Looks good -- I would just clarify that the FFC stands are Tuesday 3:30-6:30 at the locations you mentioned: "Farm Fresh Choice is a program of the Ecology Center that makes locally grown produce convenient and affordable. They run produce stands every Tuesday from 3:30-6:30 at BAHIA School, 1718 8th St., BYA, 1255 Allston Way and Spiral Gardens, 2850 Sacramento St." And I would lead with the info about produce stands and put gardening (which fewer people will be willing to do) second.
Also, do families have to do anything to enter to win the CSA box? If so, we should explain how to enter to win.