oh, crap (my 3rd poem of the year of hopefully 7)
sirblob2
George Dance
> fuck, i dropped it
Hmmm ... I can't suggest much to improve this: only a bit of tinkering
with the line breaks and punctuation, to build in an idea "stolen"
from e.e.cummings:
crap
oh
fuck,
i
d
r
o
p
p
e
d
it . . .
----
[sirblob2 & George Dance]?
I'm suggesting that byline because, even though you wrote all the
words, while I merely "monkeyed around" with the line breaks and
punctuation, I'd argue that my contribution to the above is at least
as important to the result as yours, and that therefore the resulting
poem, "crap" -- NOT "oh, crap", which remains your sole work -- is a
co-written work. I hope you agree. Not that I think "crap" is that
great a poem, or that I have big plans for it; just that I'd like to
have a co-authored poem with you under my belt (and hope you might
like that, too).
I'd suggest treating it the same as I'd treat any of my other co-
authored poems, with one exception: knowing your copyleft views, I'd
suggest the reprint policy for it to be: anyone can reprint it
wherever and whenever they want.
Does that work for you?
sirblob2
i loved it
>
> I'd suggest treating it the same as I'd treat any of my other co-
> authored poems, with one exception: knowing your copyleft views, I'd
> suggest the reprint policy for it to be: anyone can reprint it
> wherever and whenever they want.
>
> Does that work for you?
that was magnificient! majestic, absolutely mind gobbling! a treasure
to be had, begotten and numbered! a charm, an absolute absolute! thank
you thank you tytytytytyt!!! i even looked for you on facebook to no
avail. still, really stupendous!!!