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Karen Tellefsen
Apr 17, 2021, 11:29:16 AM4/17/21
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The Lost Earrings
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Oh dear, I can't find my new earrings
a gift from my lover so true.
T'was hoping he'd visit a fortnight from now.
Oh, mercy me, what shall I do.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
On Tuesday you put them in water,
you must have forgotten them there.
You drank the glass down Wednesday morning
while I was arranging your hair.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
Why didn't you tell me I drank them?
I tried, but you just wouldn't listen
in a rush to run off to a party
to dance and watch pretty men glisten.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
I poked through you pot every morning,
but nary an earring I spied.
I think that you lost them forever,
and you know that I never would lie.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
Maybe millennia later
a brave archeologist finds them
cunningly hidden in a coprolite midden,
then writes a book on your gem
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
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Oh dear, I can't find my new earrings
a gift from my lover so true.
T'was hoping he'd visit a fortnight from now.
Oh, mercy me, what shall I do.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
On Tuesday you put them in water,
you must have forgotten them there.
You drank the glass down Wednesday morning
while I was arranging your hair.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
Why didn't you tell me I drank them?
I tried, but you just wouldn't listen
in a rush to run off to a party
to dance and watch pretty men glisten.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
I poked through you pot every morning,
but nary an earring I spied.
I think that you lost them forever,
and you know that I never would lie.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
Maybe millennia later
a brave archeologist finds them
cunningly hidden in a coprolite midden,
then writes a book on your gem
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
those little gold earrings you love.
Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
the ones in the shape of a dove.
Zod
Apr 17, 2021, 11:32:03 AM4/17/21
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Ash Wurthing
Apr 18, 2021, 3:48:19 AM4/18/21
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Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
Will Dockery
Apr 18, 2021, 4:41:23 AM4/18/21
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On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 3:48:19 AM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
>
> Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
>
> Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
That's a surprise, I thought you were well read, Ash.
>
> Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
>
> Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
Ilya Shambat
Apr 18, 2021, 5:12:18 AM4/18/21
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Karen Tellefsen
Apr 18, 2021, 6:56:30 AM4/18/21
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On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 3:48:19 AM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
> Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
>
> Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
"Madam, you shat them in Chatham" just came to me. The rest took a little work, mostly while I was having a little trouble sleeping.
>
> Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
ME
Apr 18, 2021, 7:02:52 AM4/18/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 18, 2021, 7:19:45 AM4/18/21
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:)
W-Dockery
Apr 18, 2021, 1:18:04 PM4/18/21
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W-Dockery
Apr 18, 2021, 4:28:04 PM4/18/21
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With England being hit so hard by the pandemic and with PJR not posting here since last October, I'm starting to wonder, and, yes, worry about his condition.
George J. Dance
Apr 18, 2021, 6:37:45 PM4/18/21
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On Saturday, April 17, 2021 at 11:29:16 AM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
I doubt this is something you're going to be working on, or putting in a later book (assuming you do put out another book). I think for you the fun was in the writing. However, in case you do decide to work on it in future:
1) It's definitely a song, waiting to be set to music; the tune that popped into my head was the one from "A lady was washing her baby..." It also has an 18th-century feel to it; very refined, but not too refined to talk shit.
1) Your chorus is very good; well, the 'love' / 'dove' lines are just better than average, but they're overshadowed by your wonderful refrain. Your choice of amphibrachs was good, as an amphibrach almost always signals humor - and you use them very skillfully, rhyming all the stressed syllables. There's still room to tighten it a bit - I'd suggest you use "shat 'em", as it makes the internal rhymes stronger, and I'd like a filler syllable at the beginning: "But, Madam," "Yes, Madam, " "Oh, Madam" etc. - but it's very effective as is.
2) The verses tell the story, and that's all they have to do; but since it is a song, I'd suggest making the meter more uniform. Verse 1 has an extra foot in L3 - fine, and even a good thing, in a song, but you don't repeat that in the following verses. And in the final verse your meter goes to hell - every line's a different meter - and your rhyme is atrocious. I suspect, though, that your intent there was just to get the story written down, just to give us that refrain; and you succeeded in that. If that was your only purpose - to have some momentary fun, and amuse others by sharing a humorous line - you accomplished it in full.
