Jared,
A couple of things. First, you change the access tokens in the text of your e-mail, but not in the links. I've revoked the three access tokens that were exposed in this thread.
Second, the calls you have made above are correct, but apparently they do not work with the Student View user. I'm not sure if this is intentional or not. You should probably file a ticket at
help.instructure.com for that.
Third, yes, the id for the assignment is the assignment id. And the "submission id" in the student call is actually the user's id. Or "self" to mean the user associated with the access token you are using.