Issue 208. The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare

[Peach]

Some people will say that people can not make their own
choices but they would be driven by the tendency. Nonetheless, I
contend that mankind always has options, but we tend to be oblivious
to them for many reasons.
The first reason is that we lack perseverance to overcome those
obstacles behind our choices. We might think that the option is too
impractical and decide to give up. However, the way toward our goals
is never plain but full of throne, and it is typical that we will be
worn out either mentally or physically by the difficulties. However,
any body who ever built an empire or changed the world sat in exactly
where we are right now. But the difference between mediocre and great
is that great people devote themselves to their choices. For instance,
Thomas Edison, the most exceptional entrepreneur and scientist, had a
thousand times of experiments before he invented the modern light
bulb. His well-know quotation is,” Genius is one percent inspiration
and ninety-nine percents perspiration.”
Besides, a no-option environment contribute to our negative
feelings, such as fear, hopeless etc. Gangsters blame their peer and
teachers for leading them to a wrong direction and giving them no
choices. Students might cheat in exams because of gigantic parents’
and peers’ pressure they suffer. Depressed people intend to commit
suicide because they feel hopeless and their sorrow might drive
themselves to the dead end. Nevertheless, if we could obviate those
psychological blemishes, there are still plenty of choices in front of
us. Students could study diligently for their phenomenal grades. Gang
members should encourage themselves to change their career path to
formal jobs. Melancholy people should leak their emotion through
exercises, reading, or other communicative activities.
Admittedly, there are always accidents in our lives. Sometimes the
accident will leave us no choice. However, it will only temporarily
affect us and we could still achieve our original choices through
different routes. We could turn to my English teacher for an analogy.
My English teacher who was a top-ranked student failed in his entrance
exam of university with 18 point in English. He devoted a lot of
efforts on English and treated it as the Armageddon between of him.
Consequently, he made the right choice and ended up being professional
English tutor.
In conclusion, from my perspective, there is no such circumstance
that is lack of choices. As a matter of fact, anyone who has braveness
and insistence on his or her choice will eventually reach out a
satisfactory result.

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Thanks for your reading!
Again, all kinds of opinions are sincerely appreciated.

[xupa0]

Great job!

the points in the article is incstive and well-presented,
and my little sugestion here is try to make it longer a blit, which
that would be entirely perfect!

there are couples of grammer problems below, however, since certain
usage i may be quite wrong by just using goole search to check it on,
you could just take my revision as reference. :)

On 6月13日, 上午10時52分, Peach <ryanyu1...@gmail.com> wrote:
> Some people will say that people can not make their own
> choices but they would be driven by the tendency. Nonetheless, I
> contend that mankind always has options, but we tend to be oblivious
> to them for many reasons.

建議可以把以下論點在第一段簡單陳述.

> The first reason is that we lack perseverance to overcome those
> obstacles behind our choices. We might think that the option is too
> impractical and decide to give up. However, the way toward our goals
> is never plain but full of throne, and it is typical that we will be

^^^^^^^
這是否要表達不平坦而是很多荊棘的意思呢?--> thorn

> worn out either mentally or physically by the difficulties. However,
> any body who ever built an empire or changed the world sat in exactly
> where we are right now. But the difference between mediocre and great

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
請問是否是說平凡人與偉人的差異? --> the mediocre and the great (複數形)
(mediocre is adj, )

> is that great people devote themselves to their choices. For instance,
> Thomas Edison, the most exceptional entrepreneur and scientist, had a

^^^^^^^^

> thousand times of experiments before he invented the modern light

(1)^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^(2)^^^^^^^

(1)建議用 experiment experience / have done experiment
(2) before 其後的動作是否用完成式較好.

> bulb. His well-know quotation is," Genius is one percent inspiration
> and ninety-nine percents perspiration."

第二大段連續三句一共出現兩次howver ,一次but
建議可以換個說法, 使用不用however就可以表達的句子.

> Besides, a no-option environment contribute to our negative
> feelings, such as fear, hopeless etc.

這句話是否是說沒有選擇的環境造成了人們的恐懼和負面情緒?
建議可以倒過來說, 與小結相呼應: 沒有選擇的環境往往都是因為害怕和負面的情緒所導致 .
--> our negative feelings, such as fear, hopeless etc. contribute to
a no-option environment.
therefore, if we could obviate those psychological blemishes,

there are still plenty of choices in front of us.


Gangsters blame their peer and
> teachers for leading them to a wrong direction and giving them no
> choices. Students might cheat in exams because of gigantic parents'
> and peers' pressure they suffer. Depressed people intend to commit
> suicide because they feel hopeless and their sorrow might drive
> themselves to the dead end. Nevertheless, if we could obviate those
> psychological blemishes, there are still plenty of choices in front of
> us. Students could study diligently for their phenomenal grades. Gang
> members should encourage themselves to change their career path to
> formal jobs. Melancholy people should leak their emotion through
> exercises, reading, or other communicative activities.
> Admittedly, there are always accidents in our lives. Sometimes the
> accident will leave us no choice. However, it will only temporarily

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

> affect us and we could still achieve our original choices through

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> different routes.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
這句滿長的 中間用and連接.
因為and 通常是連接兩個主詞一樣的句子, 建議分成兩句話來寫, 或者把兩句主詞改一樣.

> We could turn to my English teacher for an analogy.
> My English teacher who was a top-ranked student failed in his entrance
> exam of university with 18 point in English. He devoted a lot of
> efforts on English and treated it as the Armageddon between of him.
> Consequently, he made the right choice and ended up being professional
> English tutor.

最後的例子可以提一下考不好是因為怎樣的"accident"所導致. 更具說服力!
雖然文中有強調他平常實力都不錯, 但是考差也有可能因為沒特別認真.

> In conclusion, from my perspective, there is no such circumstance
> that is lack of choices. As a matter of fact, anyone who has braveness
> and insistence on his or her choice will eventually reach out a
> satisfactory result.

this is my first time. hope it can help^^"
and i do feel great to revise together.

Let's keep writing !!!

[xupa0]

what's wrong about my typesetting????
is there someone can help ? ><

[Peach]

你的Typing 怎麼啦？
我看是正常
By the way, 你的意見非常有幫助，謝啦

[xupa0]

重點 "^^^^^^^^ " 符號畫錯行了.寫的時候好好的,
一po上去就自動偏掉了.

恩 看得懂就好.

[zack su]

there is nothing wrong with your typing

it's just a incompatibility due to gmail system settings