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Rotii ka intizaam to Nazir kar ga'ay thay ab saalan liijay

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bekas Murray

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Mar 28, 2017, 4:14:13 PM3/28/17
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voh teri-mirii pahli mulaaqaat ka saalan
luqmaat ki halchal thi, hai kyaa baat ka saalan

hoNToN pe larazte huye be-rabt se lukme
aaNkhoN meN dil-aavez, ishaa, raat ka saalan

chehre se numaayaaN ka’ee mirchoN ki ziyaa’eN
haathoN pe daraKhshaaN shab-e-baaraat ka saalan

murghoN ki siyaahii thi k ganghor ghaTaayeN
jaltaa hu’a paikar tha k kal raat ka saalan

voh mast-ravii meN kayee kotaahi ke pahluu
voh neem-nigaahii meN Kharaab aaj ka saalan

voh champa’ii custard, voh baingan ka pakoRaa
ambaar kalaakand kay, chanay chaat ka saalan

voh merii madhaani pe tiraa jheNp sa jaanaa
voh ras main malaa'ii! ajii kis baat ka saalan?


thaalii pe sajay aam meN madhosh adaa’eN
voh ras ke junuuN thaa k sharaabaat ka saalan?

go baat adhuurii thi: na puurii thi na halwa
par chhaa hi gayaa saahibo aachaar ka saalan

vij...@gmail.com

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Apr 9, 2017, 6:40:08 AM4/9/17
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bohat Khuub Bekas sahib. aap kii 'Ghazal' 'parody' bhii hai aur Khiraaj-e-aqqidat bhii! jaise Anwar Masood ki yih waali naz'm:

voh jo doodh shahd kii khiir thii
voh jo narm misl-e-hariir thii
voh jo aamle kaa achaar thaa
voh jo ham meN tum meN qaraar thaa
tumheN yaad ho ki na yaad ho!

aap kii koshish pasaNd aaii. mubaarak!

Best regards,

Vijay

Raj Kumar

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Apr 9, 2017, 7:24:49 PM4/9/17
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On Sunday, April 9, 2017 at 3:40:08 AM UTC-7, vij...@gmail.com wrote:
> On Wednesday, 29 March 2017 09:14:13 UTC+13, bekas Murray wrote:

> > voh teri-mirii pahli mulaaqaat ka saalan
> > luqmaat ki halchal thi, hai kyaa baat ka saalan
> >
> > hoNToN pe larazte huye be-rabt se lukme
> > aaNkhoN meN dil-aavez, ishaa, raat ka saalan
> >
> > chehre se numaayaaN ka’ee mirchoN ki ziyaa’eN
> > haathoN pe daraKhshaaN shab-e-baaraat ka saalan
> >
> > murghoN ki siyaahii thi k ganghor ghaTaayeN
> > jaltaa hu’a paikar tha k kal raat ka saalan
> >
> > voh mast-ravii meN kayee kotaahi ke pahluu
> > voh neem-nigaahii meN Kharaab aaj ka saalan
> >
> > voh champa’ii custard, voh baingan ka pakoRaa
> > ambaar kalaakand kay, chanay chaat ka saalan
> >
> > voh merii madhaani pe tiraa jheNp sa jaanaa
> > voh ras main malaa'ii! ajii kis baat ka saalan?
> >
> > thaalii pe sajay aam meN madhosh adaa’eN
> > voh ras ke junuuN thaa k sharaabaat ka saalan?
> >
> > go baat adhuurii thi: na puurii thi na halwa
> > par chhaa hi gayaa saahibo aachaar ka saalan

> bohat Khuub Bekas sahib. aap kii 'Ghazal' 'parody' bhii hai aur Khiraaj-e-aqiidat bhii! jaise Anwar Masood ki yih waali naz'm:

> voh jo doodh shahd kii khiir thii
> voh jo narm misl-e-hariir thii
> voh jo aamle kaa achaar thaa
> voh jo ham meN tum meN qaraar thaa
> tumheN yaad ho ki na yaad ho!
>
> aap kii koshish pasaNd aaii. mubaarak!
>
> Best regards,
>
> Vijay

***janaab Vijay sahib:

janaab-e-Bekas ka kalaam-e-Khush-Khiraam paRh kar, laboN par be-saaKhta yeh du’aa a’ii k

“Bekas” pe karam keejiye, sarkaar-e-madeena
chhuTne ko hai is mard-e-mujaahid ka paseena
bhejo ise har roz lahaktaa hu’aa saalan
taa-k ise aasaan ho “har roz ka jeena”! :)

mazaaq bar-taraf, kyaa hi baat hoti agar unhoN ne mere maqt’e ko yuuN kahaa hotaa:

“go paas kachaurii thi, na puurii thi, na Halva
par chhaa gayaa Bekas pe “munaajaat ka saalan”!

