shaai'ree kaa ek naqS: eet^aa
Raz
Urdustan meN Anmol kee ek Ghazal ke Husn-e-matla' ke Hawaaleh se kuch`
dostoN ne sawaal uThaayaa hai keh is she'r ke qawaafee kee maujoodah
Shakl :eet^aa: kaa a'ib paidaa kar rahee hai. maZkoorah Ghazal kaa
mat^la' aur Husn-e-mat^la' yooN haiN:
Muhabbat ki baateN ishaaroN meiN likkhooN
MaiN iqraar itne hijaaboN meiN likkhooN
Sabhi khoobsoorat "nazaaroN" meiN likkhooN
Tiraa naam jagmag "sitaaroN" meiN likkhooN
deegar asha'ar meN :ujaaloN, HawaaloN, lafz^oN: qaafiye baaNdh`e gaYe
haiN. goyaa in meN :roN: kaa woh iltizaam naheeN bartaa gayaa hai jo
Husn-e-mat^la' ke qaafiyoN :naz^aaroN, sitaaroN: meN hai. e'tiraaZ^ yeh
hai keh maujoodah Soorat^-e-Haal ke pesh-e-naz^ar jab.k
Husn-e-mat^le' meN qaafiyoN par :roN: kee qaid lagaa dee gayee hai
:sahaaroN, GhubaaroN: waGhairah ko ba-t^aur-e-qawaafee ista'maal honaa
chaahiYe th`aa aur :HijaaboN, micaaloN: kee qism ke alfaaz^ qaafiyoN ke
t^aur par qaabil-e-qubool naheeN ho sakte haiN. isee qism kaa sawaal is
se qabl bh`ee is meHfil meN doosree GhazaloN ke Hawaale se uTh`aayaa
jaa chukaa hai. sawaal yaqeena" nihaayat dilchasp hai aur ek shaafee
jawaab kaa t^aalib-o-mustaHiq hai.
yeh sawaal aur bh`ee dilchasp ho jaataa hai jab asaatiZah kee GhazaloN
meN yeh :a'ib: jaa-bajaa naz^ar aataa hai. Amjad SaaHeb aur Anmol ne
aise kayee asha'ar micaal ke t^aur par pesh kiYe haiN jo ba-z^aahir
:eet^aa: kee ta'reef meN aate haiN. Anmol ne mujh` se kahaa hai keh
maiN is mas,aleh par kuch` izhaar-e-Khayaal karooN. yeh muKhtaSar
maZ^moon isee koshish kaa nateejah hai. ummeed hai keh is kee
tafSeelaat se kuch` jawaab mil jaaYeN ge. mazeed tafSeel-o-tashreeH aap
ke sawaalaat ke jawaab meN dee jaa saktee hai. inshaa-Allah!
to aa ,iYe : baare "eet^aa: kaa kuch` bayaaN ho jaaYe!
Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
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eet^aa: qaafiyeh kaa ek a'ib:
(A) ibtidaa,iyah:
Ghazal ke mat^le' meN agar qawaafee ko Huroof kee kisee maKhSooS shakl
se muqaiyyad kar diyaa jaaYe to baaqee ke qaafiyoN ke liYe bh`ee usee
Soorat yaa shart^ kaa paapand honaa Z^arooree ho jaataa hai. is shart^
ko agar malHooz^-e-Khaat^ir nah rakh`aa jaaYe to yeh fann-e-shaai'ree
kaa ek a'ib samjh`aa jaataa hai jis ko takneekee zabaan meN :eet^aa:
kehte haiN. is nukteh ke bunyaadee uSool-e-qaafiyah ko yooN bayaan
kiyaa jaa saktaa hai: "agar she'r ke mat^le' meN hee qaafiyah par koyee
qaid lagaa dee jaaYe to ph`ir is qaid kaa liHaaZ^ tamaam qawaafee meN
rakh`naa ho gaa. macalan agar mat^le' meN :shaamil, kaamil: qaafiye
baaNdh`e gaYe haiN to baaqee qawaafee bh`ee aise hoN ge jin ke
aaKh`iree teen Huroof :alif, meem, laam: hoN ge. goyaa :a'amil, kaamil,
Haamil, shaamil: waGhairah qaafiye to baaNdh`e jaa sakte haiN lekin
:qaatil, jaahil: waGhairah naheeN baaNdh`e jaa sakte haiN".
Molana Hasrat Mohani apnee kitaab :Nikaat-e-suKhan: meN isee uSool ko
in alfaaz^ meN bayaan karte haiN keh "mat^le' ke donoN qaafiyoN ke
aaKhir meN Huroof ke lafz^a" aur ma'na" mukarrar aane ko :eet^aa: kehte
haiN". is ko ek micaal se yooN bh`ee samjh`aa jaa saktaa hai keh, agar
mat^le' meN :butgar, sitamgar: qawaafee baaNdh`e gaYe haiN to :gar:
donoN meN mushtarik hai aur lafz^a" aur ma'na" is kee takraar bh`ee
hai. mazeed yeh keh agar in Huroof ko alag kar diyaa jaaYe to baaqee
bache lafz^ :but: aur :sitam: ham-qaafiyah naheeN reh jaate haiN. isee
a'ib ko :eet^aa: kehte haiN. aage dee huyee micaaloN se is bayaan kee
mazeed tashreeH ho jaaYe gee.
agar baat ko yaheeN Khat^m kar diyaa jaaYe to asaatiZah ke kalaam meN
is :a'ib: kee be-shumaar micaaleN naz^ar aa saktee haiN aur qaaree
aasaanee se is kash-makash kaa shikaar ho saktaaa hai keh :eet^aa:
koyee a'ib hai bh`ee keh naheeN? aur agar hai to asaatiZah ne is ko
yooN naz^ar-andaaz kaise kar diyaa hai? ph`ir is se yeh Z^imnee sawaal
uTh`taa hai keh kyaa ham bh`ee asaatiZah kee taqleed meN :eet^aa: ke
murtakib ho sakte haiN? agar haaN to ph`ir ek :a'ib: kee Haiciyyat se
is kaa maqaam hee mushtabah ho kar reh jaataa hai! lihaaZah is marHale
par kuch` tafSeel kee Z^aroorat meHsoos hotee hai taa.k ham us kee
raushanee meN kisee nateejah par poNhach sakeN.
u'lmaa-e-qaafiyah ne :eet^aa: kee do iqsaam bayaan kee haiN aur in meN
baRee baareekiyaaN paidaa kee haiN. sab tafSeel yahaaN nah Sirf
Ghair-Z^arooree hai bal.k is se uljh`an aur baRh saktee hai. KhaaS
KhaaS nikaat par muKhtaSar beHc hee hamaaree Z^arooriyaat ke liYe
kaafee se ziyaadah hai. :eet^aa: kee iqsaam darj-e-Zel haiN:
(1) eet^aa-e-Khafee ("minor" eet^aa)
(2) eet^aa-e-jalee ("major" eet^aa)
B: eet^aa kee tafSeel:
(1) eet^aa-e-Khafee ("minor" eet^aa):
she'r meN :eet^aa-e-Khafee: us waqt waaqe' hotaa hai jab mat^le' ke
donoN qawaafee SaHeeH aur aSlee hoN lekin un ke aaKhiree do yaa teen
Huroof is t^araH mushtarik hoN keh takraar kee qaid kaa dh^okaa hotaa
ho.
micaal ke t^aur par :aasaaN, insaaN: ko Ghaur se dekh^iYe. in donoN
alfaaz^ meN :saaN: mushtarik hai aur takraar kaa shaa,ibah naz^ar aataa
hai. mazeed yeh keh donoN alfaaz :insaan, aasaan: kee hee ek Shakl haiN
aur apnee apnee jagah donoN aSlee aur SaHeeH bh`ee haiN. agar in ko
mat^le' meN ba-t^aur-e-qawaafee ista'maal kiYaa jaaYe to Mirza Ghalib
ke mash,hoor-e-zamaanah she'r kee darj-e-Zel Soorat paidaa ho gee:
bas ke dushwaar hai har kaam kaa "aasaaN" honaa
aadamee ko bh^ee mayassar naheeN "insaaN" honaa (Ghalib)
yahaaN ba-yak naz^ar yeh gumaan hotaa hai keh :saaN: kee maujoodagee is
kee mutaqaaZ^ee hai keh baaqee ke qawaafee bh`ee :saaN: par Khtm hoN,
jaise :pursaaN, tarsaaN: jab.k Mirza Ghalib jaise SaaHib-e-kamaal
ustaad ne baaqee Ghazal meN :bayaabaaN, HairaaN, miZhgaaN: waGhairah
qawaafee baaNdh`e haiN. z^aahir hai keh in meN :saaN: kaa iltiz^aam
naheeN hai!
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isee silsile kee chand aur micaaleN dilchaspee se Khaalee naheeN hoN
gee. mulaaHiZ^ah farmaa,iYe:
reHmat ne mujh^ ko maa,il-e-"i'SyaaN" banaa diyaa
ik paikar-e-Haqeeqat-e-"u'ryaaN" banaa diyaa (Jigar Muradabadi)
(is Ghazal ke deegar qawaafee: musalmaaN, HairaaN, jaanaaN: waGhairah
haiN, ya'nee in meN :yaaN: kaa iltizaam naheeN bartaa gayaa hai jo
keh mat^le' meN naz^ar aa rahaa hai!)
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raushan jamaal-e-yaar se hai "anjuman" tamaam
dehkaa huwaa hai aatish-e-gul se "chaman" tamaam (Hasrat Mohani)
(deegar qawaafee: chalan, pairahan)
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mujh^e yaad aa gayee bas wooheeN us ke qadd-o-"qaamat" kee
chaman meN dekh^ kar kal sarv maiN ne kyaa "qiyaamat" kee (Momin)
(deegar qawaafee: qismat, murawwat, Ghairat)
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Husn-e-mah gar.ch ba-haNgaam-e-"kamaal" achh`aa hai
is se meraa mah-e-Khursheed-"jamaal" achh`aa hai (Ghalib)
(deegar qawaafee: sifaal, sawaal, Haal)
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hamaaree jaan shab tujh^ bin dil-e-"naakaam" letaa th`aa
KhadaNg-e-aah se teer-e-qaZ^aa kaa "kaam" letaa th`aa (Momin)
(deegar qawaafee: shaam, ayyaam, jaam)
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raaz-e-nihaaN zabaan-e-"aGhyaar" tak nah poNhchaa
kyaa ek bh`ee hamaaraa Khat^ "yaar" tak nah poNhchaa? (Momin)
(deegar qawaafee: deewaar, beemaar, asha'ar)
yeh sab micaaleN :eet^aa-e-Khafee: kee haiN. in meN is :a'ib: kee
tamaam shart^eN maujood haiN, ya'nee:
(a) qawaafee ke alfaaz^ aSlee aur SaHeeH haiN
(b) in ke aaKhir ke do yaa teen Huroof is t^araH mushtarik haiN ke
takraar kaa dh`okaa hotaa hai.
