sentences such as thesis and topic sentence need to be capitalized.
Most of the information I already knew about like the body follows the
introduction using examples and arguments.
5. I believe my sentences coexist by putting in what i learned to mix
with the whole body of the paper.
6. I do think that my topic sentence for each paragraph is being
supported with research most of them I have cited in the paragraph.
William McCloud
Oct 10, 2011, 6:49:06 PM10/10/11
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William McCloud
October 10, 2011
1. I believe that music actually does have an effect on how the youth
of society behave not only around other youth, but also around people
they see on a more intimate level, such as family.
2. My thesis is persuasive because it is to convince people that music
can sometimes be the cause of ignorance in the youth, but sometimes
it’s not the cause.
3. Yes because my topic sentence goes into detail about the entire
paragraph and it shows why I think that it may very well be the reason
that youth are taking a turn for the worst in this day and age.
4. I already knew about paragraphs having the three part structure,
which includes an introduction, body, and a conclusion. I also knew
that a well-organized paragraph supports a single idea. I didn’t know
there were instances where a paragraph might not need a topic
sentence.
5. I think that the sentences in the paragraphs are related. But
between paragraphs, I think that I could work on better connecting the
ideas.
6. I think that my paragraphs fully support each topic sentence. I
think that my paragraphs definitely take the topic sentence sand
expound on the idea completely. I can see where someone might think
that some of the work that is in my web text would be a fallacy, but
everything that is there, is definitely researched. Something that I
could definitely work on would be writing to make the reader
understand my point a little better and not worrying so much about
solid hard facts.
October 10, 2011
1. I believe that music actually does have an effect on how the youth
of society behave not only around other youth, but also around people
they see on a more intimate level, such as family.
2. My thesis is persuasive because it is to convince people that music
can sometimes be the cause of ignorance in the youth, but sometimes
it’s not the cause.
3. Yes because my topic sentence goes into detail about the entire
paragraph and it shows why I think that it may very well be the reason
that youth are taking a turn for the worst in this day and age.
4. I already knew about paragraphs having the three part structure,
which includes an introduction, body, and a conclusion. I also knew
that a well-organized paragraph supports a single idea. I didn’t know
there were instances where a paragraph might not need a topic
sentence.
5. I think that the sentences in the paragraphs are related. But
between paragraphs, I think that I could work on better connecting the
ideas.
6. I think that my paragraphs fully support each topic sentence. I
think that my paragraphs definitely take the topic sentence sand
expound on the idea completely. I can see where someone might think
that some of the work that is in my web text would be a fallacy, but
everything that is there, is definitely researched. Something that I
could definitely work on would be writing to make the reader
understand my point a little better and not worrying so much about
solid hard facts.
Maria Chavez
Oct 10, 2011, 6:51:09 PM10/10/11
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Maria Chavez
1. Intro: Every day many newcomers set foot in the United States. Many
if not most of those newcomers do not speak or understand the English
language. When they come here they have no other option but to adapt
and to learn the language if they wish to succeed in this country.
Many of these newcomers are school-age individuals that would not be
able to succeed neither academically nor socially due to the language
barrier; this is why bilingual programs are created—to help these
newcomers adapt and to learn the language. Bilingual programs are
there to help them succeed. Although bilingual education programs have
proven to help there are many who doubt their effectiveness. I believe
bilingual programs to be both effective and of paramount importance
when to learning a new language.
Usually these newcomers are enrolled in bilingual programs in the
means of helping them learn the English language. Once in the program,
the students are taught to read and write in English. They are taught
new skills that will help them both academically and socially.
2. My thesis is basically meant to persuade my audience of the
effectiveness and the importance of bilingual education programs.
Today, with all the English-only controversy, many people are fighting
against bilingual programs. There are many people who want them
eradicated because they do not think they are neither effective nor
useful. In this second phase of my project I want to tell (persuade)
people of the effectiveness of the programs.
3. My podcast script is not fully done, but I do believe that the
topic sentence that I have so far do support my claim (thesis
statement). For example, my thesis is that bilingual education
programs are effective and my topic sentences are about the
effectiveness of the programs. The content of the sentences suggests
and explains why and how bilingual education programs are effective,
helpful, and important when learning a new language.
4. Paragraph Structure:
--I knew that paragraphs need to have structure and that they needed
to be coherent. I also knew that paragraphs need to be composed of
several sentences.
--I did not know that paragraphs were composed of three different
parts. In other words, I did not know that paragraphs had to have an
introduction, a body, and a conclusion. I thought that that only
pertained to essays and the like.
5. For the most part all the sentences are related; there just a
couple that seem to be out of place, but I will make sure to correct
that. I will make sure that all sentences are coherent and relevant.