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 18, 2021, 7:02:59 PM4/18/21
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I probably should send this to him; it's silly scatological nonsense. I sent it to a friend who sings satirical songs for fun, and I'm sending it to a friend who is a musician who can set it to music. She probably won't sing it at her historical park gigs, she does a good job on the "Dog's Meeting"
https://monologues.co.uk/Anonymous/Doggies_Meeting.htm
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 18, 2021, 7:07:28 PM4/18/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 6:25:30 AM4/19/21
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> I probably should send this to him; it's silly scatological nonsense. I sent it to a friend who sings satirical songs for fun, and I'm sending it to a friend who is a musician who can set it to music. She probably won't sing it at her historical park gigs, she does a good job on the "Dog's Meeting"
> https://monologues.co.uk/Anonymous/Doggies_Meeting.htm
:)
Zod
Apr 19, 2021, 10:27:55 AM4/19/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 3:15:06 PM4/19/21
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:)
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 19, 2021, 5:18:21 PM4/19/21
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However, I think he is well and concentrating his effort on better things than aapc and trolling.
Will Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 5:21:07 PM4/19/21
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On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 5:18:21 PM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 3:15:06 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
> > On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 10:27:55 AM UTC-4, Zod wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 3:15:06 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
> > On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 10:27:55 AM UTC-4, Zod wrote:
:)
Hieronymous Corey
Apr 19, 2021, 5:22:23 PM4/19/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 5:29:58 PM4/19/21
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On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 5:22:23 PM UTC-4, Hieronymous Corey wrote:
I expect Karen knows that.
Hieronymous Corey
Apr 19, 2021, 5:31:59 PM4/19/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 5:58:55 PM4/19/21
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Hieronymous Corey
Apr 19, 2021, 6:20:25 PM4/19/21
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W.Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 6:56:03 PM4/19/21
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:)
ME
Apr 19, 2021, 9:02:52 PM4/19/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 9:04:35 PM4/19/21
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:)
ME
Apr 19, 2021, 9:08:30 PM4/19/21
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W.Dockery
Apr 19, 2021, 10:00:05 PM4/19/21
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ME wrote:
>
> I hope you’re driving!!!
Why would that matter to you?
>
> I hope you’re driving!!!
ME
Apr 19, 2021, 11:45:09 PM4/19/21
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I don’t drive a vehicle with a false registration.
That’s enough for today. I’m calling it a night.
I’ve got a road trip tomorrow.
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 20, 2021, 6:36:55 AM4/20/21
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Karen Tellefsen
Apr 20, 2021, 6:41:58 AM4/20/21
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Shut up Will, you've caused yourself enough trouble.
W-Dockery
Apr 20, 2021, 6:48:04 AM4/20/21
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ME
Apr 20, 2021, 6:49:46 AM4/20/21
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He’s dug himself a big hole this time.
W-Dockery
Apr 20, 2021, 6:56:04 AM4/20/21
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Hieronymous Corey
Apr 20, 2021, 7:02:03 AM4/20/21
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I would, however, say that I am very jealous of
your shitty doggerel, because that’s how I am.
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 20, 2021, 7:29:32 AM4/20/21
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Hieronymous Corey
Apr 20, 2021, 7:45:25 AM4/20/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 20, 2021, 9:21:59 AM4/20/21
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:)
Hieronymous Corey
Apr 20, 2021, 10:25:48 AM4/20/21
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If you smelled me now, you’d know.
I smell lame, need a shower, and I
am not afraid to admit it. So there.
Zod
Apr 20, 2021, 5:18:52 PM4/20/21
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On Tuesday, April 20, 2021 at 7:29:32 AM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> On Tuesday, April 20, 2021 at 7:02:03 AM UTC-4, Hieronymous Corey wrote:
> On Tuesday, April 20, 2021 at 7:02:03 AM UTC-4, Hieronymous Corey wrote:
Will Dockery
Apr 21, 2021, 11:36:02 AM4/21/21
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On Tuesday, April 20, 2021 at 10:25:48 AM UTC-4, Hieronymous Corey wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 6:56:03 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
> > Hieronymous Corey wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 6:56:03 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
> > Hieronymous Corey wrote:
>
> > >> > > Hope so, I like PETER....
> > >> > The trolls will have a field day with that one.
> > >> >
> > >> > :)
> > >> I think it is interesting that both of you expressed concern for PJR; he has not been gentle with his distain for you.