(c) sab qaafiye Farsi/Arabee ke alfaaz^/mushtaqaat (derivatives) haiN.
is nukteh kee ahmiyyat aaage aa rahee hai.
eet^aa-e-jalee ke ma'yoob hone meN iKhtilaaf hai. ba'Z^ is ko
a'ib jaante haiN aur is ko yaksar tark kar dene ke qaa,il haiN jab.k
doosre asaatiZah is ko ma'yoob naheeN samajh`te haiN. Molana Hasrat
Mohani kee raaYe hai keh eet^aa-e-Khafee se bachnaa chaahiYe lekin is
ko ma'yoob-o-matrook samajh`naa nah to munaasib hai aur nah hee
SaHeeH.
is t^araH oopar dee huyee micaaloN kaa jawaaz caabit ho jaataa hai.
ba-z^aahir jin asaatiZah ke kalaam se eet^aa-e-Khafee kee micaaleN dee
gayee haiN woh is ke ma'yoob-o-matrook hone ke qaa,il naheeN haiN.
akcar yooN bh`ee hotaa hai keh asaatiZah apne Zaatee ijtihaad se
ba'Z^ baateN apne liYe maKhSooS aur qaabil-e-qubool kar lete haiN
jab.k ek a'am shaai'r in baatoN ko apnaate huYe achh`aa aur SaHeeH
meHsoos naheeN kartaa hai. is kee chand micaaleN aage dee jaaYeN gee.
(2) eet^aa-e-jalee (major eet^aa):
she'r meN :eet^aa-e-jalee: a'am t^aur se us waqt waaqe' hotaa hai jab
mat^le' ke qawaafee do aise alfaaz^ se mil kar banaaYe gaYe hoN jin ke
mushtarik aaKhiree lafz^ ko nikaal dene ke ba'd baaqee bache huYe TukRe
ham-qaafiyah nah hoN.
micaal ke t^aur par :butgar (but+gar) aur sitamgar (sitam+gar): donoN
hee do muKhtlif alfaaz^ se mil kar tashkeel-paZeer huYe haiN. in
alfaaz^ meN :gar: mushtarik hai. is ko haTaa deN to bache huYe TukRe
:but: aur :sitam: ham-qaafiyah naheeN reh jaate haiN. yehee
eet^aa-e-jalee hai. goyaa :butgar, sitamgar: ko agar mat^le' meN
ba-t^aur-e-qawaafee baaNdh`aa jaaYe to deegar qawaafee chaahe kuch`
bh`ee hoN, she'r ba-har Haal :eet^aa-e-jalee: kaa shikaar maanaa
jaaYe gaa. isee t^araH :suKhanwar, hunarwar:, butKhaanah, maiKhaanah:,
:shabnam, purnam: waGhirah matle' meN ba-t^aur-e-qawaafee baaNdh`e
jaaYeN to yeh :eet^aa-e-jalee: ho gaa.
eet^aa-e-jalee ke a'ib hone meN koyee iKhtilaaf naheeN hai. is kaa
tark laazim hai. asaatiZah kaa kalaam is a'ib se baRee Had tak paak
naz^ar aataa hai. ph`ir bh`ee ikkaa-dukkaa micaal asaatiZah ke kalaam
meN bh`ee mil jaatee hai. is :bida't: kaa jawaaz agar in asaatiZah ke
:shaKhSee ijtihaad: ko maan bh`ee liyaa jaaYe to bh`ee yeh a'ib hee
kehlaaYe gaa. un kee Had tak agar aap is ko qubool kar leN to bh`ee
:hamaa-shumaa: ko yeh Haq HaaSil naheeN ho gaa aur is a'ib kaa tark
un par waajib ho gaa.
asaatiZah ke yahaaN eet^aa-e-jalee kee chand micaaleN HaaZ^ir haiN:
too anees-e-dil-e-"GhareebaaN" hai
marham-e-zaKhm-e-seenah-"reeshaaN" hai (Ma'soom Ali)
yahaaN :GhareebaaN, reeshaaN: ko Ghalib ke :insaaN, aasaaN: par qiyaas
karnaa SaHeeH naheeN ho gaa kyoN.k Ghalib ke yahaaN :insaaN, aasaaN:
mustaqil alfaaz^ haiN jab.k yahaaN :aaN: jama' kee a'laamat hai aur
takraar kaa baa,ic bh`ee hai.
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har samt th`ee sinaaN peh sinaaN micl-e-"Khaarzaar"
har Saf meN th`ee sipar peh sipar micl-e-"laalahzaar" (Mir Anis)
qurbaan-e-Sana't-e-qalam-e-"aafreedgaar"
th`ee har waraq peh Sana't-e-tarSee'-e-"kardgaar" (Mir Anis)
madrasah yaa dair th`aa, yaa Ka'bah yaa "butKhaanah" th`aa
ham sabh`ee mehmaan th`e waaN, woh hee "SaaHeb-Khaanah" th`aa (Mir
Dard)
in teenoN micaaloN meN "-------" meN muqaiyyad qawaafee do alfaaz^
se mushakkal haiN jin ke mushtarik TukRe haTaa dene se bache huYe TukRe
ham-qaafiyah naheeN reh jaate haiN. yeh eet^aa-e-jalee kee achh`ee
micaaleN haiN aur yaqeena' a'ib meN shumaar kee jaaYeN gee.
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(C) Urdu/Hindi/Hindustaanee alfaaz^:
oopar kee micaaleN dekh`ne se z^aahir hai keh in saare mat^lo'N ke
donoN qawaafee Farsi/Arabee ke haiN. kaheeN koyee aisee micaal naheeN
dee gayee hai jis meN ek qaafiyah Farsi/Arabee kaa ho aur doosraa
Urdu/Hindi/Hindustaanee kaa.
Urdu meN Farsi/Arabee ke i'laavah maqaamee Hindustaane zabaanoN ke
be-shumaar alfaaz^ musta'mil haiN. in zabaanoN ke apne qawaa,id aur
uSool haiN aur yeh alfaaz^ Urdu meN aa kar aur us ke uSooloN ke paaband
ho kar apnaa maqaam alag banaa chuke h aiN. in par Farsi/Arabee ke
qawaaneen kaa i't^laaq u'mooma" naheeN hotaa hai. is liYe
Urdu/Hindi/Hindustaanee alfaaz^ ko mat^le' meN ba-z^aahir eet^aa kee
shakl men ista'maal kiyaa bh`ee jaaYe to is ko a'ib naheeN maanaa
jaataa hai. is uSool par bh`ee asaatiZah kaa u'moomee ittifaaq hai.
is tafSeel kee chand micaaleN dekh`iYe:
zaa,il naheeN hotee tap-e-i'shq-e-"butaaN" hanooz
phuktee haiN soz-e-Gham se miree "haDDiyaaN" hanooz (Qalaq Meeruthee)
har-chand keh :butaaN: Farsi hai lekin :haDDiyaaN: ek Hindustaanee
lafz^ :haDDee: kee Hindi ke t^arz par jama' banaayee gayee hai.
chunaan.ch yahaaN eet^aa naheeN maanaa jaaYe gaa.
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dil-e-naadaaN tujh`e "huwaa" kyaa hai
aaKhir is dard kee "dawaa" kyaa hai? (Ghalib)
(deegar qawaafee: maajraa, Khudaa, wafaa)
is she'r meN :huwaa: Hindustaanee hai aur :dawaa: Farsi, lihaaZah
b.il-ittifaaq yahaaN eet^aa naheeN maanaa jaaYe gaa.
i'shq kee yeh namood-e-"paiham" kyaa
ho tumheeN tum agar to ph`ir "ham" kyaa? (Jigar Muradabadi)
(deegar qawwfee: Gham, jahanaam, a'alam)
:paiham: Farsi hai aur :ham: Hindustaanee. is liYe eet^aa kaa sawaal
naheeN paidaa hotaa hai.
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kuch` ishaare th`e jinheN "dunyaa" samajh` beTh`e th`e ham
us nigaah-e-aashnaa ko "kyaa" samajh` beTh`e th`e ham? (Firaq
Gorakhpuri)
(deegar qawaafee: apnaa, begaanah, deewaanah)
lafz^ :dunyaa: Farsi hai aur :kyaa: Hindustaanee. nateejah z^aahir hai!
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jazb-e-kaamil ko acar apnaa "dikh`aa" denaa th`aa
mere pehloo meN unheN laa ke "biTh`aa" denaa th`aa (Hasrat Mohani)
(deegar qawaafee: bh`ulaa, jhu`kaa, siwaa)
donoN qawaafee Hindustaanee alfaaz^ haiN aur in par eet^aa ka it^laaq
naheeN kiyaa jaa saktaa hai.
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hai bazm-e-butaaN meiN sukhan aazurdah "laboN" se
taNg aaye haiN ham, aise khushaamad "t^alaboN" se
(deegar qawaafee: be-adaboN, laboN)
har chand keh :lab: aur :t^alab: donoN Farsi alfaaz^ haiN lekin in kee
jama' :laboN, talaboN: Urdu ke qaa,ideh se banaayee gayee hai.
lihaaZah yahaaN eet^aa naheeN qaayem ho saktaa hai.
(D) asaatiZah kaa ijtihaad:
oopar ek jagah yeh kahaa jaa chukaa hai keh ba'Z^ auqaat asaatiZah
koyee :a'ib: kisee shaai'raanah vajh yaa maSliHat se apne oopar
jaa,iz kar lete haiN. aisaa woh waqtee t^aur par hee karte haiN kyoN.k
un kaa beshtar kalaam us maKhSooS aazaadee se paak hotaa hai. agar woh
is aazaadee ko rawaa jaante to koyee wajh naheeN hai keh apne kalaam
meN us se u'moomee ijtinaab karte!
is waqtee :ijtihaad: yaa :aazaadee: ko maiN Jigar Muradabadi ke chand
asha'ar se waaZ^eH kartaa hooN. mauSoof ne apne kulliyaat meN kayee
maqaamaat par aisee aazaadee bartee hai aur us kaa jawaaz Hawaashee
(footnotes) meN diyaa hai. chand micaaleN dekh`iYe. maiN ne Jigar
SaaHeb ke notes ko {---}meN likh` diyaa hai aur mut,a'lliqah lafz^
par * lagaa diyaa hai:
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dard ne karwaT hee badlee th`ee keh dil kee aaR se
daf,ata" pardah uTh`aa aur pardah-daar * aa hee gayaa
{ahl-e-Fars (Iran) in ma'noN meN ista'maal naheeN karte lekin meraa
Zauq ise jaa,iz qaraar detaa hai.}
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bahaar apnee jagah par sadaa-bahaar rahe
yeh chaahataa hai to tajribbah*-e-bahaar nah kar
{is lafz^ ko yaqeena" mushaddad t^areeqeh se kehnaa durust naheeN.
Lekin meHZ^ is takneekee Ghalat^ee kee Khaat^ir apne lat^eef she'r ko
Z^aae' naheeN kar sakta.}
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aap dekh`eN to sahee rabt^-e-muHabbat kyaa hai
apnaa afsaanah milaa kar mire afsaane meN*
{sat^aHee naz^ar se dekh`aa jaaYe to radeef :meN: SaHeeH nah ho gee,
bal.k us kii jagah :se: durust hai. lekin main is maHalle-e-KhaaS par
radeef :meN: hee munaasib samajh^taa hooN.}
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haaYe GhammaaziyaaN muHabbat kee
apnee be-dast-o-paaiyaaN*, taubah!
