Looking for a Critique Partner / Structural Editor for a Magical Realism Flash Fiction!

[Naomi Yeager]

Hi, I'm new.  I just joined and I'm looking for a critique and structural edit on my latest Flash Fiction, Fries From Heaven.  I don't have an agent - I don't think I need one for Flash Fiction?  Here's the required information everyone needs:

1. Age Range - Adult
2. Genre - Fantasy / Magical Realism
3. Agent - Nope
4. Language - English
5. Last book I read and loved & it epitomizes me as a reader - The Witch of Cologne by Tobshia Learner
6. Contact - Email me.  My email address is Ronin...@hotmail.com

[Naomi Yeager]

Also, I forgot to add this part, but here is a blurb from my story.  If it perks your interest, please by all means email me...

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Even before we stepped out of the vet’s office, the muggy nighttime air blasted me at full force.  Not that it did much to soothe the racing thoughts in my head.  Though the vet and I discussed our options during the exam, it still left me in a saddened, disoriented haze.

 

Think, girl!  Get it together!  If you can’t do that for yourself, then do it for Sunny.

 

Sunny.  Rescued from our local shelter four years ago this past May.  A watery smile was all I could muster for her as I watched her get comfortable on the blanketed front seat of my Honda Civic.  I wouldn’t look so pathetic… if it weren’t for that lump under her jaw.