Good work, might as well get it in the search engines a bit.
> > "an ebony Hermes - is that plural?"
> > reminds me of an Andalusian pun on Herculito
> > (diminutive of Hercules) and sets a tone for
> > my reading of the rest of the piece.
>
> Reminded me of "kudos."
Worth at least one.
--
"Ozone Stigmata" by Will Dockery-Henry Conley (video):
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bxfl_7KvFcc
I make it /look/ easy:
She Sleeps Tight
Sleeps so tight
she has a marksman's eye.
Maker's mark
tattoo firewater spine.
Leather shoes
but nowhere to go.
Dice and coins
scattered in the snow.
Dice and coins
scattered in the snow.
Won't be long,
until I see her face.
She's waiting
in an undisclosed place.
I've been conspired
banned from my muse.
This won't stick
poor boy's all confused.
This won't stick
poor boy's all confused.
In Salem town
she keeps her chin so high.
Darkened breeze
she smiles as I roll by.
Step inside
she looks for tables left.
Wink at time
nothing lasts except yourself.
Wink at time
nothing lasts except yourself.
Like a Steamboat
she plans to roll on down.
To the Gulf
out of this dirty town.
Copper mesh
kept stuffed in a jar.
Sharp cold hit
turning wine to water.
Sharp cold hit
turning wine to water.
We know him
eye deed by his ship.
In a trap
a kind of goosechase trip.
Whiskey fumes
and stale gunsmoke.
Sunk and drowned
with all her knives and jokes.
Sunk and drowned
with all her knives and jokes.
Sleeps so tight
she has a marksman's eye.
Maker's mark
tattoo firewater spine.
Leather shoes
but nowhere to go.
-Will Dockery (words)
Brian Mallard (music)
�2009 by Dockery-Mallard
And thanks for the detailed and honest comment and critique.
How difficult can it be to spit out random words and then try to pass them
off as a poem?
Thanks for the critique, Orson, but, to answer your question, the
difficulty for you may be more or less than that of someone else. In
"She Sleeps Tight", though, there are no random words, each word is
specifically placed to build and progress the "story":
That wasn't a critique, numbnuts.
>but, to answer your question, the
> difficulty for you may be more or less than that of someone else. In
> "She Sleeps Tight", though, there are no random words, each word is
> specifically placed to build and progress the "story":
Then your storytelling skills suck.
>
> She Sleeps Tight
>
= snippage of crappage =
As close as you've ever come to writing one, though.
--
"Truck Stop Woman" by Dockery & Conley on internet radio:
http://www.wqik.com/new2/artists/i/237770?psid=303942
That wasn'ta critique.
That. Was. Not. A. Critique.
You brain-dead simpleton.
Thanks for watching and commenting... and I miss the free booze, but
being sober is working well for me.
--
"Corning Town" by Will Dockery & Brian Mallard (video):
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Njes_L9ZDgQ
> Cujo DeSockpuppet wrote:
>> Meat Plow wrote:
>> >Will Dockery wrote:
>>
>> >>>>>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bxfl_7KvFcc
>>
>> >>he is deep in his cups and belching out off key moans and groans.
>>
>> >>>> Interesting interpretation of "Ozone Stigmata". Thanks for
>> >>>> taking the time to listen and comment.
>>
>> >http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UVIF2-qWIUc
>>
>> A close call indeed, Dockery almost spilled his beer. Dear lord, what
>> some people have to do for free booze.
>
> Thanks for watching and commenting... and I miss the free booze, but
> being sober is working well for me.
Just a question that's a little personal so if you don't want to answer
it I'll understand.
Does it bother you to look at performances where you were stinking drunk
now that you aren't drinking?