{Be-dast-o-paa jis mafhoom men mustamil hai us e'tibaar par main ne
use ek lafz^ se ta'beer kiyaa hai aur is binaa par jama' banaa
lenaa Ghalat^ naheeN samajh^taa.}
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teraa deewaanah-e-Ghareeb :Jigar:
faKhr-e-Hindostaan* hai pyaare
{is e'laan-e-noon ko main jaa,iz samajh^taa hooN}
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yeh a'in mumkin hai keh eet^aa-e-jalee kee jo chand micaaleN
asaatiZah ke kalaam se oopar dee gayee haiN woh aise hee waqtee
:ijtihaad/aazaadee: kaa nateejah hoN. yeh to z^aahir hai keh yeh
:aazaadee: maZkoorah asaatiZah ke kalaam meN a'am t^aur se naa-paid
hai. woh bh`ee eet^aa-e-jalee ko a'ib hee maante the lekin Jigar kee
t^araH kisee KhaaS mauqe' par aarZ^ee ijtihaad se kaam lene meN koyee
buraayee bh`ee naheeN samjh`ee.
(E) iKhtitaamiyah:
ab jab.k yeh beHc Khatm hotee hai Anmol ke asha'ar par ek naz^ar Daal
lenaa munaasib ho gaa:
Muhabbat ki baateN ishaaroN meiN likkhooN
MaiN iqraar itne hijaaboN meiN likkhooN
Sabhi khoobsoorat nazaaroN meiN likkhooN
Tiraa naam jagmag sitaaroN meiN likkhooN
z^aahir hai ke :naz^aaroN, sitaaroN: donoN :naz^aarah, sitaarah: kee
jama' haiN jo Urdu ke uSool par banaayee gayee haiN aur eet^aa ke
qaanoon se mubarraa haiN. doosree baat yeh bh`ee Zehn meN rakh`ne kee
hai keh eet^aa Sirf mat^le' meN qawaafee kee maKhSooS shakloN se
qaayem hotaa hai. Husn-e-mat^la' is uSool se baree hai. kam se kam un
kitaaboN meN is kaa koyee Zikr naheeN hai jo mere paas haiN. Shamsur
Rahman Farooqui apnee kitaab :Dars-e-BalaaGhat: meN likh`te haiN keh:
"yeh Khayaal rahe keh eet^aa usee waqt laazim aataa hai jab aise
qaafiYe mat^le' meN ista'maal kiYe jaaYeN. chunaan.ch is meN koyee
harj naheeN keh mat^le' meN qaafiyah :baahar, andar: ho lekin ba'd
ke asha'ar meN :butgar, deedahwar: kee t^araH ke qaafiYe laaYe
jaaYeN."
ummeed hai keh is muKhtaSar beHc se Zehn kee bohat se giraheN kh`ul
gayee hoN gee, bohat se sawaalaat ke jawaab mil gaYe hoN ge aur kuch`
naYe paidaa bh`ee huYe hoN ge! is kaa hameshah imkaan hai keh maiN ne
apnee tafSeelaat meN Ghalat^ee kee ho. agar ahl-e-naz^ar mujh` ko
aagaah kareN ge to maiN shukriyah ke saath` apnee Ghalat^iyoN se
rujoo' karne meN taaKheer naheeN karooN gaa.
Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
paab...@hotmail.com
ishaa'at par mubaarak-baad qubool farmaa'iye.
duvum ye k is kam-naseeb zabaan ke parchaar ke li'ye aap kee mehnat,
lagan aur lagaa'o kee daad na denaa sareeh naa-insaafee ho gee. varna
maujooda soorat e haal meN to, Khaakam ba-dahan, aisaa lagtaa hai k
chiraaGh e saharee kee ye TimTimaatee lau ab bujhee k tab bujhee.
aur ab aaKhir meN "Khoogar e hamd se thoRaa saa gila bhee sun
leeji'ye": Internet kee Urdu shaa'iree kee mahaafil meN jo kuchh ho
rahaa hai us se mujhe shadeed iKhtilaaf hai. yahaaN aksar aksar
tuk-bandee ko taKhleeq aur qaafiya-paimaa'yee ko shaa'iree kaa ni'am al
badal maan liyaa gayaa hai. maiN kisee par tanqees naheeN karnaa
chaahtaa, lekin meree naaqis raa'ye meN sab se pehle to ye dekhnaa paRe
gaa k jin ash'aar par behs kee jaa'ye vo shaa'iree ke darje tak
pahunche bhee haiN yaa naheeN ... aayaa in meN vo taKhleeqee karb, vo
shaa'iraana irfaan o vijdaan bhee hai yaa naheeN jis kee binaa par
shaa'iree ko "juzveest az paiGhambaree" maanaa jaataa hai.
Zafar Iqbal ne kyaa Khoob kahaa hai:
shaa'iree aur tarah kee ise kehte ho Zafar
maiN pareeshaaN hooN k ye shaa'iree hai bhee k naheeN!
mere adnaa Khayaal se she'er meN sau 'aib hoN, manzoor hai ... lekin
pehle vo she'er to ho!
aik baar phir vazaahat k maqsad tanqees baraa e tanqees yaa kisee kee
hausila-shiknee naheeN bal k mahaz apne nuqta e nazar kaa izhaar hai
... jis se ittifaaq yaa iKhtilaaf kaa haq hazrat e Voltaire bahut pehle
hee sab ko de chuke haiN! :)
aadaab arz hai,
Zafar
Raz
gar.ch hai kis kis buraayee se wale baa-eeN-hamah
Zikr meraa mujh` se behtar hai keh us meHfil meN hai! :-)
itnee muddat ke ba'd aap se niyaaz HaaSil huwaa to dil :garden-garden:
ho gayaa! ab to yeh bh`ee yaad naheeN keh aaKhiree baar aap ko salaam
karne kee sa,a'adat se kab maalaa-maal huwaa th`aa!
aaj kal meraa guZar ALUP kee t^araf kam-kam hee hotaa hai. is meHfil
kaa raNg-o-Haal aap dekh` hee rahe haiN. woh puraanee
kaifiyyat-e-sarshaaree ab Khwaab-o-Khayaal ho kar reh gayee hai aur
yaaraan-e-bazm :tittar-bittar: bal.k
:nau-do-gyaarah-do-teraa-do-pandraa: ho chuke haiN! ph`ir aur bh`ee
baateN haiN jo aap behtar samajh` sakte haiN: ham agar a'rZ^ kareN ge
to shikaayat ho gee!
Khair, :eet^aa: par meraa maZ^moon aap se mulaaqaat kaa bahaanah huwaa
aur yeh mere liYe masarrat kaa maqaam qaraar paayaa! tum salaamat raho
hazaar baras!!
aap ne internet ke Hawaaleh so jo kuch` farmaayaa hai us se maiN agar
ek t^araf muttafiq hooN to doosree jaanib us se mujh` ko mut^laq
ittifaaq bh`ee naheeN hai! is ijmaal kee tafSeel yooN hai:
Urdu kee zubooN-Haalee ke aap bh`ee shaakee haiN aur maiN bh`ee. magar
aap yeh dekh`iYe keh net par jo log yeh :TooTaa-ph`ooTaa: kaam kar rahe
haiN aaKhir kaun haiN? ham sab Ghair mumaalik meN rehne waale apne
adabee aur samaajee maraakiz se bohat door dh`oonee ramaaYe beThe haiN.
ham apnee zabaan aur adab kee muHabbat se sarshaar to haiN lekin us ke
sabh`ee sotoN se hamaaraa rishtah kam-o-besh kaT kar reh gayaa hai. nah
yahaaN itnee furSat hai keh :chand ham-Soorat: mil beTheN aur nah hee
aise ahl-e-Zauq kee firaawaanee hai jo hamaaree adabee pyaas bujh`aa
sakeN; nah Urdu kee kitaabeN aur kutub-Khaane hee muhaiyyaa haiN aur
nah hee SaHeeH reh-numaayee ke vasaa,il. bohat se eHbaab to Urdu
rasm-ul-Khat^ se bh`ee achh`ee t^araH waaqif naheeN haiN. kuch` ko
zabaan-o-bayaan par kamaa-Haqqahoo u'boor naheeN hai. kitne to aise
haiN jin kee maadaree zabaan h`ee Urdu naheeN hai. Hindi, Punjabi,
Oriya, Gujrati, Marathi, Sindhi, Telugu, Bangali, Rajasthani, Pashto,
Balochi, Turkish zabaan waaloN se maiN Khud waaqif hooN aur kayee se
Khat^-o-kitaabat bh`ee hai!
ph`ir yeh bh`ee dekh`iYe keh Urdu ke in shaa,iqeen meN ek KhaaSee
baRee ta'daad Khawaateen kee bh`ee hai jo barr-e-SaGheer ke adabee
manz^ar-naamah meN Khaal-Khaal hee naz^ar aatee haiN! yeh Sirf Urdu kee
muHabbat hee to hai jis ne ham sab ko ek chaupaal par laa biThaayaa
hai? aur maiN samajh`taa hooN keh Urdu ke liYe aur Khud hamaare liYe
yeh faKhr-o-masarrat kaa maqaam hai!
aap kaa yeh kehnaa baRee Had tak durust hai keh net par kaam kaa
ma'yaar bohat ooNchaa naheeN hai. us ke asbaab z^aahir haiN aur in kee
tafSeel kee Z^aroorat naheeN hai. dekh`nee kee baat yeh hai keh log
meHnat aur lagan se kaam kar rahe haiN, jale diloN ke ph`aph`ole bh`ee
ph`oR rahe haiN, chashmakeN bh`ee jaaree haiN, kuch` achh`e likh`ne
waale naYe :likhaariyoN: ke Zauq kee aabyaaree bh`ee karne kee koshish
kar rahe haiN aur in meHfiloN kee ta'daad roz-ba-roz baRhtee hee chalee
jaa rahee hai.
guZishtah chand saaloN ke dauraan maiN ne in koshishoN kaa bohat
achh`aa nateejah dekh`aa hai. bohat se eHbaab kee Urdu kee istit^aa,a't
baRh gayee hai, zabaa-o-bayaan kaa ma'yaar baland ho rahaa hai, kayee
aise haiN jinhoN ne apne shauq aur meHnat se shaai'ree aur
maZ^moon-nigaaree shuroo' kar dee hai, bohat se log adab-o-she'r kee
fannee aur takneekee baareekiyoN aur nazaakatoN par meHnat kar rahe
haiN aur muKhtalif sat^HoN par behtaree naz^ar aa rahee hai.
mumkin hai keh aap ke ma'yaar se yeh sab kuch` naa-qaabil-e-e'tinaa ho
lekin mujh` ko yaqeen hai keh beshtar eHbaab is Soort-e-Haal se baRee
Had tak mut^ma,in haiN aur is ko mazeed behtar banaane ke liYe koshaaN
bh`ee haiN!