> > >>
> > >> However, I think he is well and concentrating his effort on better things than aapc and trolling.
> > >
> > > The word is disdain.
> > Spell lame much, Corey?
> >
> > :)
> No, I smell lame. I don’t spell lame.
> If you smelled me now, you’d know.
> I smell lame, need a shower, and I
> am not afraid to admit it. So there.
T.M.I. :)
> > >> > > Hope so, I like PETER....
> > >> > The trolls will have a field day with that one.
> > >> >
> > >> > :)
> > >> I think it is interesting that both of you expressed concern for PJR; he has not been gentle with his distain for you.
> > >>
> > >> However, I think he is well and concentrating his effort on better things than aapc and trolling.
> > >
> > > The word is disdain.
> > Spell lame much, Corey?
> >
> > :)
> No, I smell lame. I don’t spell lame.
> If you smelled me now, you’d know.
> I smell lame, need a shower, and I
> am not afraid to admit it. So there.
Will Dockery
Apr 22, 2021, 8:17:23 AM4/22/21
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On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 6:37:45 PM UTC-4, George J. Dance wrote:
> As they used to say on Monty Python, it's frightfully silly. But it was a good read.
>
> I doubt this is something you're going to be working on, or putting in a later book (assuming you do put out another book). I think for you the fun was in the writing. However, in case you do decide to work on it in future:
>
> 1) It's definitely a song, waiting to be set to music; the tune that popped into my head was the one from "A lady was washing her baby..." It also has an 18th-century feel to it; very refined, but not too refined to talk shit.
>
> 1) Your chorus is very good; well, the 'love' / 'dove' lines are just better than average, but they're overshadowed by your wonderful refrain. Your choice of amphibrachs was good, as an amphibrach almost always signals humor - and you use them very skillfully, rhyming all the stressed syllables. There's still room to tighten it a bit - I'd suggest you use "shat 'em", as it makes the internal rhymes stronger, and I'd like a filler syllable at the beginning: "But, Madam," "Yes, Madam, " "Oh, Madam" etc. - but it's very effective as is.
>
> 2) The verses tell the story, and that's all they have to do; but since it is a song, I'd suggest making the meter more uniform. Verse 1 has an extra foot in L3 - fine, and even a good thing, in a song, but you don't repeat that in the following verses. And in the final verse your meter goes to hell - every line's a different meter - and your rhyme is atrocious. I suspect, though, that your intent there was just to get the story written down, just to give us that refrain; and you succeeded in that. If that was your only purpose - to have some momentary fun, and amuse others by sharing a humorous line - you accomplished it in full.
Well put, George.
>
> I doubt this is something you're going to be working on, or putting in a later book (assuming you do put out another book). I think for you the fun was in the writing. However, in case you do decide to work on it in future:
>
> 1) It's definitely a song, waiting to be set to music; the tune that popped into my head was the one from "A lady was washing her baby..." It also has an 18th-century feel to it; very refined, but not too refined to talk shit.
>
> 1) Your chorus is very good; well, the 'love' / 'dove' lines are just better than average, but they're overshadowed by your wonderful refrain. Your choice of amphibrachs was good, as an amphibrach almost always signals humor - and you use them very skillfully, rhyming all the stressed syllables. There's still room to tighten it a bit - I'd suggest you use "shat 'em", as it makes the internal rhymes stronger, and I'd like a filler syllable at the beginning: "But, Madam," "Yes, Madam, " "Oh, Madam" etc. - but it's very effective as is.
>
> 2) The verses tell the story, and that's all they have to do; but since it is a song, I'd suggest making the meter more uniform. Verse 1 has an extra foot in L3 - fine, and even a good thing, in a song, but you don't repeat that in the following verses. And in the final verse your meter goes to hell - every line's a different meter - and your rhyme is atrocious. I suspect, though, that your intent there was just to get the story written down, just to give us that refrain; and you succeeded in that. If that was your only purpose - to have some momentary fun, and amuse others by sharing a humorous line - you accomplished it in full.
Well put, George.
Zod
Apr 22, 2021, 6:18:00 PM4/22/21
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Ash Wurthing
Apr 22, 2021, 6:31:32 PM4/22/21
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Marking this as a good commentary thread, now that I finally saw GD's commentary from Sat.
