Seeking CP for 95k Fantasy

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Greg M

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Apr 9, 2021, 8:56:50 AM4/9/21
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Hope this sees you all well.

Query pitch below, but this is my first attempt at a novel.  It's design is as a faster-paced work around gray moral conflict and the emotional cost of those decisions. This is intended for the upper end of YA or adult. 

I'd be delighted to be a CP in exchange. 

Thanks for reading,

Greg

Query:
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How far would you go to fulfill a promise?

Daniel Tree believed he’d turned over a new leaf. A new town, a respectable job and a fantastic girlfriend overshadowed years as an orphan on the streets.

But after divine conscription, Daniel has no choice but to serve for three years or death, whichever comes first. Starting tomorrow morning. Despite slim odds of survival and irrational fear of promises, he vows to return.

Kaedre, his god, sees Daniel as a tool with intriguing potential. To start, she will demand that he learn his powers, reconcile his parents’ death, and join an assault on an enemy stronghold. If he survives his first week, she will invest more in him. If he dies, she has thousands of other Chosen and can conscript more. Tools as forged for use.

Within five days, Daniel will have to embrace his past while figuring out where his allegiances lie. He’ll also have to weigh the cost of breaking his promise against the means required to fulfill it. If he goes too far, wouldn’t it be better not to return at all?

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