aap is silsileh meN hamaaree madad kar sakte haiN. hamaaree
reh-numaayee hamaaree majbooriyoN kee Hudood aur Haalaat kee raushanee
meN keejiYe, SeHatmand tabSiroN se hameN mustafeed keejiYe, apnee aur
doosroN kee ma'yaaree taKhleeqaat se hamaaree meHfiloN meN jot
jagaa,iYe, do ek naYe likhaariyoN ko apne saayah-e-tarbiyat-o-a'afiyat
meN le leejiYe aur un ke Zauq ko parwaan chaRhaane meN un kee
sarparstee keejiYe! kaam bohat haiN aur mushkileN bh`ee usee munaasibat
se kam naheeN haiN. fuqdaan agar hai to aise aSHaab-e-dard kaa jo is
kaThin manzil meN hamaare qadam-ba-qadam chaleN aur hamaaree
himmat-afzaayee ke saath saath raah-numaayee se hamaare adabee ufaq
raushan kareN!
net par hamaare kaam kee kam-a'yaaree z^aahir hai aur us ke asbaab
bh`ee sab par a'yaaN haiN. lekin Pakistan aur Hindustan meN Urdu waale
kyaa kaam kar rahe haiN jis par ham faKhr kar sakte haiN? mere paas
bohat se risaale aate haiN. jis ko dekh`iYe wohee chand Ghair-ma'yaaree
GhazaleN, be-faiZ^ aur be-maSraf naz^meN aur do ek afsaane dikh`aayee
dete haiN. nah teHqeeq hai aur nah tanqeed; nah fikr hai aur nah hee
naz^ar; nah zabaan hai aur nah hee bayaan! bohat se :naam-war: shoa'raa
aur udabaa (naam kyaa leN kayee Allah ke bande hoN ge!) ko paRh kar
saKht koft hotee hai. Hindustan ko to Khair yeh keh kar alag rakh`
deejiYe keh wahaaN Urdu ke Khilaaf bohat ta,a'SSub hai! Pakistan kee
qaumee zabaan to Urdu hai! ph`ir wahaan us kaa Haal itnaa Khastah kyoN
hai? aap jaise aSHaab-e-fikr-o-naz^ar ko is par Ghaur-o-tadabbur karnaa
chaahiYe aur ph`ir ek soche samjh`e laa,iHah-e-a'mal kee raushanee meN
zabaan-o-adab ke aHyaa kee koshish karnee chaahiYe warnah Urdu kaa
mustaqbil taareek naz^ar aataa hai.
agar ham Urdu ke :Ghair-mulkee: parastaar is silsileh meN aap logoN kee
kuch` madad kar sakeN to bataa,iYe. inshaa-Allah ham meN bh`ee aise
sar-ph`ire aap ko mil jaaYeN ge jo :daame, dirme, qadame, suKhane: is
kaam meN aap kaa haath` baTaane ko taiyyaar hoN ge!
Khat^ kuch` t^aweel ho gayaa hai. aur shaayad Zaraa see talKhee bh`ee
is meN dar aayee hai. lekin aap yaqeen kareN keh is se aap kee yaa
kisee aur kee dil-aazaaree maqSood naheeN hai. albattah is ko ek
Urdu-dost dukh`e dil kee aawaaz kahaa jaaYe to ziyaadah durust ho gaa.
is teHreer se aap se yaa kisee aur se be-jaa beHc-o-tamHeeS bh`ee
manz^oor naheeN hai. haaN agar is se tabaadilah-e-Khayaal kee
SeHat-mand aur mufeed-e-mat^lab raaheN hamwaar hotee haiN to wallaah
maiN Khud ko Khush-qismatoN meN shumaar karne meN der naheeN karooN
gaa!
iraadat-kaish
Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
Afzal A. Khan
Janaab Sarwar Saheb,
Aap ke is taweel KHat par ik muKHtasir sa "tabsira"
karne kee ijaazat ho to maiN sirf yeh kahooNga ke aap
KHud ko yaqeenan KHush~qismaton men shumaar kar sakte
haiN. Mujhe ummeed hee naheeN yaqeen hai ke aap ke is
dard~maNdaana (lekin haqeeqat par mabnee) paiGHaam ka
hamaare tamaam ahbaab zaroor KHairmaqdam kareNge aur
jahaaN tak ban paRega aap ke mashwiroN par 'amal bhee
kareNge.
India men Urdu aur Urdu~waaloN ko aksar yeh ta'ana sunne
ko milta hai ke Urdu to Pakistan kee zabaan hai --- to
yahaaN uska kya kaam ? Lekin Zafar Saheb ke KHat se yehee
mehsoos hota hai Pakistan men bhee is "bezabaan" ke liye
haalaat zyaada saazgaar naheeN haiN. Aap kee tarah maiN
bhee hairaan hooN ke jis mulk kee qaumee zabaan Urdu ho,
wahaaN us kee aisee "dasha" kyoNkar huwee.
Afzal
Mohib
asak.
maine Zafar sahab ka khat padha tha aur aapke jawab ka muntazir tha.
Zafar sahab apni jagah per thik hain aur unke jaise urdudaan ko
yaqeenan bahut koft hoti hogi lekin jaisa ke aapne zikr kia ke
:something is better than nothing: aur mazeed behtari ki hamesha
gunzaish rahti hai.
aapko maine Urdu se mutalliq har mehfil mein apne keemati waqt ko sarf
karte dekha hai, aur mera apna tajurba hai ke das nahin to chaar logon
ko usse zaroor faayda hota hai. picchle ek saal mein kai naye shoara ke
kalaam ka mayyar inhiiN mefiloN mein aap hazraat ki sarparasti se
parwaan chadha hai.
aaj ke daur mein is baat ki sakht zaroorat hai ke hamari Universities
aur deegar adabi halqe, internet se wabasta ho jaiyen aur kisi na kisi
darje mein Urdu adab ki khimaat mein waqt sarf karein. is se in
mehfiloN ka mayyar yaqeenan badhega aur mujh jaise tifl-e-maktab ko
zaroor faayda hoga.
aapne ham sabke khayalaat ki bahut acchi tarjumaani kee hai, is ke liye
main aapka shukrguzaar hun.
shukriya,
khaq saar
Mohib
Shoaib Tanvir
yaqeenan internet ki mehfiloN meiN bohat laghu aur fuzool qism ka
kalaam bhi dekhne ko milta hai jis ko shaairi ka naam dena zulm se kam
naheeN. lekin us ke muqaabile meiN be shumar aise forums/websites haiN
jahaaN gesoo-e-sukhan ko saNwarne ke liye be shumaar achchhe
kohna-mashq aur nau-aamoz sho'ra din raat koshaaN haiN.
Zafar sahib ki raaye mere liye bohat ahmiat rakhti hai is liye k maiN
un ke mutaal'e aur soch ki wus'at se waaqif hooN. lekin is jaga mujhe
un se behad ikhtilaaf hai.
door kiyuN jaate haiN aap urdustan, e-bazm, bash mubahisa aur isi
forum par dekh lijiye. kohna mashq sho'ra ko chhoR kar sirf nau-aamoz
sho'ra ko dekhiye to bhi is baat se inkaar na mumkin hai k aaj ke yeh
nau-mashq sho'ra kal urdu ghazal ke aasmaan par sitaare ban ke chamkeN
ge.
Sarwar sahib, aap khud aksar apne shaagirdoN ko daad dete hue is baat
ka izhaar karte haiN k un ka kalaam din ba din taraqqi ki taraf
gaamzan hai. aise meiN internet per urdu shairi ki ahmiat se inkaar
karna meri samajh se bala tar hai.
Shoaib
-------
ik shakhs kar raha hai abhi tak wafa ka zikr
kaash us zabaaN daraaz ka muNh noch le koi!
(Jaun Eliya)
Mr_suk...@yahoo.com
assalam-o-alaikum
"eetaa" per maine aaap ka maa'loomaati mazmoon paRha aur us per apni
Haqeer si raaye bhi pesh ki .
jaisa ke aap ne ham sab ki raaye maaNgi hai, to maiN bhi is silsile
mein kuch arz karna chaahooN ga
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Zafar Iqbal Syed kaa Khat^:
aur ab aaKhir meN "Khoogar e hamd se thoRaa saa gila bhee sun
leeji'ye":
Internet kee Urdu shaa'iree kee mahaafil meN jo kuchh ho rahaa hai us
se mujhe shadeed iKhtilaaf hai. yahaaN aksar aksar tuk-bandee ko
taKhleeq aur qaafiya-paimaa'yee ko shaa'iree kaa ni'am al badal maan
liyaa gayaa hai.
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muaafi chaahooN ga magar mujhe Zafar saHib ki is raaye se mutlaq
ikhtilaaf hai ke internet ki urdu maHaafil mein aksar tukbandee aur
meHz qaafiya paimaaii ho rahi hai.
aisa hargiz nahin hai. Urdustan, Stanvir.com, Bahas.Mubahisa, Ebazm, in
sab maHaafil-e-sukhan mein jaaiN aur dekhiye ke kis taraH naye shoaraa
arooz, ilm-e-qavaafi jaise pecheeda aur daqeeq uloom seekh rahe haiN,
balke unke kalaam mein roz.afzooN nikhaar bhi aata jaa rahaa hai.
itni meHnat aur lagan ke baad jab koi nau.aamoz apni kaawish-e-sukhan
pesh karta hai to yaqeenan us ke khoon-e-jigar ka nichoR , us ke
takhayyul ki parvaaz, us ki fikr-e-sukhan, us ki arq.reizi, us ke
kalaam mein numaayaaN hoti hai, jise ham kisi bhi taur meHz qaafiya
paimaai nahin keh sakte.
mera zaati khayaal hai ke internet ki ye maHaafil zabaan-e-urdu ki
zulf-e-pechaaN ko sanvaarne, aur is ke ru-e-khoobaaN ko mazeed dilkash
aur jaazib-e-nazar banaane mein bahot bahot fa'aal kirdaar adaa kar
rahi haiN.
urdu shaairi mein aaghaaz se hi naye shoaraa ko jo sab se baRee
museebat ka saamna hai wo ye ke aaj ke daur mein koi ustaad nahin
milta, aur agar "khush.naseebi" se koi ustaad-e-mohtaram mil bhi jaaiN
to shaagird be.chaara zaanu-e-talammuz tae karne ke baad taa.hayaat
ustaad ke aHsaanoN tale dab jaata hai, aur tamaam nahin, magar beshtar
asaatiza apne HalqoN mein is baat ka "parchaar" karte hain ke fulaaN
mera shaagird hai, fulaaN mujh se islaaH leta hai.
doosri jaanib Internet per maine bahot se aise shafeeq aur
qaabil-e-sad.aiHtaraam asaatiza dekhe haiN, jo baghair kisi
jalb-e-manfa'at ke nauvaaridaan-e-sukhan ki Hosla afzaai bhi karte
hain, aur unheN baa.qaaida rumooz-e-sukhan ki taa'leem bhi dete haiN.
