Daily Haiku

[curtis nelson]

 

The sun disappears

behind a huge cloud—

I feel abandoned

 

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[curtis nelson]

The first robin

collects things for its nest,

glad for untidy yard

[curtis nelson]

The occasional

childish thought

keeps us young

[curtis nelson]

Sunbeam highlights

Papa’s old rocking chair

thought I saw it move

[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

Good haiku, Curt. I remember days like that in the valley in the spring. So intense, the darkening but then the light would always reappear. Another haiku?

 Nedra

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[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

Hi Curt,

This is perfectly fine as it is. I like the contrast between having an untidy yard and a robin building a nest--things coming apart, things coming together.

If you wanted it to be in a more traditional form, you could add spring to the first line and exchange line two with line three.

The first spring robin

glad for my untidy yard

collects things for its nest

Or not. It's your choice.

Nedra

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[curtis nelson]

He warms before the

fireplace hoping the cold of

her death can be touched

[jill stockinger]

This was nice.

Thought possibly:

He warms before the

fireplace hoping the cold of

her death will melt away.

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or not!

Jill

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[curtis nelson]

Poppies timidly

hide their beauty in darkness

refresh for sun’s glow

[curtis nelson]

He left her arms for

war, until the day she died—

he was MIA

[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

That's intense. Very sad. Perfectly crafted.

Nedra

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[curtis nelson]

It’s not true humans

are marks for sharks—

they just hate surfboards

[curtis nelson]

 

Sunshine through window

spotlights a milky way of

dancing dust.

[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

Hi Curt . . . and Everyone:

Your haikus are really good, and I enjoy reading them. But would you please gather them together and send them out together? For our writing group, at least. I suspect you send them out as a daily exercise to your Haiku group, so it makes sense to send them one by one to them.

But I get so many emails from our group every day--originals, critiques, revisions, research articles, and more revisions--that I lose track of what is meant for the week we're in. Maybe we could all--myself included--be a little stricter with ourselves and date our work for the Thursday we plan to read it? I know that sometimes we can't read it on that date, but having a date would clarify much in the way of the hundreds of emails I now receive every month.

Thank you!

Nedra

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[curtis nelson]

 

Fast moving clouds

ripped apart by jagged peaks

like blade through butter

[curtis nelson]

Sticking to theme of clouds:

 

Cumulus clouds are        

best for finding the creatures

who make their home there

[curtis nelson]

Pull book from box—

overdue by ten years

and fourteen days

[curtis nelson]

Snow-soaked leaf

blown from stone

leaves its shadow

[curtis nelson]

 

The forest so quiet

at the ebb of day, before

the night creatures sing

[curtis nelson]

Drawn on the sidewalk,

a fading game of hopscotch—

first snow is coming

 

[Celia Mccauley]

Dear Curt

I love this Haiku. It brings memories of  a game we played in my neighborhood in Madrid.

I could not help myself. Here it is:

Hopscotch sidewalk game

So easy when we are eight,

not so at eighty. 

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[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

Querida Celia,

Did you write the hopscotch haiku in response to Curt's? I love it. (Although I am not 80, not yet!)

Hasta la próxima vez

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[curtis nelson]

We confess our sins

the same sins as before and

before, and before

[Jane and Steven Orkand]

So true! Part of your pre-Easter confession?

Thanks,

Steve

[Helen Cooper]

And so it goes. Will we never learn!  This could also apply to some of the world's leaders!

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[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

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[curtis nelson]

Reflected on wall,

shadow people mime real people

in the candlelight.

[curtis nelson]

The tumbleweed 

was built of travel— 

barbwire fence 

Curt 

[curtis nelson]

Correction:

The tumbleweed

was built for travel__

barbwire fence

[curtis nelson]

The wind walks the

isolated beach scattering

sand randomly

"Poetry is for those with a mind, a sense of humor, an imagination, a heart and a soul."

Curt Nelson

[curtis nelson]

Sky is dark but clear 

face in moon smiling 

I don’t feel alone 

[curtis nelson]

So wise owl . . .

who! who! who! is answer

to everything?

[Theodore Goodwin]

🙃

[curtis nelson]

She pressed the four-leaf

clover mid Bible pages

covers all bases

[curtis nelson]

Grandma’s wool shawl 

keeps her rocking chair company— 

they still look lonely. 

[curtis nelson]

Hole in the toe

of my wool sock, a thing

Mom used to repair.

 

[curtis nelson]

Sun splashes hillside

California Poppies pop

Reflecting orb’s glow

[curtis nelson]

Seashore 

Sunset 

Calmness 

 

[curtis nelson]

Moon through window

slowly surveys my desk.

What is it looking for?

[curtis nelson]

Raindrops tumble off 

the sycamore leaves, while 

tears roll down my cheeks.

[curtis nelson]

My kite caught in tree 

been there all fall and winter, 

it will sometimes wave. 

[curtis nelson]

Street singer seems 

serenely satisfied singing— 

coins in guitar case. 

