EABOoutlineDraft1

[Yiran Xiong]

Hi our outline is too long and the "one page current overview of the business industry you are studying" is still missing.

Also, we need to edit the format.

I can submit it to turnitin tomorrow.

Here is the required format:

·         Your Preliminary Outline should be no more than four pages (double-spaced, 12 point font) in length.  No more than two additional pages should be used to outline your Completion Plan – what further research and tasks are needed to complete the final project, who will do them, and time lines for completion.  You may wish to put your Completion Plan in the form of a chart. Exhibits and appendices are not included in these page limits but must be referenced in the body of the report and only contain supporting data. References pages (works cited, bibliography) are also in addition to the page limits.  

·         Your group can determine the structure (order, headings, subheadings, etc.) in which you wish to organize your submission.

·         All submissions must include proper APA in-text citation as well as a works cited/references page. Referencing is a critical part of any written submission in this course. Failure to adequately cite will result in penalties and a possible mark of 0 (zero).

The submission instructions:

A hard copy must be submitted to the boxes outside P1002 no later than 12 NOON on Friday, February 3rd, 2012 or a mark of zero will be given for this assignment.

· Be sure that your report is stapled and/or in a report cover;

· Be sure to include with your assignment a copy of the Project Outline Rubric contained on the next page of this document.

2.         An electronic copy of the assignment must be submitted to turnitin.com no later than 11:59pm on Friday, February 3rd, 2012 or a mark of zero will be given for this assignment.

· Turnitin instructions are available on the course website.

· Be sure to obtain and keep your submission receipt from turnitin.com so that you have proof of time and date of submission. No other proof of submission will be accepted.

3.         Each group member must complete a peer evaluation on the course website no later than 11:59pm on Friday, February 3rd, 2012.

· Late peer evaluations will result in a 10% mark penalty if you are less than three days late in submitting them, with an additional 10% penalty added for every day after that to a maximum of 30%. Note that this penalty can reduce your final mark in the course by as much as one grade point.

[Yokesha Sivayogan]

hey i have attached the current overview of the market....umm lemme know if anything else needs to be done...i can hand in the turnitin.com copy if u guys want...

[Yokesha Sivayogan]

hey sry i forgot to add the in text citation this copy has them added in....im not sure if i did it right can u let me know i can fix it...
-yokesha

[Yiran Xiong]

Here is the draft 2, it's still too long...

2012/2/2 Yokesha Sivayogan <yokes...@hotmail.com>

hey sry i forgot to add the in text citation this copy has them added in....im not sure if i did it right can u let me know i can fix it...
-yokesha

On 2012-02-02, at 1:58 PM, Yokesha Sivayogan wrote:

> hey i have attached the current overview of the market....umm lemme know if anything else needs to be done...i can hand in the turnitin.com copy if u guys want...
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> On 2012-02-02, at 1:10 PM, Yiran Xiong wrote:
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> <final copy bu 111.docx>

[Helen Zhou]

I am revising the doc currently. Please do not revise until I upload
it thanks.

On Feb 2, 2:29 pm, Yiran Xiong <yiran0...@gmail.com> wrote:
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>  EABOoutlineDraft2.doc
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[Helen Zhou]

The Research paper section is wrong! http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Academic_paper#Scholarly_paper

Research paper =/= news paper articles or reviews.

Can you please redo it? Thanks!

On Feb 2, 2:29 pm, Yiran Xiong <yiran0...@gmail.com> wrote:

> Here is the draft 2, it's still too long...
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> 2012/2/2 Yokesha Sivayogan <yokesha...@hotmail.com>

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> > if anything else needs to be done...i can hand in the turnitin.com copy
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>  EABOoutlineDraft2.doc
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[Helen Zhou]

Here is the revised version of the outline. I revised the cover page, works cited, page numbering and I changed the font/style to fit the 6 pages max format just BARELY. I'm hoping through editing we can trim it down a little. Also, the research paper section is too long/wrong. Chelsea, can you please fix it? 

Also, everyone, please add your student id on the first page. Genesis please add your last name. 

Thanks,

Helen

On Thu, Feb 2, 2012 at 4:01 PM, Helen Zhou <zhou...@gmail.com> wrote:

[Sampson Chen]

Instead of adding my ID and having you look through different versions of the outline, here it is: 

Sampson L. Chen - 201752670

[Helen Zhou]

Hi everyone,

Sorry for the constant revision, I decided to switch research paper section to the last part of the outline for better flow.

Please use this version for editing purposes. 

Thanks,

Helen

[Yiran Xiong]

I add Sam's and my id and the project outline rubric. Can anyone check the "estimated size of smartphone industry"? I'm not sure whether I did this correctly..

2012/2/2 Helen Zhou <zhou...@gmail.com>

[Yokesha Sivayogan]

heyy i added my student id....