Mohtaram Sarwar saHib, yaqeenan aap bhi in shafeeq asaatiza meiN se aik
hain. in ke ilaava, Mohtaram Raj Kumar Qais aur Mohtaram Abdullah Nazir
saHib khaas taur per qaabil-e-zikr haiN.
yaqeenan aisi bhi meHfileN haiN jahaan Urdu.adab ki khidmat ki bajaaye
meHz tuk.bandiyaaN hi chalti haiN, magar is ka ye matlab nahin ke
internet per zabaan-e-urdu ke liye koi kaam nahin ho raha. mere jin
dostoN ko shikaayat hai un se ye guzarish hai ke wo Urdustan,
Stanvir.com, Ebazm, Urdudan mein jo shaayari ke sections haiN (jahaaN
sirf baa.vazn kalaam pesh kiya jaata hai), vahaaN aa ker zaraa dekheN
ke kis taraH naye likhne vaale apne senior sho'araa ki rehnumaai mein
gulistaan-e-sukhan mein apne haathoN se lagaai hue nannhe nannhe paudoN
aur booToN ki aabiyaari mein hama.tan masroof-o-mashghool haiN
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maiN kisee par tanqees naheeN karnaa chaahtaa, lekin meree naaqis
raa'ye meN sab se pehle to ye dekhnaa paRe gaa k jin ash'aar par behs
kee jaa'ye vo shaa'iree ke darje tak pahunche bhee haiN yaa naheeN ...
aayaa in meN vo taKhleeqee karb, vo shaa'iraana irfaan o vijdaan bhee
hai yaa naheeN jis kee binaa par shaa'iree ko "juzveest az
paiGhambaree" maanaa jaataa hai.
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aap ka mazmoon ghazal ke "aib" eetaaye jalee ke baare mein tha. maqsood
ye tha ke naye aur kohna mashq sho'araa yaa'ni "avaam-o-khavaas" ko is
naqs ke baare meiN tafseelan aagaahi ho. qata' nazar is ke ke kis ke
she'r per beHs ho rahi hai, aur yahaaN is uljhan mein bhi paRne ki
zaroorat nahin hai ke aaya wo she'r , she'r kehelvaane ke laa'iq bhi
hai ya nahin?. muda'aa to sirf itna hai ke ye baat vaazeH ho jaaye ke
[b]eetaa naqs hai bhi ya nahin? aur asaatize ke haaN jo is ki amsilaa
milti hain, un ki taqleed jaaiz hai ya nahin
aakhir mein aap hi ke vaalid-e-moHtaram ka ye khoobsurat she'r likhna
chaahooN ga, jo main aksar quote karta hooN :
tae kar chuka hooN raah-e-mohabbat ke marHale
is se zyaada Haajat-e-sharH-o-bayaaN nahiN
shukria
Amjad
(Note: ye meHz meri zaati aaraa haiN, jin se kisi ko bhi ikhtilaaf ya
ittefaaq hona "Natural" hai )
Zafar
aap ke javaab aur doosre dostoN ke taa'assuraat se mas'ale ke donoN
ruKh saamne aa ga'ye haiN, jin se soorat e haal kaa jaa'iza lene meN
madad mil saktee hai. afsos k vaqt kee kamee ke baa'is maiN aik nishist
meN sabhee savaaloN ke javaabaat naheeN de paa'ooN gaa. sar e dast
kuchh afkaar e pareeshaaN haazir haiN.
Urdu shaa'iree meN ustaadee-shaagirdee kaa idaara
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ye to sabhee jaante haiN k shaa'iree 'atiya e Khudaavandee hai aur ye k
shaa'ir paidaa hote haiN, banaa'ye naheeN jaate. Urdu shaa'iree kaa
baavaa Aadam duniyaa se is lihaaz se niraalaa hai k yahaaN 18veeN sadee
ke vast meN Khan e Aarzoo ne ustaadee-shaagirdee kaa idaara qaa'im kar
diyaa, varna ise pehle Urdu meN bhee shu'araa talmeez ur Rahmaan hee
huvaa karte the (misaal ke taur par Urdu ke pehle baRe shaa'ir Wali
Deccani ... Farsi meN to Khair is qism kee ko'yee rivaayat kam az kam
mere ilm meN naheeN hai). ye idaara ko'yee 200 saal tak chaltaa rahaa,
hatta k 1950 ke aate aate is kaa qareeb qareeb Khaatma ho gayaa.
yahaaN tak to baat durust hai k Urdu shaa'iree kee taareeKh meN is
idaare kaa baRaa kirdaar rahaa hai, lekin baa eeN hama, ham dekhte haiN
k Urdu ke ka'yee 'azeem shu'araa ne kisee se baaqaa'ida islaah naheeN
lee. Mir, Sauda, Dard aur Ghalib (aaKhir uz zikr to mutlaqan
"bai-ustaade" the: jee haaN, vo Mullaa Abdus Samad vaalaa qissa Ghalib
ke taKhayyul e taiz gaam kee mast-Khiraamee se ziyaada kuchh naheeN!)
is kaa suboot haiN. Iqbal ne chand Ghazaliyaat ke silsile meN
(ba-zariya e Khat o kitaabat) Dagh se zaroor mashvara kiyaa lekin ham
jaante haiN k Iqbal kee vajh e shuhrat Dagh ke rang kee shaa'iree
naheeN hai ... zaahir hai k Iqbal apne rang ke Khud hee moojid aur Khud
hee Khaatim the.
aur 20veeN sadee ke to Khair taqreeban tamaam baRe shu'araa kaa ko'yee
ustaad naheeN thaa: NM Rashid, Majeed Amjad, Mira Ji, Akhtarul Iman,
Nasir Kazmi, Faiz, Munir Niazi, vG, sab ke sab mubde e faiyyaaz se
islaah lete the.
ab agar is tanaazur meN Internet par jaaree mahaafil ko dekhaa jaa'ye
to insaan shashdar reh jaataa hai: mujhe apnee aankhoN par yaqeen
naheeN aayaa jab maiN ne Net par "Ghazal kehne kaa *aasaan* tareeqa"
aur is qabeel ke doosre mazaamen dekhe. in mazaameen meN nau-Khaiz
shu'araa ko bataayaa jaataa hai k pehle qaafiya DhoonDeN, phir us par
mabnee "doosraa" misra ghaReN aur, ammaa ba'aduhu, pehle misre kee
taraf rujoo' farmaa'yeN!
phir is chashm e gunehgaar ne ye manzar bhee dekhaa k aise "shu'araa"
ko, jo bai-vazn aur saheeh she'er meN tameez naheeN kar sakte,
"fa'oolan faa'ilaat" ke keel-kaanTe se lais kar ke maidaan e suKhan meN
bhejaa jaa rahaa hai. maiN ye samajhtaa hooN k agar aik shaKhs ko'yee
she'er *paRhnaa* tak naheeN jaantaa, vo urooz ke bal boote par she'er
*likhnaa* kyaa seekh paa'ye gaa?! is tarah ke shua'araa agar GhazaloN
ke "kushtoN ke pushte" bhee lagaa deN to bhalaa is se Urdu adab kee
kaunsee Khidmat ho gee, aur Urdu zabaan ko kitne nafloN kaa savaab mile
gaa?
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aap kee baRee 'inaayat k aap is naa-laa'iq kee nisbat is qadr husn e
zan rakhte haiN.
aik baar phir iltimaas hai k meraa maqsad kisee par keechaR uchhaalnaa
naheeN bal k aik soorat e haal kee nishaan-dihee aur is kee islaah kee
apnee see koshish hai.
aadaab arz hai,
Zafar
A.Kala
M'aaf kijiyega, is garma-garm bahs se apne ko alag rakhna mere liye
mumkin nahi ho pa raha hai, lihazah ham bhi apni achchi-buri raaye rakh
raheN hai(Akhir 'internet' isii maqsad ke liye to bana hai)
Bahs shuru huii thi 'poetry main 'aib' ko lekar aur mudda phisal kar
tuk-bandi numa kalaam par aa kar Thahar gaya hai, MaiN koshish karonga
dono hi muddoN ko joRne ki. To bhai SahebaaN gaur farmayeN:
Akhir 'aib' hai kya cheez! Is sawal ka jawab dene se pahle main kuch
doosari baat ka khulasa karna pasaNd karooNga.
Shayari kya hai! Mera maan.na hai k shayari aik 'art' hai aur 'art' ka
t'aaluq 'aesthetics' se hai. Zahir hai aesthetics shayari k dono pahlu
yaani 'structure' aur izhare-e-jazbaat donoN se mutaluq hai. Kah.ne k
maqsad hai k shayari k 'aesthetics' waale pahlu ko madde-nazar rakh
kar kuch qaide-kanoon banaye gaye aur jab in qaide-kanoon ko toRa
jaata hai to 'aib' paida hota. Sawaal uthta hai k ye qaide-kanoon kisne
banaye haiN? Zahir hai kuch is fan maiN maahir afraad ne akele ya mil
kar banaye hoNge jinko samaj aur urdu adab maiN izzat se dekha jaata
hoga aur unki baat ko saNjeedgi se liya jata hoga. Lekin kya
'aesthetics' k parameters constant haiN? Kya asthetics ke paimaane waqt
ke saath badalte nahi haiN? Akhir hamara samaj, hamari makhtalif masloN
par soch badalti hai, to phir ye man.ne main koii harz nahi k
aesthetics ka dimension bhi waqt k saath badalta hai. Is haqeeqat k
madde nazar sochne ki baat hai ke maazi maiN banaye gaye qaide-kanoon k
lihaaz se kya aaj ki shayari ko parkha ja sakta hai?
Do misaal dena pasaNd karoonga jo uthaye gaye 'point' ko aur pukhta
kareNge:
1.. Hamari 'Classical mausiki' ke ab do distinct style haiN;
'Hindustani gayaki' aur 'Karnatak gayaki'. Purity k lihaaz se 'Karnatak
style gayaki' kitabaat maiN darz rules k mutabiq hai jabke 'Hindustani
style gayaki' main be-shumaar 'aib' haiN. Lekin Hindustaani gayaki
Karnatak style gayaki se kaheeN jyadah popular hai aur jo aib haiN unhe
ab aib na maan kar 'flexibility' bataya jaata hai.
2.. Ham me se bahut se logoN ne Tulsidas aur Kabir ka naam suna hoga(
Tulsidas ki Ramayan north India maiN behad popular hai aur Kabir ke
sufi kalaam bhi utna hi popular haiN) YuN to Tulsida apne fan maiN
mahir the lekin un.hone apne kalaam maiN jazbaat ko tawazzoh di na k
poetry ki purity ko aur ye to jag zahir hai k Kabir ko formal education
hi na mili thi. In dono k contemporary aik poet the 'Keshavdas'.
Keshavdas ne bhi Ramayan likhi lekin inki likhi Ramayan popular na ho
saki aur iski wajah thi Keshavdas ki bohat hi 'ornamental language'
aur pure classical style. Is ka nateejah ye hua k Keshavdas aam logoN
maiN to popular nahi hue magar Universities aur Research ka subject
jaroor ban gaye.
