Um yeah, I emailed Reuter what I put together for the creatine discussion for next week to see if it was up to par and he pretty much ripped me a new one and made it very apparent I wasted like 2 hours putting it together. He said everything but...this paper is a piece of shit. I attached what I wrote and here is his email
My class and my grading may be different from other classes. Things I
assume area) if I spent the time to put it in the course materials/post it/
comment on it then it is important for the classb) my job is to point out potential problems/errors. This is
important 1) to allow you the best opportunity to develop higher level
thinking, 2) to allow you to try to get the best information for
current/future athletes/clients/patients and 3) to provide you the
best opportunity to defend yourself if/when you are sued.Below are general comments based on me looking at what you attached
and looking at the Discussion Checklist and keeping in mind the other
course materials/posts that I have provided for the course. Below are
areas you should considerMy best suggestion for Discussions is for you to first answer the
question "have I composed the response based on a) the specific
directions and b) the Discussion Checklist?"When I take a quick look at what you attached the first thing I notice
is the answer to the above question is no.The first thing I notice is that you have chosen to use at least 4
texts. There are a number of areas in the course that address a) the
problems with using texts and b) why the limit is one text unless
otherwise stated.The second thing I notice is that ALL your sources are secondary
sources- ie they take the results of research and summarize them. So
in essence what you are doing is summarizing the summary of the
research, or in essence say "this is what I found that author b said
author a found in research". See the Hx of 220-age in DocSharing for
a worse case scenario with thisAs you look more closely and consider the Misc Reference Info and
Discussion Checklist there are other things that you need to consider:a) you comment on the potential for lower extremity ischemia- the
citation is a text from 2002- so in essence this is an example of
summarizing something from a text that is 7 years old. The text
summarized something- a study, an anecdote....something else...it is
impossible to tell without going to the text.b) Dr Kreider, the author of one of your texts you chose has done
quite a bit of research; there are other prominent researchers-
primary sources- ie research articles are always better sources of
informationc) choosing secondary sources mean that you miss some of the potential
findings of creatine research.. For example some of the more recent
research has postulated that creatine use decreases dehydration risk,
might actually decrease crampingd) variety of sources- too many books- for reasons discussed in the
course materials, current?? creatine is a hot topic, probably the most
researched supplement- this is something that should rely on the most
current sources- primary articles as recent as possible should be used
primarilye) do you correctly interpret the info- no because you are summarizing
summaries- what did the ischemia study actually find for example- how
many subjects (if it is the one I am familiar with it was a case
study- a single subject).
Ben Reuter, PhD, CSCS, *D, ATC
Department of Exercise Science and Sport Studies
California University of Pennsylvania
250 University Avenue California, Pa 15419-1394
724-938-4356
724-938-4342 (fax)
reu...@cal.edu
http://www.calu.edu/education/hsss/