Song / c&c

[George Dance]

Song

When days grow bored
with summer hues,
embracing brown
and turbid gray,
then look for love
in falling leaves
for love too often
falls
that
way.

--
GD

[nominal9]

Nice....short and sweet, just to my own liking.
But, "for love too often falls that way".... what's that :"mean"? As a
metaphor.... is it Positive, negative?,... love gained, love lost?...
I like the poem... but maybe I just like the metaphor without "getting
it".... my problem?
nominal9

[George Dance]

On Nov 21, 12:28 pm, nominal9 <nomin...@yahoo.com> wrote:
> Nice....short and sweet, just to my own liking.
> But, "for love too often falls that way".... what's that :"mean"? As a
> metaphor.... is it Positive, negative?,... love gained, love lost?...
> I like the poem... but maybe I just like the metaphor without "getting
> it".... my problem?
> nominal9
>

Thanks for reading, and for telling me you liked it. I'm into the
stage of posting my depressing poetry now, but this is a new one I
just wrote. (My first actual new poem since July, though I've been
revising ed the older ones I'm posting, sometimes a little, sometimes
a lot.)

I was feelng nostalgic (autumn always gets me that way), so I was
thinking 'falls' as in drops and dies like the leaves. But if someone
gets the idea it means 'drops down on you' unexpectedly, that'd be OK
with me. While I think the poet should have and try to communicate a
meaning, I don't think that the poet can dictate the definitive
meaning of the poem.

[nominal9]

was feelng nostalgic (autumn always gets me that way), so I was
thinking 'falls' as in drops and dies like the leaves. But if someone
gets the idea it means 'drops down on you' unexpectedly, that'd be OK
with me. While I think the poet should have and try to communicate a
meaning, I don't think that the poet can dictate the definitive

meaning of the poem. / George Dance


Ah yes.... disappointment... love lost....

then look for (AT) love
in (AS) falling leaves

for love too often
falls
that

way. ....

may I be so bold to suggest a slight rewrite?
nominal9

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[George Dance]

On Nov 24, 11:49 am, nominal9 <nomin...@yahoo.com> wrote:
>  was feelng nostalgic (autumn always gets me that way), so I was
> thinking 'falls' as in drops and dies like the leaves. But if someone
> gets the idea it means 'drops down on you' unexpectedly, that'd be OK
> with me. While I think the poet should have and try to communicate a
> meaning, I don't think that the poet can dictate  the definitive
> meaning of the poem. / George Dance
>
> Ah yes.... disappointment... love lost....
>
> then look for (AT) love
> in (AS) falling leaves
> for love too often
> falls

Thanks for the suggestion. I'll do with that what I do with
suggestions like that: make the changes and save them as an alternate
file. Then, the next time I pull the poem out to look at it
critically, I'll compare the two versions.