6. Not all of my paragraphs have good topic sentences, so I know I am
going to have to work on that. I also need more evidence to support
all of my topic sentence claims, so I am going to try to find more
useful resources. I do think that I have some illogical connections
within my work, so I will work on that too. For example I have some
sentences that are not that relevant to the main claims being made and
a couple of the sentences are not logical (I will work on this too).
1. Intro: Every day many newcomers set foot in the United States. Many
if not most of those newcomers do not speak or understand the English
language. When they come here they have no other option but to adapt
and to learn the language if they wish to succeed in this country.
Many of these newcomers are school-age individuals that would not be
able to succeed neither academically nor socially due to the language
barrier; this is why bilingual programs are created—to help these
newcomers adapt and to learn the language. Bilingual programs are
there to help them succeed. Although bilingual education programs have
proven to help there are many who doubt their effectiveness. I believe
bilingual programs to be both effective and of paramount importance
when to learning a new language.
Usually these newcomers are enrolled in bilingual programs in the
means of helping them learn the English language. Once in the program,
the students are taught to read and write in English. They are taught
new skills that will help them both academically and socially.
2. My thesis is basically meant to persuade my audience of the
effectiveness and the importance of bilingual education programs.
Today, with all the English-only controversy, many people are fighting
against bilingual programs. There are many people who want them
eradicated because they do not think they are neither effective nor
useful. In this second phase of my project I want to tell (persuade)
people of the effectiveness of the programs.
3. My podcast script is not fully done, but I do believe that the
topic sentence that I have so far do support my claim (thesis
statement). For example, my thesis is that bilingual education
programs are effective and my topic sentences are about the
effectiveness of the programs. The content of the sentences suggests
and explains why and how bilingual education programs are effective,
helpful, and important when learning a new language.
4. Paragraph Structure:
--I knew that paragraphs need to have structure and that they needed
to be coherent. I also knew that paragraphs need to be composed of
several sentences.
--I did not know that paragraphs were composed of three different
parts. In other words, I did not know that paragraphs had to have an
introduction, a body, and a conclusion. I thought that that only
pertained to essays and the like.
5. For the most part all the sentences are related; there just a
couple that seem to be out of place, but I will make sure to correct
that. I will make sure that all sentences are coherent and relevant.
6. Not all of my paragraphs have good topic sentences, so I know I am
going to have to work on that. I also need more evidence to support
all of my topic sentence claims, so I am going to try to find more
useful resources. I do think that I have some illogical connections
within my work, so I will work on that too. For example I have some
sentences that are not that relevant to the main claims being made and
a couple of the sentences are not logical (I will work on this too).
Hilary Pagorek
Oct 10, 2011, 6:54:04 PM10/10/11
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Hilary Pagorek
1.) Sex education is something that is taught most of the time but at
what age is it actually appropriate.
2.) It is analyzing and also arguing what the age for teaching sex
education should be. It ties in with the sentences around it saying
how children have become more exposed to sex.
3.) Yes it is because it includes the things that kids are exposed to
and how young these kids are learning about sex in their everyday
environment. It also it something that is taught in different ways
but not everyone wants it. It also shows two views on what kids
should know according to the parents. Then I have studies at which it
is most common for kids to start learning about their bodies and how
things work. It ends up giving an average age for kids to start
learning.
4.) I already knew that a paper is made up of 3 different parts and
that you typically need a thesis statement so you can draw in your
audience and give the over view on the paper. Nothing that a college
student shouldn’t know by now.
5.) Yes there is because it is related to the overall topic of that
section.
6.) Yes in my work I back up the things that are stated especially
when it comes to the statistics and what parents have said. I haven’t
made anything up, it all relates to one another and it backs up what
is previously stated. My “paragraphs” are broken down so that the
reader can easily read what is in front of him/her and won’t get bored
with it. They are all as I said related to the opening of each bullet
point presented.
1.) Sex education is something that is taught most of the time but at
what age is it actually appropriate.
2.) It is analyzing and also arguing what the age for teaching sex
education should be. It ties in with the sentences around it saying
how children have become more exposed to sex.
3.) Yes it is because it includes the things that kids are exposed to
and how young these kids are learning about sex in their everyday
environment. It also it something that is taught in different ways
but not everyone wants it. It also shows two views on what kids
should know according to the parents. Then I have studies at which it
is most common for kids to start learning about their bodies and how
things work. It ends up giving an average age for kids to start
learning.
4.) I already knew that a paper is made up of 3 different parts and
that you typically need a thesis statement so you can draw in your
audience and give the over view on the paper. Nothing that a college
student shouldn’t know by now.
5.) Yes there is because it is related to the overall topic of that
section.
6.) Yes in my work I back up the things that are stated especially
when it comes to the statistics and what parents have said. I haven’t
made anything up, it all relates to one another and it backs up what
is previously stated. My “paragraphs” are broken down so that the
reader can easily read what is in front of him/her and won’t get bored
with it. They are all as I said related to the opening of each bullet
point presented.