[curtis nelson]

Loon’s forsaken cry 

echoes over still lake 

I wonder . . . where are you 

 

[curtis nelson]

 

My G. I. Joe stands

defender in my bedroom

while I’m off to war

[curtis nelson]

Clothes on backyard line

frantically wave arms and legs

at the passing gust

[Theodore Goodwin]

Cute

[curtis nelson]

Five cypress trees dance

to the tune of the wind

one is out of step

[Theodore Goodwin]

I like it; I suggest an alternate line 3:

they bow separately

Theo

[curtis nelson]

Spider, your woven web

links my stacked dirty dishes,

art is art

[curtis nelson]

Cast-off tennis shoe

home to a patch of clover

figures— no four leaf

[curtis nelson]

Red rose’s scent is

an aphrodisiac

if served twelve in number

 

[curtis nelson]

Seek spiritual wisdom

from reclining Buddha,

but his eyes are closed

[curtis nelson]

The rooster needs to

change circadian rhythm

or become stew stock

[Theodore Goodwin]

Curtis, let's get blunt:

Crowin' too early

leads to Chinese chicken feet

in gelatin.

Theo

[curtis nelson]

The photos on the wall

chronicle our family’s life—

well…the good parts

[curtis nelson]

Wonder if salmon

ever wanted to turn tail…

hell with instinct

[curtis nelson]

The mischievous jay

bullies backyard residents,

family cat studies.

[curtis nelson]

Majestic mountains

of sand sculpted by winds—

unpredictable

[curtis nelson]

In battle he carried

her letters over his heart—

she felt it stop

[curtis nelson]

Duck decoys bobble

on wind-blown lake--traitors

to their species

[curtis nelson]

I walk the same path                                      

in every season to know

the truth of life

[curtis nelson]

Do plants listen?

I sing to my plants daily—

they shrivel and die

 

[curtis nelson]

Do plants talk?

Not so as I understand—

I’m bad at languages

[curtis nelson]

At first freeze

lake ice is colored with

captured leaves

[curtis nelson]

Wind ripples the pond

causing sunbeams to frolic

along the surface

[Theodore Goodwin]

Beautiful. Theo 

[curtis nelson]

some sow wild in youth

to others it comes midlife

bad are the lifers

[curtis nelson]

Small farm tradition

like grandmother's rocking chair

only a memory

[Theodore Goodwin]

Aunt Evelyn rocked

slowly in her chair nodding

but she spoke no more.

[curtis nelson]

Abalone shell

cleaned in churning tides

reflects sun’s glow

[curtis nelson]

The young couple floats

memorized over dance floor—

doubt they hear music

[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

Good one, but there is one confusing word--memorized or mesmerized? 

Nedra

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[Theodore Goodwin]

Love it!

Mesmerized?

[curtis nelson]

No one expects

tears from a cat

but a dog…yes

 

[curtis nelson]

My shadow plays

hide and seek when

cloud passes over

 

[curtis nelson]

A turkey vulture

circles and surveys above

I should move around

[curtis nelson]

Driftwood litters cove

in jumbled piles along beach,

like collapsed Jenga

[curtis nelson]

The library stretched

floor to ceiling all four walls

knowledge under dust

[curtis nelson]

The breeze caresses

the array of temple chimes.

Is there a message?

[curtis nelson]

The granite boulder

holds warmth after sunset—

advantage lizard

[curtis nelson]

What’s more important—

I complete my journey or

help the snail on his

[Theodore Goodwin]

Beautiful poem. So packed with meaning and imagery.

But I am a snail

help me over the river

then slide along with me.

Theo

[curtis nelson]

At distance, roses

appear radiant, vibrant—

not full of aphids

 

[curtis nelson]

Bed mat on cabin floor

several critters and I

share a restless night

[Theodore Goodwin]

Traveling country roads

stopping to eat, sleep on floors

Basho met bugs, too.

Theo

[curtis nelson]

Earthworm attempts

sidewalk crossing in broad daylight

murder of crows watch

[curtis nelson]

A ring cloud imparts

to the snow-covered mountain

a saintly aura

[curtis nelson]

Army of black ants

and I faceoff across from

partial ham sandwich

[Theodore Goodwin]

Very clever. I like the punchline.

[curtis nelson]

“Kind of Blue” spinning

half full, iced gin and tonic

calm—moments away

[Nedra Crowe-Evers]

Nice! 

Bombay Sapphire?

Sounds good.

As to the mechanics (those pesky details!) please consider a period after tonic. Then a capital C for Calm. Unless you wanted "iced gin and tonic" to be an adjective phrase describing "calm." Your choice.

Nedra

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[curtis nelson]

Every boy sitting

in bleachers with baseball glove—

hopeful till last out

[curtis nelson]

Masseuse puts her whole

self into relieving my stress

pre-tipping works

[curtis nelson]

I watch rain drops form

rivulets running helter-

skelter down windshield

[curtis nelson]

I plant seeds in land

aware of odds against me.

It is all I know.

[Theodore Goodwin]

Seeds leap from my hands 

Knowing they will sprout lovely 

Veggies, fruits and greens.

Theo 

[Marian Kile]

Okay Theo's glass if have full and Curt's is half empty.

I'm still looking for a glass to use.

Marian Kile

916-217-1053 Cell

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[curtis nelson]

Midwest summer day

humidity very high

even ladies sweat

 

[Theodore Goodwin]

Baking in smoggy 

San Fernando Valley heat

A good summer sweat

Theo 

[curtis nelson]

Morning Glory vine

climbs garden hoe—good offense

is the best defense.