[Naumaan Ansari]

Okay

 

So i read through the comments. He was a LOTTTT harsher this time around. Its starting to get a little annoying how on each paper he writes comments in old sections.... It would be much easier if he just covered our frist paper in comments so we could do proper editing, instaed of having to constantly go back. ALL of our sections have problems. Its kind of annoying, almost all of his comments are purely content related and not grammatical. (I wish he did that b4 in our frst 2 drafts.....). My sections need a little bit of rewroding, refrences, and pictures. Kush, yours needs a lot of refrences and some rewordings. Tom, you need some rewording and some images. I think we should EACH work onour parts. And any SECTION that is changed, we should turn it into a different color. For example. Say i have an error in the conclusion, a simple grammatical mistake. Lets say i fix it, i should highlight ALL of the conclusion into one color. Each of us should use a different color. Tom use Red, Kush use Blue, Ill use Yellow. FIx our sectiosn as best as we can and lets finish this retarded paper. At the end, one of us compiles evreything. For example, Kush's paper should be 1/3 blue. He replaces his black text with our Red and Yellow texts but keeps anythign taht is black on both papers. Itll make copying and pasting over everythign easier. Then, Kush sends it out to all of us. We each go through the paper and do heavy duty grammatical editing/ anythign we think looks bad. FOR THAT, we just highlight the mistake, not the whole section. For example, if there is a missing comma, we add the comma and highlihg tit red. Well use all Red for that. Then, we do one final recompliation. Send that in, and hopefully that should be our PRE final draft. Today is Tuesday, so our goal to send the final compilation should be by SUNDAY. That is very generous for all of us. Make sure you read the his comments as if they were scripture. Use the file that IIIIIIII sent you to do modifications, DO NOT USE THE FILE HE SENT US. FOr some reason, there are a ton of spacing errors in his file, maybe he did that by mistake or something. Please respond to me by tonite to confirm what we are doing. If you dont, im gonna spam call u for the next 3 days. I think our goal shoul dbe to hand in a finalized draft by next Friday. Any later, and I think were getting a B. (As of right now, it seems hes not too happy with us. Lets try to knock editing out of the park.) It also seems like he wants a lot more research. If you CAN add some more, (with references). Ill try to add one or two more sources for the specific sections he talked about. Priority is polishing the paper. The research stuff can be added later if necessary, but TRY to do it if u can.

 

thanks

fucker

[Patel, Kush Dipak]

Hey,

Gotcha. i'm working on my changes right now.
I'm leaving on thursday morning for 10 days.
I might have computer access so i might be able to work. maybe not.
I'm working on my sections right now. Trying to perfect them and stuff.
Also, i opened Bianchi's comments paper.
I can only see edits till the Software section. I can't see results or anything past it.
And Naumaan, the paper you sent us, seems to be a little different then Bianchi's correction paper.
Nonetheless I will highlight all my changes in blue and send it to you soon.

Kush Patel
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[Naumaan Ansari]

Ya for some reason Binachis corrections paper has a lot of connected words. It seems like he backspaced a lot of the words together for some reason. i dont knwo if it was on purpose or what.

[Thomas Womersley]

Hey that sounds good um he did say that we should use his paper that he sent back to us though because he changed some things so i think we should just re edit all of the spacing issues or just copy and paste it all into a new document idk tell me what you think also idk what sections I should edit so only what i put into the paper then? nothing else?  and I think that he does want more research but he wants it in the latter part of the paper like the analysis part you know like the whole why do kids respond better? question.  Also I wonder if there is some things we should cut from the paper because i think some of the redundancy in the paper stems from kush and I writing about the sensor i think it was what i wrote in the results, but I am unsure.  he also states that we need an official title page does anyone know what that is.  Finally I was wondering how I do that silly reference thing in word.  I cant make it work on my computer well i cant make it look like the ones already in the paper.

I am ready to push for the finish I hope you guys are too.

Peace, Love, and Sketchers

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Sincerely,
Thomas Womersley