Seems a good bit of thought was put into this piece but there is a great deal that is
confusing or unclear. More worryingly, very little is cited and the piece is extremely
vague in spots.
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Some states [examples?] have a solid contract [replace with 'have agreements'] to allow
succession [secession] which would indicate that 2 [two] or more states with that so
called [delete 'so called'] privilege [cumbersome - rewrite] would be in position to
[privilege...could] redraw their common borders [incomplete - elaborate]. The Democrats
[which ones? - where?] have implied the right to split California into two states with
common borders of their choice. [cite legislation - cumbersome - rewrite]
The Civil war was alleged to have [delete: was alleged to have] resolved Federal
superiority [supremacy] over the states in all matters, [period] Supreme court scholars
[who?] believe that eventually it will come to a head and the constitutional [delete 'the
constitutional] state [States' rights will prevail. [cite, pref w/quote]
While the Term [term - delete comma], United states [States] is used, we are
actually un-united [disunited] politically. Texas, Massachusetts and others ['other
states'] claim sovereignty going back to colonial days [reword as Texas did not exist in
colonial days] ...and they never agreed to nullify that claim. [cite claim]
With almost half of the country at odds with the other half and the massive mess our
finances, political agendas and joke foreign policy, [cite specific issues - phrase
incomplete - delete comma - finish sentence - comma] There [there] is no easy or no
[delete no] feasible answer on the Horizon [horizon].
Many of our top leadership [leaders] stands [stand] to be treasonous [delete 'to be
treasonous' add 'as traitors'] and nothing is being done to stop it [delete 'to stop it'].
Our [A] Top [top] General [general] [cite: who?] outed a Presidents [President's - which
President] policy on China [cite incident] and got away with it, [period]
Our newest [current] President and his son stand accused of accepting $Billions
['billions' or 'billions of dollars'] in bribes and [delete 'and' add 'as well as']
treason, Sedition [sedition,] et al [et al.]. We can no longer even [delete 'even'] trust
our own elections either [delete 'either']. Our [The] FBI, CIA and others [other what?]
have been weaponized to punish conservatives. What the Hell [delete profanity] are we
waiting for? Term limits and cut the party politics out [incomplete sentence - poor
grammar - rewrite].
The result:
Some states such as [insert at least three states] have agreements to allow secession
which would indicate that two or more states so privileged could redraw their common
borders without Congressional approval. Democrats have implied California has the right
to split into two states with a common border of their choice in (cite House Bill, court
decision, convention, op ed, whatever, on date ????).
The Civil War resolved Federal supremacy over the States in all matters but Supreme Court
Scholars believe that eventually it will come to a head and a SCOTUS reversal will allow
States' rights to prevail.
While the term 'United States' is used, we are actually disunited politically. (State
name) and Massachusetts for example, claim sovereignty going back to colonial days and
never agreed to nullify that claim. (cite)
With half the country at odds with the other half over national finances, political
agendas and failed foreign policy such as our dealings with China, Iran and Russia, there
are no feasible answers to this disunity on the horizon.
Many of our top leaders stand as traitors and nothing is being done. A top general,
(service branch) General (name) outed President (who?) policy on China in (year) during
(event) and got away with it. (relevant quote) Our current President and his son stand
accused of accepting billions in bribes as well as treason, sedition, et al.. We can no
longer trust our own elections. The FBI, CIA and other agencies have been weaponized to
punish conservatives.
What are we waiting for? Impose term limits on Congress and abolish political parties.
hth
Swill
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The Beatles, Abbey Road