Note
Gregory Severance
1.
All right site to site and from site to site and from door to door.
Please oh please decide that and that and that at once. Define that
game of define that game they would definitely love that and walk in
the park with them. All right always all right always a pleasure to
decide it. They walk up the sidewalk with them from site to site.
Decide that they would walk up and on the sidewalk with them from site
to the site to site to site to site.
2.
A at bare black-nosed blood by cardinal’s cheats cocked comes could cut
dangles dangling deck earring fallen Fano fire fortunes from girl gray
hat her hillside how I if in it lapdog leaves lips lobe love mouth
nipple not of on one or out outside painting pooched-out red Renoir
remembering ribbon right rouged said silky smudge straw sudden summer
Tarot the until welling who wind-struck winter wiry with woman woods
you.
3.
They would always always walk up and down the street from door to door.
It is always a pleasure to serve that. And they would definitely like
it like it like it. At once. Walk in the door from the sidewalk and
play game of describe it describe it. With them walk indoors through it
and with them describe it and decide that and that. Play game of
reconstruct it they would like game of reconstruct that.
Note: Section 2 is composed of the vocabulary from the poem: Robert
Haas, “The Problem of Describing Color,” The New Yorker, 25 April 2005,
77.
http://www.santababylonia.net/untitled4N-w.pdf - with Note
http://www.santababylonia.net/untitled4-w.pdf - without Note
I'm of two minds on whether to include the Note when submitting this
poem to editors for publication. One mind enjoys the sneakiness of not
including it. The other mind wishes to invoke the intertextuality and
constructionism of including the Note.
WHERE I'M COMING FROM:
Sondheim's recent "apoplexy" post to the Poetics list motivated me to
get back over here to wryting-l.
I've been on various lists (beat-l, poetics, bohemian-l, invent-l,
intertheory, wryting-l), some now defunct, off and on, mostly lurking,
since 1997, so I'm familiar with many on this list.
I live in New York City and my day job is Network Architect for a large
magazine publishing conglomerate. I've had poems appear in Peter
Ganick's POTEPOETZINESEVENTEEN (1999) and in ~Coffeehouse: Writings
from the Web~ eds. Levi Asher and Christian Crumlish (Manning, 1997).
Gregory Severance
August
Dance For Cats My Color Six Legga Chemical More Your
Heart Body Soul Misconstrued Multitude Poison Is Dibit
Double-Diaphragm Radome Yo I'm World To Watch Me Pluck
Be Diffuse Reflection Contaminate Had To And Walk Ya
You're Equal Peace Perfects Insects Burn Bad For Dual
Anamorphic Reflector Telescope One God One Yo I'm Heated Wit
Insects Burn Bad For Dual Warning Phenomenology Countries
Exempt From Live And Your Mind This Freedom Freedom!
Percunious Bugs But Two Out Of Combine Poison Is Dibit
Double-Diaphragm Radome Yo My Forefathers Hung Free You're
Just I'm First Voice At First Voice At All To
Beat On Reason Why We There? Ya You're Just Chemical
More Your Heart Body Soul Misconstrued Multitude T Been
Defeated Before Dual-Use Technology Drone So Bring Turtle
These Be Mall That Crawl And Walk Ya Deuterium Fluoride
Section Like Chemical More Your Heart Body Soul
Tongue If You Would Decapitate Dry-Ice Weapon Cause Leader
You Developing Critical Technologies Kept Word Freedom's
At All To This Word Is Bein' Free Umi And Your Mind This
Freedom Freedom! Percunious Bugs But Two Out Of Combine
Poison Is Dibit Double-Diaphragm Radome Yo I'm Word
Detective Taggant Taggant Difference Acoustic Wave
Generation Named This Word Freedom's At World To
Communicate Shotgun And Shells Wit Ya'll Department/Service
Military Deception Termites And Food Dongle Release
Reason Why We Face And Now Freedom They Mouse Lice One Aim
First Voice At All Roaches Germs Involved I'm First
Voice At All To This Word Freedom's At All Roaches Germs
Involved I'm First Voice At All To Come To Communicate
Shotgun And Harmony Me Handy Given No Hope Without
Doubly-Conformal Antenna Em Kick Em Candidate To And Vic Em
Different Views Rappin Infection Imagine Life Without
Doppler Shift Denial Of Service Attack E-Mail Bomb Dual
Warning Phenomenology Countries Exempt From Live And Shells
Wit Ya'll Department/Service Military Deception Termites And
Dust Grime And Differential Global Positioning Have
No Matter What Was To Beat On Problems Double Pulsing
Thats Problems Double Pulsing Thats Dual-Mode
Expendable Cha Name Dense Wavelength Division Multiplexing
Choose Doppler Shift Denial Of Service Attack E-Mail Bomb
Dual Tone Multi Frequency And Harmony Me Is Small Pure Roach
Difference Acoustic Wave Generation Named This Song Freedom
Freedom! Percunious Bugs But No Hope Without Doppler
Sonar Velocity Log Race Thats Ddt Invasion For What
Freedom They Mouse Lice One Aim And One Aim And They Mouse
Lice One Universal Family Puss Choice At Word And Now
So Bring Turtle These Be Freedom Ring Been Hurtin' So
True And Measure To Better To Bite Any Rhymes Ya'll
Department/Service Military Deception Termites And Dust
Grime And Dust Grime And Differential Global Positioning
Have Different Views Rappin Infection Imagine Life Without
Freedom They Mouse Lice One Yo My Forefathers Hung Free Umi
And Driver's Vision Enhancer Got Rid Of Slavery But Stick Em
Candidate To Come To Watch Me Pluck Be Diffuse Reflection
Contaminate Had To Watch Me Pluck Be Diffuse Reflection
Contaminate Had To Beat On Wax Cause There's Not Lot That
Live And Driver's Vision Enhancer Got Rid Of Three Of
Combine Double Pull Freedom To Bite Any Rhymes Ya'll
Department/Service Military Deception Termites And
Differential Global Positioning Have Different Views Rappin
Infection Imagine Life Without But No Matter What Self-Forging
Fragment
Alan Sondheim
Wonder if including the note would create intellectual property issues in
the minds of conservative editors? It's a moot and maybe silly point. I
love the parasitic quality of conversion - Alan
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Gregory Severance
> Wonder if including the note would create intellectual property issues
> in the minds of conservative editors?
I imagine it would. If I were savvy, I wouldn't submit to conservative
editors. I have a series of these where the second of three sections is
composed of a converted "New Yorker poem". I think I'll do both: submit
some with a note and some without a note. - Gregory Severance
Alan Sondheim
It would be interesting, some time or other, to submit the _same_ work
under two different names to the New Yorker, for example - to see if the
return are consistent, or if the 'plagiarism' (?) would be caught!
- Alan