students' questions

[o'c]

please post any questions here

[tiff]

In the outline for e.1 where we have to list the topic, opinion and
reasons. where it said Bush/Ehrenreich's opinion. What do You mean by
tha?. I don't understand.

On Feb 10, 10:42 am, "o'c" <eng101l...@yahoo.com> wrote:
> please post any questions here

[o'c]

The e1.1 assignment is the 2-page refutation of one of the week's
readings. Students may choose to argue against either Ehrenreich or
Bush.

[Youngsung Moon]

Can I use your example for Enrenreich's topic, opinion, and reasons?
If I can't, can I take some ideas from your example?

[o'c]

yes, we worked on the brief outlines together for your assistance, so
feel free to use those ideas

[tiff]

Ae we suppose to have two thesis in our Essays? What alternative
thesis is suppose to have?

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[o'c]

Argue against the thesis (topic+opinion) of one reading (Ehrenreich or
Bush) with your own opinion on the same topic (the alternate thesis).

[o'c]

Irvin Feb 24, 4:08 pm
Professor O'Connell
Just uploaded my draft of the first assignment. Please review and
advise. Thanks!

o'c Feb 25, 1:08 pm

Irvin:
strong support for alternate, but refute a couple specific quotes in
paragraph 2
o'c

Irving Feb 27, 8:59 am
Will do.

Thank you!

[tiff]

i uploaded my rough draft last night. I didnt add somethings but I
would like some feedback. thank you

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[o'c]

Tiff:

I can't open that .wps file
please save as .txt and upload it again or paste it into one of these
messages

o'c

[tiff]

i re-uploaded the draft and if it doesnt work i'll turn in what i got.

[o'c]

if you're still having trouble finding save as, copy from your word
processor and paste into one of these messages.

[o'c]

Olivia Y
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More options Mar 1, 12:06 am
Hi Professor O'Connell,
I had some difficulty with my internet connection. I was able to
finally upload the essay at 12:03am. I hope it is ok. I did some
changes...
Thanks,
Olivia


this was a revision, so it's a little different than a late paper, but
plan further ahead next time

o'c

[o'c]

edinson213
More options Feb 24, 11:58 am
its me again i had three topics for my essay outline i dont know if
there good or not i just.
topic: wars
opinion: mistakly claims war in behaviorism.
three topics.
sacrifice.
punish of the death
traditional culture.
thats my three topics and i dont know if there correct to start my
essya or outline.
i wanted to finished today.


o'c
More options Feb 26, 6:11 am
it still seems as if you're planning to argue against Ehrenreich, but
if so, I still can't tell what you're going to say is correct instead

Edinson Tax
More options Feb 26, 3:28 pm
hhey i been working this paper for three days and tutors are helping
me.
This is my essay or outline that i been doing and follow ur
directions.
there some correct errors in my paper. I want to know if im in the
right
tract of writing the essay.
edde211.docx
15K View Download


o'c
More options Feb 27, 12:00 pm
Edison T:
you're making progress. paragraphs 1 and 2 are stronger than
paragraph
3, where there's too much summary. your draft is still very rough.
note that grammar and spelling errors are not scored for essay 1 but
will be in essays 2 and 3, as well as all other courses.

[o'c]

Maria A.
More options Feb 26, 10:57 pm
Hello Sir,
I've uploaded my E1.1 draft. It's basically finished; I just plan on
polishing it and organizing my citations before passing the final
hard
copy on Saturday. If you have the time, I'd really appreciate
feedback on how I can improve my arguments or wording. It's quite
long, so I had to break the whole thing into more than three
paragraphs (but I've marked the three sections that were supposed to
be the three paragraphs). If this is not okay and you would like me
to consolidate, please let me know. Thank you!
Maria


o'c
More options Feb 27, 11:53 am
Maria A:
very good work. don't worry about writing more than required: any
extra will at least count for journal. see also how students may
incorporate into essay 2 some of the essay 1 analysis.

[Maria A.]

Hello Mr. O'Connell,

I've uploaded my E1.2 (Obama vs Ehrenreich). Please let me know if
you have any corrections or suggestions for improvement; otherwise I
will submit with minimal revisions on Saturday. Thank you sir!