[Yokesha Sivayogan]

heyy yiran if you can log onto datamonitor you should be able to find the market size...

On 2012-02-02, at 4:32 PM, Yokesha Sivayogan wrote:

> heyy i added my student id....

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>> <EABO Smartphone-Outline_-_W2012 (1).docx>
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> <EABO .docx>

[Yiran Xiong]

I tried..But what's the userid and password?

2012/2/2 Yokesha Sivayogan <yokes...@hotmail.com>

[Yokesha Sivayogan]

umm i dont know.....i think the estimated size should be around 158 million (population of north america*37%) 37% is the percentage of people in north america who use smartphones.....but im not sure if we can do this.....sry i wasnt much help

[Helen Zhou]

Guys, I revised everything in "North America" (that did not have data) to USA and Canada. Please remember we are doing this for US and Canada ONLY. I think the data gathered in North America is fine tho. Since most of them would pertain to USA and Canada.

[Helen Zhou]

Actually TOTALLY ignore my comment below LOL. I just checked and we are doing Smartphones in North America. I thought we were doing Smartphones in USA and Canada. Use Yokesha's attachment as the last good one. Thanks.

[Sampson Chen]

Hey; When I talked to Celine, she said that we could change it to North America (which includes Mexico), OR just USA + Canada, whichever is easier for us to find data on.

[Yiran Xiong]

Chelsea has updated the listing of research paper.

2012/2/2 Sampson Chen <sampso...@gmail.com>

[Yokesha Sivayogan]

heyy i corrected a mistake on my part....

[Helen Zhou]

Removed Ozimek, O. A (2011). IPhone and Android Take Over 82 Percent of US Smartphone Market

Shares. Retrieved February 2, 2012 from http://www.stocktips.com/weekly-stock-market/iphone-and-android take-over-82-percent-of-us-smartphone-market-shares/ from the list of research paper section because when I went to the link, it gave me a '404- Page not Found' error.

Helen

On Thu, Feb 2, 2012 at 9:58 PM, Yokesha Sivayogan <yokes...@hotmail.com> wrote:

heyy i corrected a mistake on my part....

[Helen Zhou]

Ok, I looked at the research paper sec again... some of them are still
articles. So I included some research paper here.

http://longhornhos.web703.discountasp.net/dasp/net-web-developers-smartphone-preference-and-what-it-says-about-them.pdf
https://c.na3.content.force.com/servlet/servlet.ImageServer?id=01550000000rQA3AAM&oid=00D300000000M2BEAU
http://www.media-and-networks.eu/upload/File/Zoom%20AR%20&%20AV/smartphone%20US%20trends.pdf

On Feb 2, 10:35 pm, Helen Zhou <zhouhe...@gmail.com> wrote:
> Removed Ozimek, O. A (2011). *IPhone and Android Take Over 82 Percent of US
> Smartphone Market* <http://www.pyramidresearch.com/points/item/110713.htm>
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>  EABO Smartphone Outline.docx
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[Yokesha Sivayogan]

heyy did u correct it frm the last copy i sent cuz i changed some stuff from the one yiran sent

[Ping He]

Thank you so much Helen, I will add these three with APA format, actually I saw the first one before and is not really related to our topic,but anyway I will add them for sure. One more thing, don't forget to do the peer evaluation guys !^^

> Date: Thu, 2 Feb 2012 19:44:19 -0800
> Subject: Re: EABOoutlineDraft1
> From: zhou...@gmail.com
> To: bus-111w-lab...@googlegroups.com

[Helen Zhou]

Removed the following links:

Ausick, A. P. (2011). Are smartphone sales cooling off? (AAPL, SSNLF, MMI, GOOG, HTCKF,    

NOK, MSFT, RIMM). Retrieved February 2, 2012 from http://247wallst.com/2011/10/31/are-smartphone-sales-cooling-off-aapl-ssnlf-mmi-goog-htckf-nok-msft-rimm/?utm_source=nrelate&utm_medium=related&utm_campaign=related

Dediu, D. H. (2011). The US smartphone landscape . Retrieved February 2, 2012 from

  http://www.asymco.com/2011/11/06/the-us-smartphone-landscape/

Who is Winning the U.S. Smartphone Battle? (2011). Retrieved February 2, 2012 from 

http://blog.nielsen.com/nielsenwire/online_mobile/who-is-winning-the-u-s-smartphone-battle/

Mobile Snapshot: Smartphones Now 28% of U.S. Cellphone Market (2011). 

Retrieved February  2, 2012 from http://blog.nielsen.com/nielsenwire/online_mobile/mobile-snapshot-smartphones-now-28-of-u-s-cellphone-market/

Smith, S. E. (2011). RIM in North American Smartphone Market. Retrieved February 2, 2012 

    from http://www.pyramidresearch.com/points/item/110713.htm

Added 2 new ones and sorted them in alpha order.

[Helen Zhou]

yeah i did.