I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
Zod
Apr 22, 2021, 6:38:04 PM4/22/21
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Ash Wurthing wrote:
>
> Marking this as a good commentary thread, now that I finally saw GD's commentary from Sat.
> I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
George Dance is top shelf, after all....
>
> Marking this as a good commentary thread, now that I finally saw GD's commentary from Sat.
> I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 22, 2021, 6:43:25 PM4/22/21
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On Thursday, April 22, 2021 at 6:31:32 PM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
> Marking this as a good commentary thread, now that I finally saw GD's commentary from Sat.
>
> I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
George's critique was spot on. Now I have to clean this thing up.
> Marking this as a good commentary thread, now that I finally saw GD's commentary from Sat.
>
> I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
Will Dockery
Apr 22, 2021, 7:41:59 PM4/22/21
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ME
Apr 22, 2021, 7:51:37 PM4/22/21
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But he’s made some questionable decisions as far as putting his name on things.
Will Dockery
Apr 22, 2021, 8:13:24 PM4/22/21
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ME
Apr 22, 2021, 8:16:03 PM4/22/21
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He edited your dribble and paid for it.
I rest my case.
Will Dockery
Apr 22, 2021, 8:17:17 PM4/22/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 23, 2021, 12:51:15 AM4/23/21
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On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 5:18:21 PM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 3:15:06 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
> > On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 10:27:55 AM UTC-4, Zod wrote:
> > > On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 7:02:59 PM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 3:15:06 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
> > On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 10:27:55 AM UTC-4, Zod wrote:
> > > On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 7:02:59 PM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> > > Hope so, I like PETER....
> > The trolls will have a field day with that one.
> >
> > :)
> I think it is interesting that both of you expressed concern for PJR; he has not been gentle with his distain for you.
>
> However, I think he is well and concentrating his effort on better things than aapc and trolling.
That's good.
> > The trolls will have a field day with that one.
> >
> > :)
> I think it is interesting that both of you expressed concern for PJR; he has not been gentle with his distain for you.
>
> However, I think he is well and concentrating his effort on better things than aapc and trolling.
:)
Zod
Apr 23, 2021, 5:16:17 PM4/23/21
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On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 5:18:21 PM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 3:15:06 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
> On Monday, April 19, 2021 at 3:15:06 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
Is he doing okay...?
General Zod
Apr 26, 2021, 8:09:02 PM4/26/21
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Ash Wurthing
Apr 27, 2021, 12:49:27 AM4/27/21
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On Monday, April 26, 2021 at 8:09:02 PM UTC-4, genera...@gmail.com wrote:
> Second read, great...
Second read and still no meaningful commentary, come on... (everyone stay out of this)
Give me something worthwhile to add to the official commentary thread. I just have ktell and GD's at the moment.
> Second read, great...
Second read and still no meaningful commentary, come on... (everyone stay out of this)
Give me something worthwhile to add to the official commentary thread. I just have ktell and GD's at the moment.
Will Dockery
Apr 27, 2021, 3:15:15 AM4/27/21
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On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 6:56:30 AM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 3:48:19 AM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
>
> > Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
> >
> > Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
> "Madam, you shat them in Chatham" just came to me. The rest took a little work, mostly while I was having a little trouble sleeping.
Unexpected inspiration, you never know when the muse will call one in.
:)
> On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 3:48:19 AM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
>
> > Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
> >
> > Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
> "Madam, you shat them in Chatham" just came to me. The rest took a little work, mostly while I was having a little trouble sleeping.
Unexpected inspiration, you never know when the muse will call one in.
:)
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 27, 2021, 6:48:55 AM4/27/21
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Michael Pendragon
Apr 27, 2021, 8:34:59 AM4/27/21
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It's an enjoyable piece of light verse. It makes for a pleasant distraction, but lacks any big laughs and a solid punchline.
NancyGene
Apr 27, 2021, 8:45:29 AM4/27/21
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NancyGene
Apr 27, 2021, 12:26:33 PM4/27/21
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On Saturday, April 17, 2021 at 3:29:16 PM UTC, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
> The Lost Earrings
> -----------------------------
>
> Oh dear, I can't find my new earrings
> a gift from my lover so true.
> T'was hoping he'd visit a fortnight from now.
> Oh, mercy me, what shall I do.
>
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
We assume that your maid is replying?
> The Lost Earrings
> -----------------------------
>
> Oh dear, I can't find my new earrings
> a gift from my lover so true.