--
Cujo - The Official Overseer of Kooks and Trolls in dfw.*,
alt.paranormal, alt.astrology and alt.astrology.metapsych. Supreme Holy
Overlord of alt.fucknozzles. Winner of the 8/2000, 2/2003 & 4/2007 HL&S
award. July 2005 Hammer of Thor. Winning Trainer - Barbara Woodhouse
Memorial Dog Whistle - 12/2005 & 4/2008. COOSN-266-06-01895.
"I personally believe that all the ages of people prior
to the Flood of Noah are more correctly perceived when divided be 9 ...
that TIME as we know it only began to "gel" at the point of the flood."
- Georgann, making a mockery of Xtainity again.
Well, I know I can do it better sober... and know I can do everything
better sober. That definitely helps me remember to not take that first
drink, night after night.
But, the music's good, my performance was okay on that one, so it
doesn't really /bother/ me, but I know the performance could have been
better. It does bother me a bit that I most likely a blacked-out
zombie by that point of the night, since I did drink all day and all
night every day around the time that video was shot,
--
"Corning Town" by Will Dockery & Brian Mallard (video):
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Njes_L9ZDgQ
> --
Thanks for the critique, Orson, although you don't care for it, "She
Sleeps Tight" is taking off pretty well, and getting some good
notices:
GeorgeDance (2 months ago) The video was a 'meh.' But it's worth it
to get this song onto You Tube.
Lovev1 (23 hours ago) User love it, love it love it,,
onewomanandsomesongs (4 days ago) I really like this.....it has a nice
60's retro sound....very good job! :) You did a good job with the
video too.
Benhallned (4 days ago) Very nice all round,Michael, real ^60/70s type
of sound, my type of song, Rabbie.
Acridona (5 days ago) A really "feel good" song and the mixture
between the both kinds of art in the painted pictures is a perfect
way to transmit the feeling of that song.
Thanks to Michael too, for giving me that hint!!!
barbettemroe (6 days ago) Nice, thanks to Falke58 for sharing this
CurtisMateer (6 days ago) Twisted sixties sounding bubblegum pop - it
could just about be called alternative. Interesting words complimented
by the music well. George's art is nice - European style old
abstraction.
mooncricket36 (1 week ago) Good video thanks, did a good job
Falke58 (1 week ago) Great song too, sounds little early seventys,
little psychadelia, little
like that you mix L.Reed and early
Neil Young. Really good.
Best Wishes Michael
jeannekhan (1 month ago) I enjoyed this, Will. My first visit to your
link.
Worth it. Solid guitar, great graphics, that artist is excellent!
Thank you!
Jeanne
deanbatforver (2 months ago) this song is wonderful thanks for
sharing with us
I still didn't find out what a "meh" was, George!
--
"Corning Town" by Dockery & Mallard:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Njes_L9ZDgQ
>"Orson Wells as CitizenCain" wrote:
>>"Will Dockery" wrote:
>>
>>> "She Sleeps Tight" by Will Dockery & Brian Mallard:
>>> http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9uGY157cpiU
>>
>> How difficult can it be to spit out random words and then try to pass
>> them off as a poem?
<snip>
He's on to something. When I was doing the Dockery word count of Adam's poem &
your piece, I thought your piece read like something The Hybrid from Battlestar
Gallactica would spit out. I found this on IMDb:
"All these thing
at once and many more.
Not because it wishes harm,
but because it like violent vibrations
to change constantly.
Then shall the maidens
rejoice at the dance.
Structural integrity
of node seven restored.
Repressurizing.
The children of the one
reborn shall find
their own country.
The intruders
swarmed like flame.
Like the whirlwind.
Hopes soaring to slaughter
all their best
against our hulls."
The Hybrid rambles on...
First impression I get is that you and Orson think a lot alike, Karla.
Related?
Here's the words for "She Sleeps Tight", if you feel like doing an
analysis of them:
She Sleeps Tight
-Will Dockery (words)
Brian Mallard (music)
©2009 by Dockery-Mallard
Sorry if you're confused... oh, wait...
Thanks for the critique, Orson, although you don't care for it,
I don't and never will.
