Very Good! Thanks for making this up!
My only criticisms:
1. I'd invert paragraph 1 + 2. I think it reads a lot better with
information about Hive13 before information about the event.
2. I'd mix language a little more and use both the words "makerspace" and
"hackerspace." Was this a deliberate decision when dealing with John Q.
3. I'd mention something about the 3 year anniversary of the space.
I'm using it as a guideline for submitting this as an event to CityBeat.
Hopefully it's not too late to make next week's edition. I found Hive13
through Citybeat - we should put something in their events section.
On Wed, Jul 11, 2012 at 1:59 PM, Tiffany Vincent