NEW KSOF Loneliness 1/1 Poem K/S G
kira-nerys
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Title: Loneliness
Rating: G
Pairing K/S
Summary: poetry
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Loneliness
He wakes up at night.
Something pulling
Someone.
At him.
He rises from bed.
Moves through corridors
Of ship's night.
Searching.
His prowling is nothing new.
Insomnia a beast
Tedious to fight.
Impossible.
He moves through the night.
Observation Deck beckoning
Doors hiss open.
Emptiness
There in the shadows
Gazing at the stars
He stands,
Silent.
This enigma.
Aloof, correct
Yet vulnerable.
Untouchable.
Darkened eyes
Grow darker with pain.
Unblinkingly watching.
Waiting.
Passing through stars
Illuminating the stoic face
Of a lonely man.
Hurting.
The captain gasps
Because he knows
That feeling.
Loneliness
A gut-wrenching,
soul-encompassing
Loneliness
Painful.
The human feels it.
Like it is his own.
Because it is.
Familiar.
His own pain
Reflects in dark eyes
Looking out
Unseeingly
He moves forward
Toward this man
He barely knows
Reaching.
Spock turns
Elegant slanted brow
Rising high
Questioning
No words are spoken
They simply stand
Pain is slowly drifting away.
Together.
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T'Rhys
>
>Title: Loneliness
>URL: http://www.kardasi.com/KSOF/stories.htm
>
Highly evocative imagery. You can really sense the emotions here. I'm a
little confused by the first stanza, though. The third line seems -
incomplete? I'm probably just reading it wrong.
LL&P }:)
"T'Rhys" <tkn...@ix.netcom.com>
J S Cavalcante
Lovely, lovely description of a K/S moment, kira. I've written at least
one of those observation-room moments in a story, and I've read a few
written by others, and I never get tired of them. You described yours
beautifully.
LL&P
J S
kira-nerys
----- Original Message -----
From: J S Cavalcante <10276...@compuserve.com>
To: <ASC...@egroups.com>
Sent: Saturday, October 14, 2000 10:57 PM
Subject: [ASCEML] NEW KSOF Loneliness 1/1 Poem K/S G
>
> Lovely, lovely description of a K/S moment, kira. I've written at least
> one of those observation-room moments in a story, and I've read a few
> written by others, and I never get tired of them. You described yours
> beautifully.
>
> LL&P
> J S
Thank you J S. I'm glad you enjoyed this. I like poetry more and more :-) It's a welcome change from writing a long story and a poem can contain so much emotion with so few words. It's fun to write and read poetry, vignettes and short challenge stories as well. And they don't require long, detailed sex-scenes <G> Of course, stories don't always do that either, but I somehow end up writing one most of the time.
kira-nerys
kira-nerys
Subject: Re: [ASCEML] NEW KSOF Loneliness 1/1 Poem K/S G
> At 08:24 AM 10/14/2000 -0700, kira-nerys wrote:
> >
> >Title: Loneliness
> >URL: http://www.kardasi.com/KSOF/stories.htm
> >
>
> Highly evocative imagery. You can really sense the emotions here. I'm a
> little confused by the first stanza, though. The third line seems -
> incomplete? I'm probably just reading it wrong.
>
> LL&P }:)
> "T'Rhys" <tkn...@ix.netcom.com>
Are you talking about this?
He wakes up at night
Something pulling
Someone.
At him.
If this is it, you're supposed to read it the same way as you would read this.
"He wakes up at night. Something pulling - someone - at him."
I guess if you'd write it in a story it would go like this. He wakes up at night. Something - someone - is pulling at him.
Um... whatever <g<
Anyway, thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it even if the first stanza was confusing to you.
T'Rhys
>
>Are you talking about this?
>
>He wakes up at night
>Something pulling
>Someone.
>At him.
>
>If this is it, you're supposed to read it the same way as you would read
this.
>
>"He wakes up at night. Something pulling - someone - at him."
>
Yes, that's what I figured you meant. What confused me was the full stop
after "someone", which seemed to leave the "at him" off by itself with no
references rather than the possible "someone at him". Rather disturbing
idea, actually.
LL&P }:)
"T'Rhys" <tkn...@ix.netcom.com>
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Aditi D
Kira,
This was a lovely poem - I particularly liked the last stanza.
Aditi
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