Pre-reading
Tex James
After it is pre-read and continuity errors, grammar problems and spelling
mistakes. Anyone want to help me with this?
On Zorch's blog-a-rama I have posted the first chapter and have got a number
of comments, but I need more help... Pease...
Tex James
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Tex James
chapter 3
Tex James
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PCHeintz72
respond to this. this is time number 4. In the first 2 cases, it
shows 'error on page' at the bottom after I hit send.
In the 3rd, it showed the above paragraph, but not my own comments.
If it does not work this third time, I'll attempt to send by email
instead.
Comments may be a bit brief, since I am re-entering them.
As for the files, man did word inflate their size, I thought it would
be large at 202kb downoaded, but was only 18kb text, the second at
59kb downloaded was only 20kb text. And the 3rd was 31kb downloaded,
but only 4kb text.
As for the story, interesting concept, I've seen both blind and mute
ranma stories beofre, but not presented quite like this.
As for Nabiki's change, I'd expand on just why she was changed with
contact with Ranma. It made little send to me, as he would not have
active Jusenkyo water on his person, and and I cannot picture him
changing anyone he came in contact with.
As for The altered cursed forms. It was shown Ranma's
'extras' (tales, gem, ears, etc...) do not disappear with contact with
hot water. What of Shampoo and Nabiki, who only have the one mixed
curse?
As for the update, well, while this is nice, and I'll take what I can
get, I almost was hoping for an update of one of your four other semi-
active stories that I follow instead.
On Apr 21, 12:39 pm, "Tex James" <date...@earthlink.net> wrote:
> Oops... Sorry only chapter 1 and 2 are ready to go. I jumped the gun on
> chapter 3
>
> Tex James
> date...@earthlink.net
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Zorch-Central-Open...@googlegroups.com
>
> [mailto:Zorch-Central-Open...@googlegroups.com] On Behalf Of
> Tex James
> Sent: Saturday, April 21, 2007 11:05 AM
> To: RS - 103; Doug Dennis; 'Fan-Fics-R-Us Yahoo Group'; Jason Emery; John
> Garrett; 'Zorch Central Open FanFic Blog O Rama'; 'Anime Fiction Mailing
> List'; 'World of Ranma'
> Subject: Pre-reading
>
> I need some help all. I have 3 chapters of this story ready to post...
> After it is pre-read and continuity errors, grammar problems and spelling
> mistakes. Anyone want to help me with this?
>
> On Zorch's blog-a-rama I have posted the first chapter and have got a number
> of comments, but I need more help... Pease...
>
> Tex James
> date...@earthlink.net
> dmnt...@yahoo.com
> ICQ # 53512210
> RFFC Member # 1660
> Owner/Moderator of FFRU Yahoo group:http://groups.yahoo.com/group/ffruhttp://www.fan-fics-r-us.com- Hide quoted text -
>
> - Show quoted text -
Tex James
my other stories... I am sort of working on them. I have a update for To
the Heavens I am working on as well as an update to Primal Ranma
Tex James
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M B (ThreadWeaver)
As has already been said, I would expand on how Nabiki was able to acquire this curse from a blow to the head. AS to why it gave her the same thing, I am assuming that the magic of the spring mixed with the gem to pervert the purpose of them gems into sharing EVERYTHING between the wearers. Great kami-sama, sex would short out their fragile little minds.
This is a cool take on the the story line. And you even managed to work in a catgirl harem to boot! Woot! Let's hope that Kasumi doesn't need saving or there won't be any space left in their room, and Akane would have an elephant (yup, having a cow would be an understatement) if she found Kasumi in with them.
The first chapter is so large because it contains an embedded graphic of a cute little catgirl Shampoo. Now you just need a cute little catgirl Nabiki. On the flip side, the newer versions of word save so much crap in the files that they are huge. My older version (circa 2000) always seems to make the same files much much smaller.
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----- Original Message ----
From: Tex James <dat...@earthlink.net>
To: dat...@earthlink.net
Sent: Saturday, April 21, 2007 11:39:55 AM
Subject: RE: Pre-reading
Oops... Sorry only chapter 1 and 2 are ready to go. I jumped the gun on
chapter 3
Tex James
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I think you need to put a " in front of Great Grandmother, to show she is speaking again. Also, you need some sort of divider between where she goes from the story back to the present and so forth, to make it easier to read.