> T'was hoping he'd visit a fortnight from now.
> Oh, mercy me, what shall I do.
>
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
>
> On Tuesday you put them in water,
> you must have forgotten them there.
> You drank the glass down Wednesday morning
> while I was arranging your hair.
Not sure why she would put the earrings in water? Handy MacGuffin, though.
> On Tuesday you put them in water,
> you must have forgotten them there.
> You drank the glass down Wednesday morning
> while I was arranging your hair.
>
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
Charles Dickens spent some time in Chatham—perhaps he would know?
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
>
> Why didn't you tell me I drank them?
> I tried, but you just wouldn't listen
> in a rush to run off to a party
> to dance and watch pretty men glisten.
We do love a ball! Our dance cards are always full—waltzes and country dances.
> Why didn't you tell me I drank them?
> I tried, but you just wouldn't listen
> in a rush to run off to a party
> to dance and watch pretty men glisten.
>
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
We would prefer a slight variation in the words in each refrain, but that’s just us.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
>
> I poked through you pot every morning,
“your” pot.
> I poked through you pot every morning,
> but nary an earring I spied.
> I think that you lost them forever,
> and you know that I never would lie.
>
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
Possibly the maid protests too much.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
>
> Maybe millennia later
> a brave archeologist finds them
archaeologist
> Maybe millennia later
> a brave archeologist finds them
> cunningly hidden in a coprolite midden,
> then writes a book on your gem
>
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
Again, we would like a variation in each refrain, which would give you the punch line that Michael says is needed. We think that the maid took them from the glass, and the explanation that The Lady swallowed them is a cover-up.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
Clever poem, atmospheric/Regency. We can see why the shat and Chatham line would inspire you!
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 27, 2021, 4:19:51 PM4/27/21
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I like your conclusion that the maid stole the earrings; her father's in debtors' prison and miserable.
Zod
Apr 27, 2021, 4:32:08 PM4/27/21
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On Tuesday, April 27, 2021 at 12:49:27 AM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
Ash Wurthing
Apr 27, 2021, 6:58:41 PM4/27/21
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NancyGene
Apr 27, 2021, 7:16:20 PM4/27/21
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> Between you and George, I have enough comment to clean this up a bit.
We are not sure that George's commentary helped very much, but that's up to you.
>
> I like your conclusion that the maid stole the earrings; her father's in debtors' prison and miserable.
Yes, definitely the maid did it. Perhaps her father was conscripted into the navy and left a wife and eleven kids. Jobs are hard to come by for illiterate young people. Always lock up your jewelry.
> I like your conclusion that the maid stole the earrings; her father's in debtors' prison and miserable.
We think also that the "lover so true" has skipped off, leaving her "seduced and abandoned." He might have bribed the maid to recover the earrings so that he could give them to his new spinster heiress.
Ash Wurthing
Apr 27, 2021, 8:05:56 PM4/27/21
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On Tuesday, April 27, 2021 at 7:16:20 PM UTC-4, NancyGene wrote:
> Ash is never satisfied!
I might be somewhat now that I have Pendragon and NG' commentary as well.
> > I like your conclusion that the maid stole the earrings; her father's in debtors' prison and miserable.
> Yes, definitely the maid did it. Perhaps her father was conscripted into the navy and left a wife and eleven kids. Jobs are hard to come by for illiterate young people. Always lock up your jewelry.
>
> We think also that the "lover so true" has skipped off, leaving her "seduced and abandoned." He might have bribed the maid to recover the earrings so that he could give them to his new spinster heiress.
This Agatha Christie angle has caught my interest.
> Ash is never satisfied!
I might be somewhat now that I have Pendragon and NG' commentary as well.
> > I like your conclusion that the maid stole the earrings; her father's in debtors' prison and miserable.
> Yes, definitely the maid did it. Perhaps her father was conscripted into the navy and left a wife and eleven kids. Jobs are hard to come by for illiterate young people. Always lock up your jewelry.
>
> We think also that the "lover so true" has skipped off, leaving her "seduced and abandoned." He might have bribed the maid to recover the earrings so that he could give them to his new spinster heiress.
Zod
Apr 27, 2021, 8:08:41 PM4/27/21
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General Zod
Apr 28, 2021, 6:03:51 PM4/28/21
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On Sunday, April 18, 2021 at 3:48:19 AM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
> Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
>
> Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
Agreed...