Emily Sams-Vitalone
Oct 10, 2011, 7:01:21 PM10/10/11
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Adding ninety minutes to the school day is beneficial to students but
is not fair for the teachers salary and rights. This argues that what
the Chicago Education Board is doing is not fair to the teachers and
the lawsuit that the Chicago Teachers Union gave to the Education
Board is fair. I knew that there are introduction, body, and
concluding paragraphs in an essay but I was not aware that the
concluding paragraph did more than just giving back all the
information you've already written. All the sentences flow together
but still need the cohesion and placement to be better structured. I
do have a few illogical connections only because my mind is still
focused on the phase one webtext and my phase two is closely related.
is not fair for the teachers salary and rights. This argues that what
the Chicago Education Board is doing is not fair to the teachers and
the lawsuit that the Chicago Teachers Union gave to the Education
Board is fair. I knew that there are introduction, body, and
concluding paragraphs in an essay but I was not aware that the
concluding paragraph did more than just giving back all the
information you've already written. All the sentences flow together
but still need the cohesion and placement to be better structured. I
do have a few illogical connections only because my mind is still
focused on the phase one webtext and my phase two is closely related.
Delana McCarroll
Oct 11, 2011, 7:38:08 PM10/11/11
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2) My thesis statement is meant to be an analyzing thesis. I am trying
to analyze and inform readers about the serious dangers of smoking
indoors and how it effects everyone and not just the smoker.
3) Yes, because my sentences are stating facts on how secondhand smoke
effects others. Example-Secondhand smoke is more harmful and releases
more toxins than the smoke inhaled by the smoker.
4) What I knew-Introduction comes first, the body is everything in the
middle and the conclusion comes last.
What I didn't know-It is okay to capitalize the topic and concluding
sentences in final drafts.
5) I believe I have good cohesion in my sentences.
6) I feel that my paragraphs each have their own topics and flow well
together.
to analyze and inform readers about the serious dangers of smoking
indoors and how it effects everyone and not just the smoker.
3) Yes, because my sentences are stating facts on how secondhand smoke
effects others. Example-Secondhand smoke is more harmful and releases
more toxins than the smoke inhaled by the smoker.
4) What I knew-Introduction comes first, the body is everything in the
middle and the conclusion comes last.
What I didn't know-It is okay to capitalize the topic and concluding
sentences in final drafts.
5) I believe I have good cohesion in my sentences.
6) I feel that my paragraphs each have their own topics and flow well
together.
On Oct 10, 5:13 pm, Carl Roach <carlwalterro...@gmail.com> wrote:
Sarah Addington
Oct 12, 2011, 4:02:15 PM10/12/11
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1. Students who attend the 5th grade in a middle school setting
need to be introduced to the DARE program before the beginning of
their first day of middle school because they will need to be prepared
for the change in atmosphere and the advanced peers they will be
grouped with.
2. My thesis is arguing a point. The point that is being argued is
that the D.A.R.E. program is beneficial and the bulk of the program
should be completed before the first day of middle school.
3. Yes my topic sentence is supporting my claim.
Although it has been much criticized the D.A.R.E. program is critical
to educate adolescent students about the harmfulness of drugs and the
repercussions of drug abuse
4. I knew a lot of this information about paragraphs and the
structure of paragraphs from different classes that I have taken in
the past. It was helpful to go over the transition words because I
tend to stick to using one or two and this exposes me to other
transition words.
Eric Jorgensen
Oct 24, 2011, 5:10:42 PM10/24/11
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2. I would say persuade because while the majority of the webtext is
analyzing things that have happened with bad teachers and such they
are ment to persuade you towards a different point of view.
3. Yes. My thesis states that there are not near enough teachers
being fired for not doing their jobs. Each part of my webtext is
supporting this with another idea.
4. I knew about the three parts of a paragraph and that each paragraph
should support the main theme. Actually that all seems like common
sense to me when I really think about it.
5. Yes it all runs well together.
6. No that I notice. Today I am having someone review it so hopefully
any issues will be caught and corrected.
analyzing things that have happened with bad teachers and such they
are ment to persuade you towards a different point of view.
3. Yes. My thesis states that there are not near enough teachers
being fired for not doing their jobs. Each part of my webtext is
supporting this with another idea.
4. I knew about the three parts of a paragraph and that each paragraph
should support the main theme. Actually that all seems like common
sense to me when I really think about it.
5. Yes it all runs well together.
6. No that I notice. Today I am having someone review it so hopefully
any issues will be caught and corrected.
On Oct 10, 5:13 pm, Carl Roach <carlwalterro...@gmail.com> wrote:
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