In baatoN se to yahi nateejah nikalta hai k
1.. Ye achcha hoga k ham shayari k qaide-kanoon ko samjheN
2.. Ye kaheen aur jaroori hai shayari maiN jazbaat ko tawazzoh di jaaye
aur agar compromise karne ki naubat aati hai to beshaq jazbaat ko
ahmiyat deni hogi.
MaiN Zafar sahib ki baat se ittefaq rakhta huN k "hajaar 'aib' hoN
magar shayari maiN kuch nayi baat to kahi jaaye! kuch naya andaaz to
pesh kiya jaaye!
Agar ye kaheN "ChaNd khubsoorat hai" to kuch bhi naya nahi. LekiN agar
koii kahe:
"Aaj chaNd khaamosh hai!" to aik nayi soch paid hoti hai.
shukriya
A.Kala
( Meri urdu aap jaisoN ki tarah 'accomplished' to nahi magar koshish
karne se hi insaan seekhta hai. Text main aayi GhaltiyuN k liye m'aafi
chah.ta huN)
Roshan Kamath
I can't thank you enough for this excellent essay. It is only due to
such painstaking efforts by you, and other stalwarts of this group, that
we 'dabblers' in urdU can imbibe these streams, nay oceans, of knowledge
which would otherwise be lost to us.
In eager anticipation of more food-for-the-mind in the future,
rosh
Raz
ek muddat ke ba'd aap se niyaaz HaaSil ho rahaa hai aur dilee masarrat
kaa baa,ic hai! aap kee dost-daaree aur Zarrah-nawaazee hai keh mujh
naacheez ko aise alfaaz^ se yaad karte haiN. meree jh`olee meN meraa
apnaa kuch` bh`ee naheeN hai. sab kuch` :maaNge kaa ujaalaa: hai jis ko
doosroN tak poNhchaane kee koshish kartaa rehtaa hooN. yeh maZ^moon
bh`ee isee silsileh kee ek kaRee hai.
aaj kal is meHfil ko neeNd see aayee huyee hai! ham sab koshish kareN
to shaayad yeh ph`ir jaag jaaye!
Zafar SaaHeb aur Kala SaaHeb ke Khat^oN ke jawaab kal parsoN tak dooN
gaa. dekh` leejiye gaa. agar koyee faa,idah nah bh`ee huwaa to nuqSaan
to yaqeena" naheeN ho gaa! :-)
aap kaa sewak
Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
Raz
rakh`iYo :Ghalib: mujh`e is talKh-nawaayee se mu,a'af
aaj kuch` dard mire dil meN siwaa hotaa hai!
yaad-aawaree ke liYe mamnoon-o-mutashakkir hooN. aap ne achh`aa kiyaa
keh mas,aleh par :qist^oN: meN iz^haar-e-Khayaal shuroo' kiyaa hai. is
se baat Saaf rahe gee aur mauZ^oo'aat Khalt^-malt^ ho kar uljhan kaa
baa,ic naheeN hoN ge.
aap ne :keechaR uchh`aalne: ke Hawaaleh se jo ma'Zarat pesh kee hai us
kee chandaaN Z^aroorat naheeN th`ee. ham sab aap se ba-Khoobee waaqif
haiN aur aisee mubtaZil Harakat kaa Sudoor aap jaise SaaHeb-e-i'lm se
naa-mumkin jaante haiN! maiN :Ghazal kehne kaa aasaan t^areeqaH: kaa
muSannif hooN aur aap ke jumlah Khayaalaat kaa Khair-maqdam kartaa
hooN. in ko maiN :ta'meeree tanqeed: to naheeN keh saktaa albattah us
se :miltee-jultee: ek sanjeedah koshish Z^aroor gardaantaa hooN!
sab se pehle agar maiN yeh a'rZ^ karooN keh aap kaa Khat^ mere liYe
kuch` Hairat aur kuch` afsos kaa baa,ic huwaa to Ghair-munaasib naheeN
ho gaa. jab koyee shaKhS apne Khaanah-saaz mafrooZ^aat aur aise hee
Zehnee taHaffuz^aat ke saath` raaYe-zanee kartaa hai to us ke nateejah
meN aisee :maarooN gh`uTnaa, ph`ooTe aaNkh`: teHreer kaa Sudoor a'in
iqtiZ^aa-e-fit^rat ho jaataa hai. is ijmaal kee th`oRee see tafSeel
aage aa rahee hai!
aap ne jo nikaat apne a'alimanah Khat^ meN uThaaYe haiN un kaa
muKhtaSar jawaab HaaZ^ir hai. ummeed hai keh is tabaadilah-e-Khayaal se
mucbat nataa,ij hee z^aahir hoN ge. aap kee jaanib se manfee
radd-e-a'mal kee ummeed koyee :kaafir: hee kar saktaa hai aur maiN
abh`ee is :maqaam-e-a'aliyah: par faa,iz naheeN huwaa hooN! :-)
(1) mujh` ko ba-Khoobee i'lm hai keh aap :ustaadee-shaagirdee: kee
riwaayat ke Khilaaf haiN. is mauqif kaa aap ko mukammal Haq hai. haaN,
jab aap apne Khat^ meN hee us kee ifaadiyat kaa (dabe lafz^oN hee meN
sahee!) e'tiraaf-o-iqraar bh`ee karte haiN to aap kaa yeh mauqif qadre
kamzor ho jaataa hai! lekin mujh` ko is mauqif ke Hawaaleh se yahaaN
kuch` naheeN kehnaa hai! mauZ^oo' to kuch` aur hee hai!
aap kaa yeh kehnaa qat^ae'e Ghalat^ hai keh yeh :idaarah: ab naa-paid
ho gayaa hai. haaN is meN shak naheeN hai keh yeh rivaayat eeN-zamaanah
bohat kamzor ho kar reh gayee hai. is Soorat-e-Haal kaa nateejah bh`ee
aap ke saamne hai! Sirf Pakistan ke hee risaale aur kitaabeN uThaa kar
dekh` leN. kyaa zabaan, kyaa bayaan, kyaa adaa,igee aur kyaa
Khayaalaat, sab kee zubooN-Haalee dekh`iYe aur jee bh`ar kar maatam kar
leejiYe! beshtar :shoa'raa aur udabaa: (aur in meN aap kee jaanib se
:sanad-yaaftah: log bh`ee shaamil haiN!--naam kyaa leN koyee Allah kaa
bandah ho gaa!) ko SaHeeH zabaan-o-bayaan par hee qudrat naheeN hai aur
woh Sirf bar-Khud-Ghalat^ :naYe: aur naam-nihaad :ijtihaadee:
maZ^aameen ke naam par hee apnaa bharam banaanaa chaahate haiN. z^aahir
hai keh jis ne SaHeeH zabaan aur us kaa ista'maal seekh`aa hee naheeN
hai woh aur kyaa kar saktaa hai? yaa to Ghalat^-salat^ Urdu likh`e gaa
yaa us meN English kee :khichRee pakaa kar: donoN zabaanoN se apnee
laa-i'lmee kaa cuboot Khud hee faraaham kare gaa!
shaai'ree ho yaa adab kee koyee aur Sinf, haiN yeh sab fan (art) kee
hee qismeN. aap maaneN yaa nah maaneN in sab ko seekh`naa paRtaa hai!
is meN koyee shak naheeN hai keh adab-e-she'r kee SalaaHiyat
Khudaa-daad hotee hai lekin us kee tarveej-o-tehzeeb ke liYe tarbiyat
aur SaHeeH rehnumaayee kee Z^aroorat fit^ree bh`ee hai aur naa-guzeer
bh`ee.
aap ne Mir, Ghalib, Iqbal, Faiz kaa Zikr kiyaa hai keh inhoN ne kisee
ustaad-e-fan se baa-qaa,idah iSlaaH naheeN lee. lekin aap ne yeh naheeN
sochaa keh aisee :Khudaa-daad: SalaaHiyat mujh` jaise kitne logoN meN
hotee hai ke woh Sirf apne bal-boote par hee fann-e-shaai'ree meN aisee
a'z^mat HaaSil kar sakeN? ek a'am shaKhS kee adabee SalaaHiyat bh`ee
a'am hee hotee hai aur woh apnee Zaatee koshish se Ghalib, Mir yaa
Iqbal naheeN ban saktaa hai. albattah yeh mumkin hai ke woh munaasib
ta'leem, tarbiyat aur rehnumaayee se Sarwar yaa Zafar Iqbal Syed ban
jaaYe! aur yehee ustaadee-saagirdee kaa maqSad bh`ee hai!
aap apnee daleel ke josh meN yeh bh`ee bh`ool gaYe keh Mir, Ghalib,
Iqbal waGhairah ne bhee zabaan-o-qawaa,id-o-bayaan kee
ta'leem-o-tarbiyat kisee maktab yaa madriseh meN kisee ustaad se hee
lee th`ee, ph`ir u'mr bh`ar us par meHnat aur mut^aali,a'h karte rahe,
apne ma,a'aSireen kee SuHbat meN beThe, kuch` un se seekh`aa aur kuch`
un ko sikh`aayaa. tab jaa kar unhoN ne is :ta'leem-e-tarbiyat: ko
apnee adabee kaavishoN meN ista'maal kiyaa. goyaa ham yeh keh sakte
haiN keh bh`ale hee Mir-o-Ghalib ne kisee ustaad ke saamne
zaanoo-e-talammuZ teh nah kiyaa ho un kee adabee aur she'ree tarbiyat
un ke ma,aa'Sireen kee suHbat aur kitaaboN ke mut^aalie' se huyee
th`ee. is t^araH un kaa pooraa maaHaul hee un kaa :ustaad: th`aa,
har-chand ke yeh us qabeel kaa :ustaad: naheeN hai jis kaa taSawwur
hamaare Zehn meN hai!
ustaadee-shaagirdee kaa apnaa maqaam aur faa,idah hai jis se inkaar to
aap ko bh`ee naheeN hai! kam se kam mujh` jaisaa ma'moolee SalaaHiyat
kaa aadamee adab ke maidaan meN ek qadam bh`ee us tarbiyat ke baGhair
naheeN uThaa saktaa th`aa jo maiN ne apne ustaadoN se HaaSil kee.
(2) ab maiN un mafrooZ^aat aur ta,a'SSubaat kee t^araf aataa hooN jin
kaa Zikr maiN ne oopar kiyaa hai aur jo aap ke Khat^ kee bunyaad haiN.
aap ne ma'loom naheeN kyoN yeh farZ^ kar liyaa hai ke internet par Urdu
kee meHfiloN aur muKhtalif koshishoN kaa maqSad in meHfiloN ke shurakaa
meN se Ghalib aur Mir paidaa karnaa hai yaa kisee ko achh`aa shaai'r
aur adeeb banaa kar Urdu par koyee eHsaan karnaa hai! seedh`ee see
baat to yeh hai keh is koshish kaa yeh maqSad hai hee naheeN. is liYe
aap kaa yeh farZ^ karnaa aur us par apnee daleel kee bunyaad rakh`naa
ziyaadatee naheeN hai to aur kyaa hai?
internet par jo bh`ee TooTee-ph`ooTee koshish Urdu adab-e-she'r ke
Hawaale se ho rahee hai meree naz^ar meN us ke maqaaSid Hasb-e-Zel
haiN:
(a) shaa,iqeen-e-Urdu ke adabee-o-she'ree Zauq kee aabyaaree aur
tarveej-o-tehzeeb meN apnee istit^aa,at ke mut^aabiq madad karnaa.