> Damned ktell, and you say your pieces "just happen"? I don't know if I'm convinced-- train wrecks just happen not poetry...
>
> Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
Ash Wurthing
Apr 28, 2021, 6:52:55 PM4/28/21
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Will Dockery
Apr 28, 2021, 8:14:54 PM4/28/21
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Just think, if you weren't on his gang he'd harass you all day to make "meaningful commentary" "well learned in poetry" or not.
Thank goodness for double standards and hypocrisy, right?
:)
Ash Wurthing
Apr 28, 2021, 8:51:14 PM4/28/21
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Edward Rochester Esq.
Apr 28, 2021, 8:56:54 PM4/28/21
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In the beginning, he tested the waters, Let's see what category this Ash falls into, and soon it was known, another on the gang he opposes.
Dry Drunk kicks in, another to point a fat finger at.
Ash be damned, right Zod?
Will Dockery
Apr 28, 2021, 8:57:05 PM4/28/21
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On Wednesday, April 28, 2021 at 8:51:14 PM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
> On Wednesday, April 28, 2021 at 8:14:54 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
>
> > > > > Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
> > > > Agreed...
> > > Don't tell me, you're agreeing that I'm not well learned, right?
> > As you can see, that's no excuse to Pendragon. Just think, if you weren't on his gang he'd harass you all day to make "meaningful commentary" "well learned in poetry" or not. Thank goodness for double standards and hypocrisy, right?
>
> Excuse me, the question was
I saw the question and I answered it for you... you picked the right gang, Pendragon will back you up, right or wrong.
> On Wednesday, April 28, 2021 at 8:14:54 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
>
> > > > > Sorry for no meaningful commentary, but I have an excuse-- I'm not well learned in poetry.
> > > > Agreed...
> > > Don't tell me, you're agreeing that I'm not well learned, right?
> > As you can see, that's no excuse to Pendragon. Just think, if you weren't on his gang he'd harass you all day to make "meaningful commentary" "well learned in poetry" or not. Thank goodness for double standards and hypocrisy, right?
>
> Excuse me, the question was
:)
Will Dockery
Apr 28, 2021, 9:01:28 PM4/28/21
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On Wednesday, April 28, 2021 at 8:56:54 PM UTC-4, Edward Rochester Esq. wrote:
>
> He dislikes you for our friendship
No, Senetto, just pointing out the double standards and hypocrisy your gang practice.
>
> He dislikes you for our friendship
But what should we expect from you, a control freak on an ego trip?
:)
NancyGene
Apr 29, 2021, 6:24:46 AM4/29/21
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"Hey, you guys." This is ktell's poem thread. Comment on the poem.
Karen Tellefsen
Apr 29, 2021, 7:03:55 AM4/29/21
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On Thursday, April 29, 2021 at 6:24:46 AM UTC-4, NancyGene wrote:
> "Hey, you guys." This is ktell's poem thread. Comment on the poem.
Thanks NG.
> "Hey, you guys." This is ktell's poem thread. Comment on the poem.
Hey yous guys, fight on your own threads. I'm scolding both sides, quit it.
Will Dockery
Apr 29, 2021, 7:05:41 AM4/29/21
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On Thursday, April 22, 2021 at 6:43:25 PM UTC-4, ktell...@gmail.com wrote:
Back to the poem.
:)
> On Thursday, April 22, 2021 at 6:31:32 PM UTC-4, Ash Wurthing wrote:
>
> > Marking this as a good commentary thread, now that I finally saw GD's commentary from Sat.
> >
> > I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
>
> George's critique was spot on. Now I have to clean this thing up.
>
> > Marking this as a good commentary thread, now that I finally saw GD's commentary from Sat.
> >
> > I'll probably make a second more formal thread of this for a commentary thread filter-- just ktell's poem and GD's commentary, leaving out the rest of the commentaries (including my own), so to focus on the best commentary.
>
Back to the poem.
:)
Will Dockery
Apr 29, 2021, 9:21:37 AM4/29/21
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General-Zod
May 6, 2021, 7:42:04 PM5/6/21
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Karen Tellefsen wrote:
>
> The Lost Earrings
> -----------------------------
> Oh dear, I can't find my new earrings
> a gift from my lover so true.
> T'was hoping he'd visit a fortnight from now.
