Poem By Abrar Ajaz -- [reply my email]

[Abrar Ajaz Wani]

The winter night


The twilight then vanished and cold night arrived;
Beyond and all over the green, darkness ruled again!
Oh but those hopeless romantic souls never stopped;
And strayed street to street, with hands in hand,
The sparks of love could be found in their eyes,
Their smile shined between as the symbol of peace.
The coldness worked as if to make them closer-
And sink the warmth of love into each other.
Oh the lovers wondered the streets with each other
Cheering time, luck and the night high!
The blessed golden street lights blessed them,
With fragrance of love moist in air became wine.
They were lost completely in each other.
The inside hollowness was now filled with love.
Feelings of completeness was inside and outside.
Indeed! They were at truly mesmerized!



2018-01-31 18:43 GMT+01:00 Doctor Fab :
Hi Abrar,

2 points:

- Is it unpublished?

- the given topic ("Winter"), appears --unambiguously-- only in the title; plus a reference to a "cold night" (line 1) and to "coldness" (line 7) : definitely, far too little.
Try to add at least 1 line, where the Winter Season is clearly shown.

Cheers

F.