"She
Sleeps Tight" is taking off pretty well, and getting some good
notices:
HA HA HA HA HA HA HA no.
= snip YouBoob crap =
That's as maybe
More importantly, I cannot join the dance
Until I am sure of the poet's voice
In my head.
Is that the long "a" of the Ascendancy
I should be after hearing,
Or the demotic
Fiddler of Dooney?
--
http://www.gillsmith999.plus.com/
Your choice, and here's hoping you find and stick with something you
do like here, rather than continue to torture yourself over me, Orson.
> "She
> Sleeps Tight" is taking off pretty well, and getting some good notices:
>
> HA HA HA HA HA HA HA no.
Thanks for listening, reading and commenting.
--
"She Sleeps Tight", vocals by Will Dockery & Sandy Madaris, guitars by
Brian Mallard. Paintings by George Sulzbach:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9uGY157cpiU
hey, that was such a roaring success I MIGHT be persuaded to post
another pome.
OK, I'm persuaded!
it's called "Easter Rising"
--
http://www.gillsmith999.plus.com/
Ormsgill.
To breakfast, to ponder it still . . .
Great God of the morning and all that is blessed!
I stand at my window, paying my respects
To a pigeon laid-out in a daffodil shroud,
Reborn as the Phoenix that soars.
--
http://www.gillsmith999.plus.com/
I think most people looking for a new poem to read would give a thread
with 100+ messages like this a pass. It might be a better idea to post
your poetry as the OP in a new thread.
You're right. I am too Outlook Express-oriented ('Orient Express' anyone?)
I'll send it into my local newspaper next Easter, if I remember.
If it's still in business.
Front page news if it is.
Backwaters. The Next Big Thing.
--
http://www.gillsmith999.plus.com/
= snip quackings =
Must be molting season already.
Hello, Gil... thanks for reading and commentin. I look forward to
seeing your poem.
--
Under the Radar by Will Dockery & The Shadowville All-Stars:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KEQDFMNcgLA
Here's the link, and words to the poem, which will put your comments
in better context:
"She Sleeps Tight", vocals by Will Dockery & Sandy Madaris, guitars by
Brian Mallard. Paintings by George Sulzbach.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9uGY157cpiU
She Sleeps Tight
-Will Dockery (words)
check this out:
automattick made a comment
right as knob evans came in with
his usual drool.
great song...consider making an edited
version for the prime time audiences out there.
otherwise, great stuff! i agree with the youtube
crowd...you're fast approaching cult status, Will.
matt
I don't remember much of that. I did tell Matt what I'd told you --
that Mallard's guitar sounded like "And Your Bird Can Sing."
I also told him I thought some of the lyrics came from your
"Portsmouth Thongs" project, to Houstmanize a Rik Roots poem
("Portsmouth Thoughts"), because 'marksman' and 'dice and coins' both
appear in Roots's poem.
Yes, I discuss with HC that for many years the "rule" was 3 minutes
and 5 seconds for a single... actually that went back to the old 78s,
which supposedly could only handle about that much groove. Writing
with HC, the last 35-40 songs have come amazingly close to that size,
not really conciously, but when we work one up, and listen to the
paybacks, they're all coming in at abot 3 minutes. Mallard has more
"jamband" roots, from the Dead/Phish arena, and the Shadowville All-
Stars format, where a song can go through various solos and
diversions, and can easily clock up 30 minutes if we don't wind them
down. Fun stuff, but hardly what the mainstream listener can endure...
> otherwise, great stuff! i agree with the youtube
> crowd...you're fast approaching cult status, Will.
"Keep banging the door", as Johnny Rotten once sang... got a sit-in
gig tonight with some friends out in the country, and tomorrow is a
pretty big profile set for the Springer Opera House block party, which
is expected to have a huge turnout,
http://www.ledger-enquirer.com/134/story/812292.html
"...The block of 10th Street between First and Second avenues will be
blocked off to vehicular traffic. In the street, the Springer Stilt
Walking team will be wandering around. Food vendors will sell food.
