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Ty
Nov 5, 2007, 10:31:15 PM11/5/07
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First scene of Chapter 2
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Harrison Bradlow
Nov 6, 2007, 12:07:28 AM11/6/07
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Update should be pretty easy to find, I won't bother with directions!
Jason, I asked Petre a question and went ahead and answered it for
him. If you don't like Petre's response, feel free to change it. It
was a minor question though so I thought I'd go ahead and fill in an
appropriate seeming response. Just as a heads up to everybody, I have
no problem with anybody doing that in a conversation with Aleksandr.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 6, 2007, 7:44:06 AM11/6/07
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A few minor grammar edits.
Jason Bross
Nov 6, 2007, 9:42:55 PM11/6/07
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edited the end after Aleks spoke, replied to GM's note
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 6, 2007, 11:42:21 PM11/6/07
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At the end, replied to Petre.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 12, 2007, 11:48:13 AM11/12/07
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Hi all. I initiated conversations with Ausi, August, and Traxxek.
They take place on multiple time frames, like the different threads we
had going during the general dinner scene. Feel free to go in and
make replies. Also, you'll note that I had Aleksandr say several
lines of dialogue without any responses. Hopefully that'll help the
whole scene move along. Whoever is in the conversation with him, feel
free to edit the dialogue as you feel is necessary, use your
judgment. If you want to split up something Aleksandr says into two
lines, or combine two down to one, or add or subtract little things,
go for it.
They take place on multiple time frames, like the different threads we
had going during the general dinner scene. Feel free to go in and
make replies. Also, you'll note that I had Aleksandr say several
lines of dialogue without any responses. Hopefully that'll help the
whole scene move along. Whoever is in the conversation with him, feel
free to edit the dialogue as you feel is necessary, use your
judgment. If you want to split up something Aleksandr says into two
lines, or combine two down to one, or add or subtract little things,
go for it.
Ty
Nov 12, 2007, 11:52:08 AM11/12/07
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New GM Note, (time-sensitive so check it out)
Christiane Koval
Nov 12, 2007, 2:22:22 PM11/12/07
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Near the end, added a paragraph.
I won't be able to get on much the next couple weeks, as I said in the
reply to Ty's note, but feel free to talk to Rosa anyway, I always
check my email, so I'll know if something's updated.
Parker Jakes
Nov 12, 2007, 9:11:37 PM11/12/07
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responded to aleksandr, in his bedroom no less!!!!!!!!
Jason Bross
Nov 12, 2007, 11:47:40 PM11/12/07
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Replied to Aleks in both places
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 13, 2007, 5:16:57 AM11/13/07
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Replied to Petre in the beginning.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 13, 2007, 5:24:32 AM11/13/07
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Responded to Traxxek at the end.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 13, 2007, 5:35:10 AM11/13/07
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Replied to Ausi, sort of in the middle. I skipped a small chunk of
conversation which we can fill in as we go.
conversation which we can fill in as we go.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 13, 2007, 4:06:08 PM11/13/07
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Modified the scene on the deck between Aleksandr and August so that
Ausi is there also for the latter portion of it.
Ausi is there also for the latter portion of it.
Jason Bross
Nov 13, 2007, 8:21:56 PM11/13/07
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relied to Aleks
Parker Jakes
Nov 13, 2007, 11:12:37 PM11/13/07
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responded to aleks
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 14, 2007, 4:56:52 AM11/14/07
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Replied to Traxxek, described Aleksandr's quarters and office.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 14, 2007, 5:27:49 AM11/14/07
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Responded to Ausimandeus, went back and inserted one line into Ausi's
last post, and split it into two paragraphs at the point where I added
my line. Also, toward the end of the scene, I added something else
that I said to Traxxek as a result of my conversation with Ausi.
last post, and split it into two paragraphs at the point where I added
my line. Also, toward the end of the scene, I added something else
that I said to Traxxek as a result of my conversation with Ausi.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 14, 2007, 5:35:52 AM11/14/07
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Added a phone call between Aleksandr and Petre to update Petre after
Aleks' conversation with Ausimandeus.
Aleks' conversation with Ausimandeus.
Jason Bross
Nov 14, 2007, 11:17:12 PM11/14/07
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Edited near the middle and replied to Aleks near the end.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 15, 2007, 10:55:31 AM11/15/07
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Replied to Traxxek at the end.
Jason Bross
Nov 15, 2007, 11:49:12 PM11/15/07
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responded to aleks.
Christiane Koval
Nov 16, 2007, 12:21:42 AM11/16/07
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Toward the end, right after the boat reaches the dock.
I'll probably post a bit more in the next week, but I'm still slow,
there's about a two-second lag between typing and seeing my text
appear. Can't wait to get back to home and Wi-fi!
I'll probably post a bit more in the next week, but I'm still slow,
there's about a two-second lag between typing and seeing my text
appear. Can't wait to get back to home and Wi-fi!
Marjolijn
Nov 16, 2007, 1:16:32 AM11/16/07
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Okay, here is my opening post. Basically, it's an intro scene where I
enter after Traxxek's dock-approach, and a scene where I ask to be
accepted as House Swordmaster to Aleksandr at the end.
enter after Traxxek's dock-approach, and a scene where I ask to be
accepted as House Swordmaster to Aleksandr at the end.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 16, 2007, 5:01:04 AM11/16/07
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Replied to Marjolijn, at the end. Welcome!
