Prison
Markendeya Yeddanapudi
Prison
Prison is any obstruction, restriction, hindrance or any other block, that prevents free access, interaction and action in, with and as naure.It is the denial of access to the Theosphere and the Theism emanating from nature’s Theosphere. The access may be restricted by any bigoted religion, the Cartesian shackles that mechanize perception and understanding and of course the fanatical political and other cults.
With your eyes, you can see only less than 00.0035% of the totality. Even that seeing takes you to the false 3D shapes, ignoring the Time dimension which represents not only the remaining 99.9965% of the invisible spectrum but also covers the visible 3D shapes. Time dimension is simply the Divine dimension based on feeling, sensing and understanding. It is the voyage into the real abstract or formless nature.
The reality of nature is diverse processes continuously interacting, making seeing definite things impossible as processes themselves change and interact, the interactions overlapping continuously.
The basic fact is the thrill of revelations and discoveries one experiences while living in the free and healthy nature, where there is no human tampering. The Biosphere is a web of emotional, perceptual and understanding collegial interactions, each organism radiating, impacting and informing emotions.
The Biosphere is an extension of you, housing trillions of bacteria the tiny interacting and coordinating life forms in you. The self confidence and self esteem in you is actually the percolation of the confident nature into you, where nature is free and healthy. The interaction with free nature creates the thrilling discoveries and revelations as feelings in you which become the hormonal communications of your bloodstream, which enter the cells creating the confident cells, or the foundational self confidence.
Today we continuously destroy nature calling it the economic life. We are demoralizing every life form, creating the macro loss of self confidence in nature. We are afraid of free nature, our very macro anatomy. And we are also failing as the economic men the machines that kill ecology itself as there are no jobs available in the economy. Machines are taking over every job creating the spectacle of starvation and ultimately the great economic depression.
The basic fact is, there can be no lasting livelihoods when economic life is based on the destruction of nature. We have to live in the free and healthy nature as the limbs of that nature. Ecology and not the failed imitation of Newtonian Physics, called economics, can help livelihoods.
It is time we install Ecology in the place of Economics as the basic foundation. Every University must immediately start a free nature park without human tampering as the first and elementary paradigm shift into Ecology.
Our economic activity is creating fatal provocations in nature to take remedial backlashes.
YM Sarma
Critique of Chat GPT
Below is a constructive, critical response to the essay—focusing on clarity, coherence, argumentation, and style—while respecting the philosophical intent of the piece.
Critical Comments on the Essay
1. Conceptual clarity and definition of key terms
The essay begins with a broad and metaphorical definition of prison as “any obstruction… that prevents free access… to nature’s Theosphere.”
- This is an intriguing premise, but the argument would benefit from clearer definitions.
- Terms such as “Theosphere,” “Theism emanating from nature’s Theosphere,” “Cartesian shackles,” and “fanatical political and other cults” are left ambiguous.
- Because these concepts appear central to your thesis, more precise explanations—or at least consistent usage—are needed to help readers follow your reasoning.
2. Scientific accuracy and use of numerical claims
The statement that “you can see only less than 00.0035% of the totality” seems to refer to the visible portion of the electromagnetic spectrum.
- The number, however, is unsupported and appears incorrect or at least unexplained.
- When numerical precision is invoked, readers expect scientific grounding.
- Additionally, the connection between physical light spectra and metaphysical claims about “Divine dimension” or “true abstract nature” is conceptually interesting but logically unstructured. The jump from physics to spirituality needs clearer justification or acknowledgment as metaphor.
3. Logical structure and argumentative flow
The essay
blends metaphysics, ecology, psychology, and economics, but the transitions are
abrupt.
Examples:
- From the limits of human perception to the Time dimension as “Divine.”
- From nature as a web of emotional interactions to bacteria establishing human confidence.
- From ecological degradation directly to “machines taking over jobs.”
Each jump introduces a potentially rich idea, but the lack of connective reasoning weakens the overall argument. Strengthening the logical bridges—showing how you get from one claim to the next—will add coherence.
4. Overextension of metaphors
Nature is described as:
- an emotional web
- a source of “self-confidence percolation”
- a macro-anatomy of human beings
- divine and abstract
These metaphors are evocative, but the essay often mixes metaphorical and literal claims without distinction. This creates confusion about what should be read poetically and what is meant as empirical truth.
5. Claims that require evidence
Several assertions would require at least minimal support or elaboration:
- “The Biosphere is an extension of you.”
- “Self confidence… is the percolation of the confident nature into you.”
- “Our economic activity is creating fatal provocations in nature to take remedial backlashes.”
- “There are no jobs available in the economy.”
If treated as philosophical or poetic expressions, that should be clarified. If meant as factual claims, they need evidence or at least logical argumentation.
6. Treatment of economics vs. ecology
Your argument that ecology should replace economics is bold and thought-provoking. However:
- Presenting economics as a “failed imitation of Newtonian physics” oversimplifies a complex field.
- Claiming that livelihoods are impossible under current economic logic requires more argumentation.
- Your policy prescription—that every university must create an untouched nature park—could be compelling if connected more clearly to the theoretical arguments.
A stronger case would:
- Define what economics fundamentally gets wrong.
- Explain how ecological principles would operationally support livelihoods.
- Provide examples of societies, communities, or models where such an ecological paradigm works.
7. Style and readability
The essay has a
poetic, passionate tone, which is a strength. The imagery is vivid, and the
moral urgency is clear.
However, long sentences, dense phrasing, and repeated abstract terminology can
burden comprehension. Consider:
- Shorter sentences.
- Occasional concrete examples.
- Fewer abstract nouns.
These changes would make the ideas more accessible without diluting their depth.
Overall assessment
Your essay presents a visionary critique of modern economic and social systems, rooted in a philosophical reverence for nature. The emotional intensity is compelling. To strengthen it further, focus on:
- defining key concepts,
- providing clearer logical transitions,
- grounding critical claims in evidence or explicit metaphors, and
- distinguishing poetic insight from literal assertion.
With these refinements, the essay’s underlying message—about the spiritual and ecological costs of modern life—would come through more powerfully and persuasively.
If you’d like, I can also help rewrite sections for clarity while preserving your philosophical style.
Rajaram Krishnamurthy
Prison is any obstruction, restriction, hindrance or any other block, that prevents free access, interaction and action in, with and as naure.It is the denial of access to the Theo sphere and the Theism emanating from nature’s Theo sphere. The access may be restricted by any bigoted religion, the Cartesian shackles that mechanize perception and understanding and of course the fanatical political and other cults. Shri YMji
KR Yes life is an imprisonment or assignment for the ascendancy as one would will shape. Imprisonment is a punishment. WHY WE MAY HAVE TO PUNISH OURSELVES? ONLY SADISM WILL LEAD ONE TO SELF-INDICTMENTS. On the contrary, when every failure initially is treated as a stepping stone to success, modifications of approach will lead one to achievements as end alone justified the means.
"A tiny thread shall not bind us to stop our progress" is a statement that can be interpreted as a motivational aphorism or a philosophical declaration emphasizing human resilience and determination . It suggests that minor obstacles or constraints (the "tiny thread") should not be allowed to hinder significant advancement or continuous effort (our "progress"). The phrase does not have a widely recognized single author or origin and is likely a modern, poetic expression of the following common themes:
Resilience: The ability to overcome challenges and setbacks.
Determination: Unwavering focus and commitment to a goal.
Overcoming Constraints: A refusal to be limited by small or seemingly insignificant barriers. It is designed to inspire perseverance in the face of difficulties. KR IRS 151125
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