Springer Theater Academy students will be playing games with children.
A small stage will be set up in the street, where you can get a
preview of the No Shame Theater, among other performances.
Throughout the day, Michele Rogers, who will be choreographing
“Footloose,” will be teaching a simple dance combination to anyone who
wants to try it.
“Dancers will be walking around the crowd,” Johanna said. “It (the
block party) will have an ’80s theme. So definitely dress up. We
encourage you to dress up.
“At the end of the block party, we’re going to have a dance party.
Whoever has learned the dance can be part of the big end-of-the-day
dance with that combination.”
There will also be tours of the Springer. For those of you who have
never been through the old theater, this will be the perfect time for
you to do it.
Producing artistic director Paul Pierce will tell ghost stories. And
he’ll even autograph the book he wrote about the Springer ghosts..."
So we're looking forward to getting a lot of t-shirts and CDs in
circulation there...
That's a pretty cool sound to be in, of course... I have to remember
to let him know about this.
> I also told him I thought some of the lyrics came from your
> "Portsmouth Thongs" project, to Houstmanize a Rik Roots poem
> ("Portsmouth Thoughts"), because 'marksman' and 'dice and coins' both
> appear in Roots's poem.
Ah... I actually shelved the "Portsmouth Thongs" piece, since I saw
that as a setup for more problems here on the newsgroups--- what was
earlier applauded when done by one poster can suddenly be cursed if
done by another--- an example set most recently by your posting of the
"Workers Dreaming" poem.
I kept a couple of images from "Portsmouth Thongs", as well as a few
from "Workers Dreaming", and built the new poem from all-new elements,
which is not only easier, but more satisfying to me as a writer.
Originality is clearly the best route for the poet, in my opinion.
--
"Silver Blazing Sun" written by Will Dockery & Brian Mallard,
performed by The Shadowville All-Stars. ©2009 Images composed from
shots by Walter Mallard, P.D. Wilson, Freddie Whitley, and the Public
Domain:
Anything you are involved with is "cursed," Duckery.
The witch told me the curse was lifted.
The witch told me the curse was lifted.
You are eternally cursed, Duckery.
You're scary, Dink.
--
"Silver Blazing Sun" written by Will Dockery & Brian Mallard,
performed by The Shadowville All-Stars.
You're
...completely correct in calling you an idiot.
"We know." -Dennis M. Hammes, Litt. D.
--
"Such a sad life, and too short a time to really appreciate all the
sorrow." -Will Dockery
"We know" - Usenet on Will Dockery
Your admission is noted, Dink, but it was already pretty obvious.
--
"Such a sad life, and too short a time to really appreciate all the
sorrow." -Will Dockery
"Silver Blazing Sun" written by Will Dockery & Brian Mallard,
performed by The Shadowville All-Stars.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ot-RTkMkQJo
> "We know" - Usenet on Will Dockery
"Silver Blazing Sun" written by Will Dockery & Brian Mallard,
performed by The Shadowville All-Stars.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ot-RTkMkQJo
Quite a pleasing little ditty
--
http://www.gillsmith999.plus.com/
Bob damn hell you sure can't read for shit, Duckery. Try finding a
preschooler to help you understand what I wrote.
if by 'pleasing' you mean 'makes your intestines ache and have an urge for
self-mutilation'
Thanks for having a listen and commenting, Gill.
The word "pleasing" doesn't really need defining, you know.
--
"Red Lipped Stranger & other stories" by Will Dockery:
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
Especially since nothing you ever do or have done could be defined as
'pleasing'
Exactly.
= Snip the Quacking =
You should at least keep the link, so other readers can find out what
the subject header is referring to:
No thanks. Your abominations should be left not seen AND not heard.
Okay, well thanks for reading & commenting, then.