¡Unos Cuantos Piquetitos! (c&c) not in spanish
Joser
Based on a painting by Frida Kahlo
Teary eyes look up at him
Pleading
"Haven't you hurt me enough?"
He stands over her
Green felt hat tilted slightly to the left
Left hand slipping silently into pocket
Smirking
He looks so smooth with his
Scissors snipping merrily into weak flesh
She lies there naked on the bed
Alone
"I love you!
Please don't hurt me!"
She grimaces
Waiting for the next cut
The white sheets, a rag for her scarlet essence.
The rest spilling to the floor
She wishes her soul could be soaked up in those sheets
Put in the washer
Cleaned of everything
Hung out to dry
Pure
No more hospitals, no more philandering
No more
Cutting.
But
She loves him.
She holds on.
He knows.
He cuts.
Joser
suggestions the second time around.
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ĄUnos Cuantos Piquetitos!
Dennis M. Hammes
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> I just replied to this to see if anybody would be interested in giving some
> suggestions the second time around.
It's still the first. The second would be a new posting of a revised
version.
Let's see.
Frida is /not/ one of your well-known producers (yet, possibly
never; the point is that we don't know the piece like we know the
Sistine ceiling), so /you/ are going to have to put more descriptors
than mere reference in this. Else what happens here will happen
indefinitely: this piece (whatever your knowledge of the painting and
its meanings) takes the vehicles of the painting as the whole
content. The painting is obviously symbolic (nobody could get away
with these verbs in fact), but its tenors are woefully absent from
this report. You need to think of it primarily as a translation,
since the planar and linguistic arts have rather different grammars.
Whatever the original painting, this translation is merely surreal.
If the painting is primarily surreal, this piece needs somehow to say
so, else it can do no more than announce its own voice to be
incompetent of syntax.
/Other than that/, I'd say your report and interpretation are
accurate enough, but your average reader will not reread for secondary
clues when the primaries are missing.
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They are all owned by cats.
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gnarl
If the "soul" was soaked up in the sheets, it becomes an impurity that comes
out in the wash.
A little cognitive dissonance here.
g.
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> I just replied to this to see if anybody would be interested in giving
some
> suggestions the second time around.
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> Joser
> jmen...@home.com
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