(b) naye likh`ne waaloN kee himmat-afzaayee, un kee mumkinah
rehnumaayee aur iSlaaH
(c) Urdu kee i'shaa,a't, KhuSooSa" aise Halaqeh meN jahaaN us ke
naam-lewaa kam kam hee haiN!
(d) Ghair mumaalik men Urdu kaa chiraaGh raushan rakh`naa aur apne
lisaanee wirceh ko aglee nasl tak poNhchaanaa. maiN :adabee wircah:
naheeN keh rahaa hooN kyoN.k woh to naa-mukkin hai. haaN hamaaree aglee
nasl agar Urdu meN guftgoo hee kar le to bohat hai!
(e) aise eHbaab kee himmat-afzaayee aur un ko dostaanah mashware denaa
jin kee maadaree zabaan Urdu naheeN hai lekin kisee bh`ee Hawaale se
jin ko Urdu adab-o-shaai'ree kaa shauq hai. is marHale par un ko SaHeeH
Urdu kee ta'leem bh`ee dee jaa saktee hai ba-sharte-keh yeh kaam
muHabbat aur dost-daaree se kiyaa jaaYe!
aap ko in maqaaSid se iKhtilaaf ho saktaa hai lekin maiN ne internet
kee meHfiloN meN in koshishoN ke bohat achh`e nataa,ij dekh`e haiN aur
mujh` ko yaqeen hai keh ham SaHeeH raaste par haiN. aap Kala aur Roshan
SaaHebaan kee lagan, i'lmiyat aur Urdu se shauq hee dekh`iYe. yaa
<www.urdudan.com> ke :sawaalaat: section meN jaa kar Qalandar SaaHeb
kaa Khat^ paRh leN. meraa Khayaal hai keh us ke ba'd aap ke bohat se
iltibaasaat rafoo-chakkar ho jaaYeN ge!
Khat^ taweel ho gayaa hai. agar aap kee shaan meN koyee gustaaKhee ho
gayee hai to woh naa-daanistah hai aur us ke liYe u'Zr-Khwaah hooN!
Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
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haashiyah: fit^ree SalaaHiyat ke Hawaale se ek dilchasp baat sun
leejiYe! hamaare gh`ar meN ham sab bh`aayee-behan adabee Zauq le kar
paidaa huwe th`e. Sirf mujh` se baRe bh`aayee Mashhood Alam Raz
(marHoom) hee aise th`e keh Zauq-e-she'r-o-adab is se mut^laq be-behrah
th`e, yahaaN tak keh woh she'r bh`ee akcar SaHeeH naheeN paRh sakte
th`e! ph`ir un ko :brain cancer: ho gayaa. maiN un se milne gayaa to
saKht a'leel th`e. ek din mujh` se kehne lage keh :Sarwar! meraa ek
she'r suno:. maiN hakkaa-bakkaa reh gayaa aur maiN ne kahaa keh :tum
she'r kehne lage ho?:. muskuraa kar unhoN ne kahaa keh :haaN, kabh`ee
kabh`ee ab keh letaa hooN. to suno!:
uThe haiN dost itne darmiyaaN se
uTheN ge ham to kaaNdh`e kam lageN ge!
yeh she'r ab bh`ee yaad aataa hai to aaNkheN ashkbaar ho jaatee haiN.
is waqt bh`ee haiN! ab ijaazat?
Sarwar Raz
Amjad
assalam-o-alaikum
mujhe aap se ittefaaq hai. aap ki baat ki taaiid meiN ye kehna chaahooN
ga ke agarche Meer, Ghalib, Iqbal va.ghairuhum ne baqaaida kisi se
islaaH na li ho, aur bay.shak kisi ko ustaad bhi na banaaya ho, magar
ye baat bhi to nafs.ul.amr hai ke Meer, Ghalib aur Daagh jaise asaatiza
ke talaamiza maujood the (muqaffa ibaarat aaraayi ka apna hi maza hai
:) )
aur Hazrat-e-dagh dehlavi ke shaagird to poore hindustaan mein phaile
hue the.
"ustaadi shaagirdi" ki isi rasm ne hameN nabbaaz-e-ghalib, Altaf
Hussein Hali jaise jayyid shaair aur mufakkir ataa kiye.
agar kisi ko shaagird banaana itna hi naa.ravaa hota, to ghalib , Meer,
daagh ne shagird kyuN banaaye? aur wo unki islaaH kyuN kiya karte the?
is liye agar "ustaadi shaagirdi" per tanqeed hogi to pehli tanqeed ka
nishaana to asaatiza hi baneN ge na? ;) :)
Raz
aap kaa Khat^ dekh` kar bohat Khushee huyee. sab se pehle to aap se yeh
kehnaa hai keh aap kee Urdu itnee Kharaab naheeN hai jitnee aap
samajh`te haiN! kaheeN kaheeN Zaraa saa farq hai jo practice se door ho
jaaYe gaa. itnaa to maiN keh saktaa hooN keh aap kee Urdu meree Hindi
se kaheeN behtar hai!
is se pehle maiN ne ALUP par aap kee sab posts English meN hee dekh`ee
th`eeN. aur yeh mujh` ko a'jeeb saa lagaa th`aa keh baat to Urdu
shaai'ree kee ho aur kee jaaYe woh English meN! ph`ir bh`ee yeh bohat
Khushee kee baat hai keh aap ko Urdu shaai'ree kaa itnaa shauq hai.
dhannyawaad!
aap ke Khat^ se jo baateN ma'loom huyeeN un kaa jawaab dene kee koshish
kartaa hooN. baat bohat seedh`ee saadee hai. meraa maZ^moon (article)
shaai'ree ke ek a'ib par th`aa aur baat kahaaN se kahaaN poNhach gayee!
aap ne bh`ee is kaa ishaarah kiyaa hai. do ek baateN aap kee tavajjuh
ke liYe likh` rahaa hooN. shaayad baat Saaf ho jaaYe:
(1) ab is beHc se koyee faa,idah naheeN hai keh shaai'ree ke uSool aur
qaanoon kis ne banaaYe, kab banaaYe aur aise hee kyoN banaaYe? baat yeh
hai keh kuch` uSool seNkRoN saaloN se chale aa rahe haiN aur har shaKhS
un ko maantaa b`ee chalaa aa rahaa hai. aap ko iKhtiyaar hai keh aap un
uSooloN ko nah maaneN yaa un meN tabdeelee kar deN. lekin is ke
nateejah meN aap kee kavitaa woh cheez naheeN reh jaaYe gee jis ke
qaanoon aap ne poore naheeN kiYe aur un meN tabdeelee kee. jaise aap
rubaa,e'e (quatrains) ke uSooloN ko toR kar koyee cheez likh`eN to is
kaa aap ko pooraa Haq hai. albattah woh cheez rubaa,e'e naheeN kahee
jaa saktee hai. us ko koyee aur naam denaa ho gaa. agar aisaa nah kiyaa
gayaa to Umar Khayyaam kee rubaa,e'e kaa aap kyaa kareN ge?
yehee Haal Ghazal kaa hai. is kee zabaan, bayaan, maZ^moon, andaaz alag
hai aur is ke qaanoon alag haiN. is meN radeef hotee hai, qaafiyah
hotaa hai, wazn hotaa hai, beHr hotee hai waGhairah waGhairah. agar aap
in uSooloN ke Khilaaf jaa kar koyee cheez likh`eN ge to us ko :jadeed
Ghazal, aazaad Ghazal, gajal: yaa koyee aur naam to de sakte haiN,
albattah is ko Ghazal naheeN keh sakte haiN! aap kee ma'loomaat ke liYe
bataa dooN keh aisee koshisheN huyee haiN aur ho rhee haiN. logoN ne
:aazaad Ghazal, jadeed Ghazal, Ghazal-e-mua'rraa: waGhairah naamoN se
tajribe kiYe haiN. is meN koyee harj naheeN hai bal.k yeh achh`ee baat
hai. yaad rakh`ne kee yeh baat hai keh in logoN ne bh`ee apnee nayee
kavitaa,oN ko Ghazal naheeN kahaa hai aur keh bh`ee naheeN sakte haiN.
aap ne Hindustanee aur Karnatak music kee jo micaal dee hai woh bohat
mo'tabar (convincing) naheeN hai. mujh` ko to ziyaadah ma'loom naheeN
hai. aap bataaYeN keh kyaa Hindustaanee music South India meN bh`ee
Karnatak music se ziyaadah maqbool hai?
(2) doosraa nuktah (point) aap ne jazbaat kee adaa,igee aur uSooloN kee
paabandee ke saath` likh`ne ke farq par uThaayaa hai. shaai'ree
yaqeena" jazbaat kee adaa,igee kaa hee naam hai:
shaai'ree kyaa hai? dilee jazbaat kaa iz^haar hai
dil agar bekaar hai to shaai'ree bekaar hai (Brij Narain Chakbast
Lucknavi)
jazbah ko sookh`e-saakh`e uSooloN par hameshah hee tarjeeH (preference)
dee jaaYe gee. lekin yeh to bataaiYe keh aaKhir achh`e jazbah ko achh`e
uSooloN kee raushanee meN achh`ee t^araH adaa karne par kyaa e'tiraaZ^
hai?
yeh bh`ee SaHeeH hai keh jab tak shaai'ree meN koyee nayee baat nah ho
us meN mazaa naheeN hai. mushkil yeh hai keh ab shaayad hee koyee aisaa
insaanee jazbah aur Khayaal reh gayaa ho jis ko kisee nah kisee nah
naz^m nah kiyaa ho! is liYe baat aa kar andaaz-e-bayaan par hee ruk
jaatee hai. aur achh`e andaaz-e-bayaan ke liye zabaan aur bayaan kee
achh`ee qaabiliyat kee Z^aroorat hotee hai! jab achh`ee zabaan achh`e
andaaz meN likh`naa naheeN aaYe gaa to voh kisee jazbah ko naye andaaz
meN kaise adaa kare gaa? yaheeN aa kar ta'leem, tarbiyat aur
mut^aali,e' (serious studies) kee ahmiyat ma'loom hotee hai. aap ne
:chaaNd KhoobSoorat hai: aur :chaaNd Khaamosh hai: kaa jo farq
samjh`aayaa hai us se inkaar naheeN hai. lekin aisee dilkash baateN
sochne ke liye bh`ee zabaan achh`ee aanee chaahiYe aur us ko bayaan
karne kaa t^areeqah bh`ee aanaa chaahiYe! aur yeh sab seekh`aa jaataa
hai. koyee seekh`aa-sikh`aayaa paidaa naheeN hotaa hai.
mujh` ko bas yehee kehnaa th`aa. aap se bheNT kar ke bohat aanand
aayaa. sadaa sukh`ee raheN.