> Oh, mercy me, what shall I do.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
>
> The Lost Earrings
> -----------------------------
> Oh dear, I can't find my new earrings
> a gift from my lover so true.
> T'was hoping he'd visit a fortnight from now.
> Oh, mercy me, what shall I do.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
> On Tuesday you put them in water,
> you must have forgotten them there.
> You drank the glass down Wednesday morning
> while I was arranging your hair.
> you must have forgotten them there.
> You drank the glass down Wednesday morning
> while I was arranging your hair.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
> Why didn't you tell me I drank them?
> I tried, but you just wouldn't listen
> in a rush to run off to a party
> to dance and watch pretty men glisten.
> I tried, but you just wouldn't listen
> in a rush to run off to a party
> to dance and watch pretty men glisten.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
> I poked through you pot every morning,
> but nary an earring I spied.
> I think that you lost them forever,
> and you know that I never would lie.
> I think that you lost them forever,
> and you know that I never would lie.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
> Maybe millennia later
> a brave archeologist finds them
> a brave archeologist finds them
> cunningly hidden in a coprolite midden,
> then writes a book on your gem
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
Having another read.......... hilarious, Karen...!!
> those little gold earrings you love.
> Madam, you shat them in Chatham,
> the ones in the shape of a dove.
Ash Wurthing
May 6, 2021, 8:48:25 PM5/6/21
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But officially, marking this thread
SRC: Commentary example thread
Will Dockery
May 6, 2021, 9:36:33 PM5/6/21
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ME
May 7, 2021, 4:49:00 PM5/7/21
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Will Dockery
May 7, 2021, 4:51:04 PM5/7/21
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:)
General Zod
May 7, 2021, 7:19:34 PM5/7/21
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jdcha...@gmail.com
May 15, 2021, 12:16:08 AM5/15/21
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ME
May 15, 2021, 12:22:21 AM5/15/21
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Guess what I’m thinking right now?!!
Zod
May 15, 2021, 7:09:51 PM5/15/21
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jdcha...@gmail.com
May 16, 2021, 10:52:54 AM5/16/21
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Will Dockery
May 16, 2021, 12:42:07 PM5/16/21
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George J. Dance
May 16, 2021, 3:49:04 PM5/16/21
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Karen Tellefsen
May 16, 2021, 4:22:35 PM5/16/21
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https://www.gutenberg.org/ebooks/53341
It's very dark, but a good read.
Zod
May 16, 2021, 7:05:21 PM5/16/21
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jdcha...@gmail.com
May 16, 2021, 7:27:15 PM5/16/21
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On Sunday, May 16, 2021 at 12:42:07 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
Edward Rochester Esq.
May 16, 2021, 8:38:41 PM5/16/21
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Will Dockery
May 16, 2021, 9:06:41 PM5/16/21
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NancyGene
May 17, 2021, 8:52:19 AM5/17/21
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On Monday, May 17, 2021 at 2:39:31 AM UTC, Will Dockery wrote:
> Have you head the later Holmes adventure The Seven Per-Cent Solution?
No, we haven't head it. Was this at the head shop?
>
> https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bNvEg3vEKA0
>
> BBC Radio
> Sherlock Holmes
> The Seven Per-Cent Solution (09/01/93)
> Sherlock Holmes Story by Nichols Myer
Anyone who is at all informed about Sherlock Holmes re-imaginings would know that the author is "Nicholas Meyer." We don't care that the above was copied from the YouTube site--it just shows that the poster doesn't read what he copies and pastes.
> Simon Callow Sherlock Holmes
> Ian Hogg Dr. Watson
> Carl Johnson Sigmund Frued
That would be "Freud."
>
> Adapted By Denny Martin Flinn
> Novel By Nichols Myer
Nicholas Meyer.
A reminder that this is ktell's poem thread, and the first derailing came from HWMNBN.
No, we haven't head it. Was this at the head shop?
>
> https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bNvEg3vEKA0
>
> BBC Radio
> Sherlock Holmes
> The Seven Per-Cent Solution (09/01/93)
> Sherlock Holmes Story by Nichols Myer
Anyone who is at all informed about Sherlock Holmes re-imaginings would know that the author is "Nicholas Meyer." We don't care that the above was copied from the YouTube site--it just shows that the poster doesn't read what he copies and pastes.