Maria A

[o'c]

Maria A:
very good work again, but for the points of the assignment, be a
little clearer on how you're effectively refuting the apparent
contrast between the two readings. you have, "…may not realize it, and
probably never intended for it…," and how she in the conclusion
discusses inspiring leadership for issues other than war. build a bit
on this in first and
second sections.

o'c

[Maria A.]

Thank you, Sir! I've uploaded the Version 2 of my draft with the
revisions you suggested. Hopefully the few sentences I added would
make my point clearer. I'll also submit a hard copy tomorrow in
class. Thanks again!

Maria A.

[o'c]

tapia89
More options Feb 28, 10:37 am
Prof O' Connell, I am submiting my essay through here.because there
is
a possibility of me not showing up because of transportation
problems,but if there is a possibility of me showing up I will. But
this is as a precautinary method that i am taking, so I can submit
the
essay that is due today.


o'c
More options Feb 28, 2:44 pm
this is ok this time. if you're going to have problems attending
regularly, talk to me about transferring to the online section or
know
that you might be dropped.


tapia89
More options Mar 2, 4:56 pm
Thank you for understanding,
I will be there from now on.

[o'c]

Mario L
More options Mar 7, 12:58 am
Professor O'connel,
I apologize but I will be out sick for the Saturday March 7 class. I
uploaded my 1.2 essay since I will not be able to be there.

see notes above on absences and talk to me if necessary

[edinson213]

[edinson213]

Edinson Tax
English 101 0459
03/14/09


In Barbara Ehrenreich’s 1997 book titled Blood Rites, she argues that
in the late twentieth century, the anti-war movements were found weak
causing them to fall behind and as a result peace was diminish. In
addition, not many people knew what war was all about and neither did
they know what the aftermath would be. She adds that these anti war
movements can be teach something. Courage, sociality and self-
sacrifice could unite all this to make a peaceful situation better
than struggling against wars. In a way the antiwar movements were to
make freedom of speech for not going to war to just die at war.
Enherich’s has failed to consider that the troops are fighting for
courage, sociality, and self sacrifice when they are at war. They want
their country to be a secured and peaceful place. Powers argument is
correct because war can’t change. War will always have some kind of
hate and poverty, but there is no turmoil to clean what we have soiled
into the past. We can learn from our mistakes and wrongs but we can
never sell peace. Dreams can come true, but there will always be a
price to pay.

Enhenreich’s argues the late twentieth century anti war movements were
weak and then ebbed in times of peace. Her argument is not correct
because if there were no anti wars movement in the twentieth century,
there will be no mankind. They will all fight for the right cause of
war and this entire people will become prey to the predators. A
protestor has the right to have freedom of speech for the right things
that shouldn’t cause these wars. If they stop the troops from going to
war, then the enemy well come to us and bomb us. She mentions about
capitalism in a fuzzy way and cartoonist theories of the sources of
war. Well we are capitalists in many ways. In America we all work and
don’t think about war. We still pay taxes and the prices still go up.
Also, the war is on us because the oil, food, and the money goes to
the hand who wants to be god and some sort way that were afraid to be
starve and die. There’s no time to think about war because at all
times where working. Even she argues that “the passions we bring to
war can be brought just as well to the struggle against war”. Enherich
is wrong. The troops fought for courage, solidarity and self sacrifice
when they’re at war. It seems easier to command people into one
direction telling them why war is wrong, but it’s even harder to make
people listen to the benefits of war. Enherich’s writes “The like
cold war had ended: communist was over: there were no longer any
“side” to take”.(p225)Even though Barbara seems to be against war
things such as the cold war seem to motivate her will to argue against
either side which in a war seems to make her go against everything she
stands for.

On the other hand, the anti-wars movement is just a wasted of time.
It has no meaning by waiting and losing time and not making any money.
There should be anti-war a movement mostly when there’s a situation in
which the country doesn’t have to go to war. In most situations the
anti-wars is like a joke, because they are all united and their
marching like they are going to war. Those people should go to war to
experience the taste of the blood. It made change there minds that war
is good. Barbara arguments at the end, “But what have all the
millennia of warfare prepared us for, if not this Armageddon fought,
once more, against a predator beast”. It made me think that the author
is confused because the wars are 50/50. World war one was finding the
peace by the anti wars movements but the troopers actually were making
the peace to be in security and making the freedom. This book should
never been publish because it doesn’t end the wars.