Afzal A. Khan
Janaab Amjad Saheb,
Mere KHayaal men Zafar Saheb ka mafhoom yeh tha ke
"Ustaadi-Shaagirdi" ki "rasm" ab bahut puraani ho chukee
aur uske ahya kee ab chandaaN zaroorat naheeN. Ab na to
waise Ustaad haiN na hee shaagird.
Albatta ek baat meri samajh men naheeN aayee. Aap ne kaha
ke Ghalib, Meer aur Daagh ne shaagird banaaye hee kyoN ?
Mere KHayaal men sirf Daagh ke muta'alliq yeh kaha ja sakta
hai ke unhoN ne is rasm ko poori taraah nibaahya. Meer ke
shaagirdoN ka zikr tazkiroN men bahut kam aaya hai. Unke
mashhoor shaagirdoN men kis kis ka naam liya ja sakta hai ?
Aur reh gayee Ghalib kee baat,to mera KHayaal hai ke unheN
kabhee is ka "shauq" naheeN raha. Unke kayee dost the aur
basa~auqaat unkee farmaaish aur darKH(w)aast par who islaah
kar bhee dete the. Lekin un ke KHutoot ke mutaal'e se pata
chalta hai ke unheN yeh zimmedaari pasaNd naheeN thee.
Afzal
Amjad
assalam-o-alaikum
aap ka javaab paRh ker khushi hui.
maiN yahaaN jo kuch bhi likh rahaa hooN us ka maqsad ikhtilaaf baraaye
ikhtilaaf nahiN hai, balke meHz apni raaye ka izhaar hai, jis ka mujhe
poora Haq hai. is liye umeed hai ke meri koi baat bhi aap ko naa.gavaar
nahiN guzre gi :) :)
sab se pehle ghalib ki baat, mujhe aap se ikthilaaf hai ke ghalib
"basaa auqaat" apne dostoN ki islaaH wo bhi unki farmaaish per kiya
karte the.
aisa hargiz nahin hai.Mirza saHib apne dostoN aur shagirdoN ki islaaH
bahot khushi se kiya karte the, aur baaz dostoN ke khat naa aane per to
baqaaida naaraazi ka izhaar karte the.
Mirza ghalib per likhi gayee sab se maa'rika aaraa kitaab
YAADGAAR-E-GHALIB, jis ke musannif ALTAAF HUSSEIN HALI hain, aur ye
kitaab Ghalib per likhi gayee hazaaroN kitaaboN mein sab se mustanad
maani jaait hai.
is kitaab ke safHa number 99 per Altaf Hussein Hali likhte haiN:
"ShagirdoN ki Kasrat
Mirza saHib ke shagird atraaf-e-Hindustaan meiN BAY.SHUMAAR the. In ki
vus'at-e-akhlaaq aur aam razaa jui ne ye daaira bahot vasee' kar diya
tha. jo shaksh in ki ghazal islaaH ke liye bheijta tha, mumkin na tha
ke wo us ke khat ka javaab aur us ki ghazal ki islaaH de kar na
bheijeN. "
(yaadgaar-e-ghalib: P:99)
Umeed hai darj-e-baala ibaarat se ye baat vaazeH ho gayee hogi ke mirza
ke bahot se shagird the :)
Rahi baat Meer ki to ye to sabit hai ke unke shagird the. ab ye baat
alag hai ke unke shagirdoN mein koi baRaa shaair tha ya nahin, aur ye
hamaara muda'aa bhi nahin hai.
Jaun Eliya ke naam se kaun vaaqif nahiN , wo apne pehle majmua-e-kalaam
SHAAYAD ke deebaache meiN farmaate haiN:
"mere baaba ke daada Syed Ameer Hasan Ameer, Urdu aur Farsi dono meiN
she'r kehte the. Syed Ameer Hasan Ameer ke daada Syed Sultan Ahmed,
MEER TAQI MEER ke arshad talaamiza Syed Abdur.Rasool Nisaar Akbar Abadi
ke shagird the" (Shayad: P:14).
Mohtaram Afzal sahib, umeed hai mere ye darj-e-baala "references" aap
ko pasand aaiN ge :)
aap se baat ker ke khushi hui, umeed hai aainda bhi musbat aur
taa'meeri guftagu ka ye silsila jaari rahe ga :)
(va,maa, alaaina, illal.balaaghul Mubeen)
Roshan
...
> 1.. Hamari 'Classical mausiki' ke ab do distinct style haiN;
> 'Hindustani gayaki' aur 'Karnatak gayaki'. Purity k lihaaz se
'Karnatak
> style gayaki' kitabaat maiN darz rules k mutabiq hai jabke
'Hindustani
> style gayaki' main be-shumaar 'aib' haiN. Lekin Hindustaani gayaki
> Karnatak style gayaki se kaheeN jyadah popular hai aur jo aib haiN
unhe
> ab aib na maan kar 'flexibility' bataya jaata hai.
Kala Sb.,
In my perception, this observation of yours is not valid in both its
initial 'assumptions'. But ALUP is not the place for me to dwell on
this. So, though this analogy is flawed in my mind, I think your gist
was that the 'flaws' of one era can very well be the 'rules' of
another, right? Let's just leave it at that then.
cheers,
rosh
Lady Chatterly
Dekh leejiye gaa.
>aap kaa sewak
>Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
C.
--
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"I really need to learn enough about computers to make myself a bot.
LC is just priceless." -- Ryan Lankford
A.Kala
Raz wrote:
> Shriyut Kala SaaHeb: saadar pranaam!
>
> aap kaa Khat^ dekh` kar bohat Khushee huyee. sab se pehle to aap se
yeh
> kehnaa hai keh aap kee Urdu itnee Kharaab naheeN hai jitnee aap
> samajh`te haiN! kaheeN kaheeN Zaraa saa farq hai jo practice se door
ho
> jaaYe gaa. itnaa to maiN keh saktaa hooN keh aap kee Urdu meree Hindi
> se kaheeN behtar hai!
>
> is se pehle
Mohtaram Sarwar Sahab,
Aadaab
qabl iske k maiN aap se ru-ba-ru ho.uN, chaNd lamhe Zafar Sahab par
barsne ke liye istem'aal karne ki izazat chahunga.
Gustakhi muaf, Zafar Sahab, lekin aap ka har khat bahs ka aik naya
morcha khol deta hai. Behtar ho k bahs 'focused' ho yaani pahle aik
mudde ko bhar-pet Thok-baja liya jaaye phir doosre mudde par taaNg
laRiye jaaye...... shukriya ;-)
Hausla-afzaii ka shukriya, lekin mujhe apni urdu ilmiyat ka andaazah
hai, aur kisi bhi Ghalatfahmi ka shikaar nahi huN, phir bhi yeh kah kar
k meri urdu itni kharaab nahi, aap ne aapni 'tolerant' shakhsiyaat ka
aik pahlu ujaagar kiya hai.
dar-asal maiN aap ke jyadaah-tar khayalaat se mutmuin huN jaise k
buniyaadi usooloN par chot nahi ki ja sakti. Yeh yaqeenan sach hai k
agar radeef, qaafiya, wazn etc ko hi na maana jaye to phir Ghazal,
Ghazal hi na rahegi. Lekin ye bhi kahaN ki aklmandi hai k har usool ko
aNkh-muuNd kar apna liya jaaye mahaz is liye k yeh saikRoN saaloN se
chala aa raha hai? Is tarah to maazi ki ghalat rivayateN kabhi bhi
sudhaari na ja sakeNgi.[Aakhir Raja Rammohan Roy ne bhi himmat kar ke
HinduoN ki sadiyoN purani 'Sati' ki rasm ke khilaaf awaaz uthayi thi.
Aur India k musalmanoN ko kya hua k HinduoN ki zahez( dowry) ki saikRon
saal purani magar buri rasm ko apna liya hai aur ab to ye aalam hai ke
baRe shouq se apni bahuoN ko jalaane maiN HinduoN se achcha khasa
competition kar rahe haiN] Ab eet'aa ko hi leN to aik nukhs jo mujhe
nazar aaya us ka zikra kar duN.
eet^aa-e-Khafee ki aik shart aap ne bataii hai k agar kaafiye
Arabi/Farsi ya unke derivaive hoN to 'aib' maana jaata varna aib nahi
hota. Ye baat to mere zehn ko aasaani se qabul na hogi. Aakhir eet'aa
k usool Ghazal ki 'readability' aur 'resonance' paida karne k lihaaz se
hi to banaye gaye haiN. Phir kaise farq paRta hai k kaafiya arabi/farsi
ka ho ya kissi doosre origin ka? Yahaan to lafzoN ki sound quality hi
farq paida karegi na k 'meaning' chahe koii bhi origin ho!
Aap ki b'aaqi tamaam daleeleN manzoor hain, sirf ye ke 'ab shaayad hee
koyee aisaa insaanee jazbah aur Khayaal reh gayaa ho jis ko kisee nah
kisee nah naz^m nah kiyaa ho!' yeh kah kar aap bhaari bhool kar raheN.
Aik waaqia yaad aata hai; san 1938 ( not sure) ki baat hai, Bell
Laboratories ke Chief Scientific Officer( aik famous sciencedaaN, naam
yaad nahi) ne yeh kah kar isteefah de diya tha k kamobesh sabhii
sadeed izaadaat ho chuki haiN aur ab Bell Labs ko bhi apna boriya
bistar samet lena chahiye. Sochiye jara k chaNd barsoN hi b'aad TV aur
mukhtalif dosre inventions wazood maiN aaye, inhe muNh chupane ki jagah
na mili hogi.
'chote muNh baRi baat kah gaya' huN to m'aafi chahata huN khaas taur
par Zafar sahab se :-))
aapne poocha tha k kya Hindustani style gayaki South India main bhi
maqbool hai! to uska golmaal jawab Roshan Sahab se mukhatib ho kar
neeche darj kiya hai :-))
aap se guftagu kar ke kaafi kuch seekhne ko mila aur kuch demaghi
kasrat bhi ho gayi.
khaaq saar
A.Kala
P.S. :
1.. Bahs agar khule dimaaG se na ho to kisi bhi nateejeh ki umeed nahi.
Aksar bahs karne waale 'conclusion' pahle tai karlete haiN aur daleel
us tai nateejeh ko lekar di jaati na k saamnewala kya kah raha us par
gaur kar ke. Aur aik baat gaur karne waali hai k har sawaal ka jawab
'black aur white' maiN nahi hota. mera ishaara 'ustaad-shagird' k mauzu
ki taraf hai.
2.. Roshan Sahab maine 'popular' lafz istem'aal kiya hai, gaur kareN
'popular' aur 'better' synonyms nahi haiN aur ye to aap maaneNge k
'Hindustaani gayaki' k diggaj ustaadoN ki aik baRi t'aadad Karnatak se
ubhari hai, maslan Bhimsen Joshi, Shobha Gurtu, Gangubai Hangal,
Mallikarjun Mansoor etc. rahi baat doosre assumption( Karnatka gayaki
is purer than Hindustani gayaki) to usmaiN juda raaye rakhne ka aap ko
poora haq akhtyaar hai ;-))