> Simon Callow Sherlock Holmes
> Ian Hogg Dr. Watson
> Carl Johnson Sigmund Frued
That would be "Freud."
>
> Adapted By Denny Martin Flinn
> Novel By Nichols Myer
Nicholas Meyer.
A reminder that this is ktell's poem thread, and the first derailing came from HWMNBN.
Karen Tellefsen
May 17, 2021, 10:11:47 AM5/17/21
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W.Dockery
May 17, 2021, 11:17:05 AM5/17/21
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NancyGene wrote:
> On Monday, May 17, 2021 at 2:39:31 AM UTC, Will Dockery wrote:
>> On Sunday, May 16, 2021 at 2:49:04 PM UTC-5, George J. Dance wrote:
>> > On Sunday, May 16, 2021 at 12:42:07 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
>> > > On Saturday, May 15, 2021 at 12:16:08 AM UTC-4, jdcha...@gmail.com wrote:
>> >
>> > > > > > > I like your conclusion that the maid stole the earrings; her father's in debtors' prison and miserable.
>> > > > > > Yes, definitely the maid did it. Perhaps her father was conscripted into the navy and left a wife and eleven kids. Jobs are hard to come by for illiterate young people. Always lock up your jewelry.
>> > > > > >
>> > > > > > We think also that the "lover so true" has skipped off, leaving her "seduced and abandoned." He might have bribed the maid to recover the earrings so that he could give them to his new spinster heiress.
>> > > > > This Agatha Christie angle has caught my interest.
>> > > > Love Agatha Christie! Have read most of her books... have always loved reading them and watching the movie and TV adaptations, and guessing who the murderer is... 🙏🍸❤️☺️
>> > > Used to love the Columbo mysteries.
>
>> > No one did it better than Sherlock Holmes.
>
>> Have you head the later Holmes adventure The Seven Per-Cent Solution?
>
> No, we haven't head it. Was this at the head shop?
Okay, that was mine, thanks for the correction, Nancy G.
> On Monday, May 17, 2021 at 2:39:31 AM UTC, Will Dockery wrote:
>> On Sunday, May 16, 2021 at 2:49:04 PM UTC-5, George J. Dance wrote:
>> > On Sunday, May 16, 2021 at 12:42:07 PM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
>> > > On Saturday, May 15, 2021 at 12:16:08 AM UTC-4, jdcha...@gmail.com wrote:
>> >
>> > > > > > > I like your conclusion that the maid stole the earrings; her father's in debtors' prison and miserable.
>> > > > > > Yes, definitely the maid did it. Perhaps her father was conscripted into the navy and left a wife and eleven kids. Jobs are hard to come by for illiterate young people. Always lock up your jewelry.
>> > > > > >
>> > > > > > We think also that the "lover so true" has skipped off, leaving her "seduced and abandoned." He might have bribed the maid to recover the earrings so that he could give them to his new spinster heiress.
>> > > > > This Agatha Christie angle has caught my interest.
>> > > > Love Agatha Christie! Have read most of her books... have always loved reading them and watching the movie and TV adaptations, and guessing who the murderer is... 🙏🍸❤️☺️
>> > > Used to love the Columbo mysteries.
>
>> > No one did it better than Sherlock Holmes.
>
>> Have you head the later Holmes adventure The Seven Per-Cent Solution?
>
> No, we haven't head it. Was this at the head shop?
>> https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bNvEg3vEKA0
>>
>> BBC Radio
>> Sherlock Holmes
>> The Seven Per-Cent Solution (09/01/93)
>> Sherlock Holmes Story by Nichols Myer
>
> Anyone who is at all informed about Sherlock Holmes re-imaginings would know that the author is "Nicholas Meyer." We don't care that the above was copied from the YouTube site--it just shows that the poster doesn't read what he copies and pastes.
So good to have you here watching every mistake I make, Nancy G.
>> Simon Callow Sherlock Holmes
>> Ian Hogg Dr. Watson
>> Carl Johnson Sigmund Frued
> That would be "Freud."
>>
>> Adapted By Denny Martin Flinn
>> Novel By Nichols Myer
> Nicholas Meyer.
> A reminder that this is ktell's poem thread, and the first derailing came from HWMNBN.
Thanks for catching all those typos, Nancy G.
:)
General Zod
May 17, 2021, 7:35:15 PM5/17/21
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