I hope Bekas sahib gives his parody a little more thought! ☺

du’aa-go, Raj Kumar***

vij...@gmail.com

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Apr 10, 2017, 5:53:41 AM4/10/17
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On Monday, 10 April 2017 11:24:49 UTC+12, Raj Kumar wrote:
> “go paas kachaurii thi, na puurii thi, na Halva
> par chhaa gayaa Bekas pe “munaajaat ka saalan”!
>
> I hope Bekas sahib gives his parody a little more thought! ☺
>
> du’aa-go, Raj Kumar***

Raj sahib: munaajaat ke ma'ani bata deN, meharbaani. mujhe yih lafz (manajat) ba-taur ma'ane 'recital' ya 'prayer' hii ma'aluum hai.

aap ki 'parody' kii 'parody bhii pasaNd aaii, lekin mere nazdiik pahla misra jaise Bekas sahib ne likkha hai, voh bhii qaabil-e-taariif hai.

'go baat adhuurii thii: na puurii thii na halva'

jis tarah se lafz 'puurii' ka ta'alluq 'adhuurii' se bhii hai, aur halve se bhii, yih istemaal mujhe zaati taur pe pasaNd aaya. And 'halva-puurii' is a complete dish; there is no room for kachaurii here:-) Further more, the first eight ninth of the misra is yours, with only change seen in the punctuation. I feel it is quite a brilliant play on words: just changing one (the last) word and the use of a colon changing the context completely.

Best regards,

Vijay







Raj Kumar

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Apr 10, 2017, 6:48:18 PM4/10/17
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On Monday, April 10, 2017 at 2:53:41 AM UTC-7, vij...@gmail.com wrote:

Raj sahib: munaajaat ke ma'ani bataa deN, meharbaani. mujhe yih lafz (manajat) ba-taur ma'ane 'recital' ya 'prayer' hii ma'aluum hai.

***janaab-e-man, yeh lafz ain vuhii hai jis ki taraf aap ne ishaara kiyaa hai --- goyaa, prayer, supplication, etc.

albatta, is lafz ka saHeeH talaffuz ain vuhii hai jo maiN ne likkhaa thaa ---- namely, “munaajaat”, with a ‘pesh’ on the letter ‘meem’!***

aap ki 'parody' kii 'parody bhii pasaNd aaii, lekin mere nazdiik pahla misra jaise Bekas sahib ne likkha hai, voh bhii qaabil-e-taariif hai.

***yaqeeeeenan -------- magar yeh kyaa k aap to meri aek halki-phulki baat par jii-jaan kho baiThe! ☹

Huzuur, mera matlab to faqat yeh thaa k agar ham kisii duusre shaKhs ke kalaam ki tazmeen kareN to kam-az-kam kuchh bunyaadi baatoN ka Khayaal bhi to rakkheN. chuuN-k Bekas sahib ne, mere maqt’e ki tazmeen karte huye, mere qaafiye ko “aachaar” se badal diyaa thaa, to yeh baat mujhe kisii Had tak khaTkii aur maiN ne us qaafiye ko “munaajaat” se badal diyaa!

In any case, my post was all in jest, Vijay sahib, magar aap to naaHaq baariikiyoN meN ulajh gaye, jis ka nateeja yeh hu’aa k

badlaa jo qaafiyah to voh nam-deedah ho gaye
goyaa, zaraa si baat pe raNjeedah ho gaye ;)

du’aa-go, Raj Kumar***

bekas Murray

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May 10, 2017, 7:38:17 PM5/10/17
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shukriyaa Vijay sahab.

> Best regards,
>
> Vijay

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