"BPJ" wrote in message
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> Will Dockery wrote:
>> On Thursday, August 13, 2015 at 8:35:22 AM UTC-4, BPJ wrote:
>> > On Thursday, August 13, 2015 at 8:21:42 AM UTC-4, Will Dockery wrote:
>
> > > > > > > > Jumping ahead to the end and working backwards, today's poem
> > > > > > > > is #17...
> > > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > > > When
> > > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > > > When the mill shut down
> > > > > > > > > we hit the pavement with a thud
> > > > > > > > > then we all got up and kept walking.
> > > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > > > Some to the work house
> > > > > > > > > some to the poor house
> > > > > > > > > some to the whorehouse
> > > > > > > > > and the grave.
> > > > > > > > >
> > > > > > > > > -Will Dockery
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Very good -- especially the nursery rhyme ("Baa Baa Black
> > > > > > Sheep")* feel of lines 4-6 all ending in "house." I would
> > > > > > suggest taking it one step further by expanding line 7 to "and
> > > > > > one to the grave."
> > > > > >
> > > > > > Normally I would say that pronounced meter of the second stanza
> > > > > > cries out (at very least) for a rhyme-mate for "grave" at the
> > > > > > end of the first stanza. But since the first stanza is actually
> > > > > > quite powerful in its current (unrhymed/unmetered) form, and I
> > > > > > wouldn't change it.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > The nondescript title doesn't do the poem justice.
> > > > > >
> > > > > > *"Baa Baa Black Sheep" was originally a protest rhyme about King
> > > > > > Edward I's wool tax.
> > > > >
> > > > > Thanks, Michael... yes, I'm definitely not happy with the title,
> > > > > but nothing has manifested yet to replace it.
> > > > >
> > > > > Any thoughts on a title?
>
> > > > 'And So It Goes'
<snipped for brevity>
> Condolences to your friend, Will.
Thanks BPJ, here's an obituary and so on for Gary...
http://www.topix.com/forum/city/columbus-ga/TB4F6N93AUTK96ARA
Gary Steven Frankfurth
Obituary
Frankfurth, Gary Steven, 60, Columbus, GA, died Wednesday, August 12, 2015.
Visitation will be held Sunday, August 16, 2015 from 1:00 to 4:00 PM at his
mother's residence in Columbus, GA 31909
"Rest in peace, Gary Frankfurth. I shared a bunch of stages with Gary over
the years I lived in Columbus, at open mics and as bandmates in the madcap
musical performance art of the Shadowville All-Stars. He was a good guy,
with knowledge of the blues to share; we talked Tom Waits and Duke Ellington
between sets at the Tuesday night jams at Soho run by Tripp Wrigley.
Much love to his wife Kathryn Hansen and their family." -John Phillips
And... so it goes.
Television interviews with local artists, directed by Rusty Wood​.
Check out "Interview with Gary Frankfurth​" by Will Dockery -
http://www.reverbnation.com/open_graph/video/12943736