HELP!

[elizabethkw]

Hi!

My name is Elizabeth, and i'm really looking for some feedback on my
songs, if you could have a listen and let me know what you think,
that'd be really helpful!

www.myspace.com/elizabethkw

[sca...@cinci.rr.com]

Hi Elizabeth,

I listened to the song that came up on my space. I love that little
dancing stick figure by the way!

You have a nice sound and are obviously very talented.

If you want to produce stronger songs I would humbly suggest you
stretch yourself in two areas:
1) create a totally different sounding chorus section that will wake up
the listener...in other words, work on "contrast"
2) write around a much shorter "hook" phrase that is also the song's
title and is emphasized in the chorus

Best wishes for great songs!

-Susan Cantey
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=270746