Sidenote: Is there some sort of conflict between your character and
Traxxek? If so, and if Aleksandr would be familiar with it (ie, it's
not some sort of internal, personal thing), I'll take that into
account in RPing.
Sidenote: Is there some sort of conflict between your character and
Traxxek? If so, and if Aleksandr would be familiar with it (ie, it's
not some sort of internal, personal thing), I'll take that into
account in RPing.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 16, 2007, 5:14:14 AM11/16/07
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Replied to Traxxek, near the end.
Marjolijn
Nov 16, 2007, 12:20:02 PM11/16/07
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Added on a description of Marjolijn to her entrance (realized I hadn't
actually said what she looked like). Also added more about her duties
to the conversation with Aleksandr.
As to relationship with Traxxek---Slightly unclear to outsiders; they
worked together extremely well, but were never obviously physical or
such. As to the Spymaster---She worked under him very obediently, and
seemed to have an excellent military tactical planning to add to his
spying abilities. Kept a bit of a personal distance from him, unlike
most of the people she works with.
actually said what she looked like). Also added more about her duties
to the conversation with Aleksandr.
As to relationship with Traxxek---Slightly unclear to outsiders; they
worked together extremely well, but were never obviously physical or
such. As to the Spymaster---She worked under him very obediently, and
seemed to have an excellent military tactical planning to add to his
spying abilities. Kept a bit of a personal distance from him, unlike
most of the people she works with.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 16, 2007, 4:54:19 PM11/16/07
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Added to the scene at the end w/ Aleks and Marjolijn.
Jason Bross
Nov 16, 2007, 8:26:17 PM11/16/07
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responded to aleks
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 16, 2007, 8:42:09 PM11/16/07
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Replied to Traxxek.
Jason Bross
Nov 17, 2007, 2:25:32 AM11/17/07
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replied to Aleks
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 17, 2007, 6:09:01 AM11/17/07
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Added a conversation between Aleksandr and a House Troy aid near the
end.
end.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 18, 2007, 1:39:58 PM11/18/07
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Touched up the conversation between Aleksandr and Ausimandeus, toward
the beginning of the thread. That exchange got sort of neglected as
the thread developed. Not concluded yet.
the beginning of the thread. That exchange got sort of neglected as
the thread developed. Not concluded yet.
Meng
Nov 18, 2007, 10:42:09 PM11/18/07
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Apologies for tardiness.
August replies to Alek's request for report on Parthenope. More to
follow for Spiridon soon.
August replies to Alek's request for report on Parthenope. More to
follow for Spiridon soon.
Meng
Nov 18, 2007, 11:17:52 PM11/18/07
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Christiane Koval
Nov 18, 2007, 11:37:42 PM11/18/07
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I've got a question. I was thinking about what I could do with my
character in this scene when I realized, even though they've all been
on a tour of the main compound, I don't have any idea what it looks
like. Would it be possible for someone (DM?) to put up even a quick
map of what the place looks like, and what rooms are where? Thanks.
On Nov 5, 10:31 pm, Ty <mandor1...@gmail.com> wrote:
> First scene of Chapter 2
>
> Click onhttp://groups.google.com/group/dune-wheels-within-wheels/web/scene--t...
character in this scene when I realized, even though they've all been
on a tour of the main compound, I don't have any idea what it looks
like. Would it be possible for someone (DM?) to put up even a quick
map of what the place looks like, and what rooms are where? Thanks.
On Nov 5, 10:31 pm, Ty <mandor1...@gmail.com> wrote:
> First scene of Chapter 2
>
> Click onhttp://groups.google.com/group/dune-wheels-within-wheels/web/scene--t...
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 19, 2007, 10:34:21 AM11/19/07
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Replied to August
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Meng
Nov 25, 2007, 9:57:52 PM11/25/07
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Added paragraph after Aleksandr dismisses August, just before the
halfway mark.
halfway mark.
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 26, 2007, 1:59:49 PM11/26/07
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Replied to Traxxek, near the end.
Jason Bross
Nov 27, 2007, 11:49:58 PM11/27/07
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replied to Aleks
Christiane Koval
Nov 28, 2007, 1:27:48 AM11/28/07
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Added a bit at the end.
Parker Jakes
Nov 28, 2007, 3:15:40 PM11/28/07
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Parker Jakes
Nov 28, 2007, 3:16:44 PM11/28/07
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oops, its a response to aleks in his stateroom
Harrison Bradlow
Nov 28, 2007, 4:54:23 PM11/28/07
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Replied to Ausimandeus
Ty
Dec 8, 2007, 7:53:31 PM12/8/07
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Well...if you all don't feel like posting, I will...
Aleksandr Troy
Dec 8, 2007, 8:12:52 PM12/8/07
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Replied to Traxxek
Jason Bross
Dec 11, 2007, 3:18:08 PM12/11/07
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replied to Aleks
Aleksandr Troy
Dec 11, 2007, 4:01:26 PM12/11/07
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Replied to Traxxek
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